Argument142 【0706G－LOVEAW小组】第14次作业

小猫儿UID：2297873

142.The article entitled 'Eating Iron' in last month's issue of Eating for Health reported that a recent study found a correlation between high levels of iron in the diet and an increased risk of heart disease. Further, it is well established that there is a link between large amounts of red meat in the diet and heart disease, and red meat is high in iron. On the basis of the study and the well-established link between red meat and heart disease, we can conclude that the correlation between high iron levels and heart disease, then, is most probably a function of the correlation between red meat and heart disease.

1、  研究是否有效
2、  牛羊中铁的含量具体是多少，是否明显高于其他事务中铁的含量
3、  牛羊肉与心脏病的联系是否因为铁，有没有其他物质导致，又或者吃牛羊肉多的人比较喜欢看恐怖片，所以心脏病发病率高

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The conclusion that the correlation between high iron levels and heart disease is most probably a function of that between red meat and heart disease suffers from several vital fallacies during the reasoning.

First, the arguer cites a dubious survey to indicate the correlation between the high levels of iron in the diet and an increased risk of heart disease. There are no evidences whether the survey has a reasonable process at scientific respect. It is possible that the informants in the investigation suffer from congenital heart disease which has no correlation with the level of iron in their diets. However, they coincidentally eat a lot of iron in their daily diet, which causes the surveyor think that it is the high level of iron in their diet that results in the heart disease. Without ruling out such possibilities, I can not simply accept that there is any correlation between the level of iron in people’s diet and the increased risk of heart disease.

Secondly, it is doubtful whether the level of iron in the red meat is notably higher than other food. The arguer provides no data information which makes the reasoning unconvincing. It is possible that the quantity of iron in chicken is much higher than that in red meat. Without certain data unimpeachably proving the notably higher level of iron in the red meat compared with other food, it can not be accepted that the level of iron in the iron in the red meat is so high that it can cause the increased risk of heart disease.

In addition, I can not simply accept the dubious reasoning to prove that the high levels of iron in the red meat arouse the correlation between the red meat and heart disease. Even though there is high level of iron in red meat, there is no evidence that the level of other substances is lower than that of iron. It is probable that the fat, which is also stored in a large amount in red meat, that leads to the appearance of heart disease. Moreover, chances are certain unknown substance in red meat enhance the tendency of watching dracula movies, which is the actual reason why red meat in diet has a certain correlation with heart disease. Without ruling out such possibilities, it is too arbitrary to draw the conclusion that the high level of iron in the red meat results in the correlation between red meat and heart disease.

To sum up, not only are the evidences in the argument insufficient, the reasoning process is also impeachable, which makes the conclusion arbitrary at best as it stands.

iq28UID：2152875

又或者吃牛羊肉多的人比较喜欢看恐怖片，所以心脏病发病率高

我向版主申请给你这句话加精.....

红肉就不改了~有同主题呢
看你另外两篇

feljo414UID：2210010

关于你的这篇文章，好像我们的思路都差不多，正如同主题所说都有一定的缺陷。
不过感觉上没有什么大错，还是不错的

andyljhUID：2121560

142.The article entitled 'Eating Iron' in last month's issue of Eating for Health reported that a recent study found a correlation between high levels of iron in the diet and an increased risk of heart disease. Further, it is well established that there is a link between large amounts of red meat in the diet and heart disease, and red meat is high in iron. On the basis of the study and the well-established link between red meat and heart disease, we can conclude that the correlation between high iron levels and heart disease, then, is most probably a function of the correlation between red meat and heart disease.

1、  研究是否有效
2、  牛羊中铁的含量具体是多少，是否明显高于其他事务中铁的含量
3、  牛羊肉与心脏病的联系是否因为铁，有没有其他物质导致，又或者吃牛羊肉多的人比较喜欢看恐怖片，所以心脏病发病率高

TIME:28min   WORDS:439
The conclusion that the correlation between high iron levels and heart disease is most probably a function of that between red meat and heart disease suffers from several vital fallacies during the reasoning.
简短开头是一种很好的方法，但是研究下官方论文你就会发现概要的介绍下出现的错误还是有必要的。我想说的是你的开头过于简单了。。。。


First, the arguer cites a dubious survey（是 study吧） to indicate the correlation between the high levels of iron in the diet and an increased risk of heart disease. There are no evidences whether the survey has a （an？ ）reasonable process at scientific respect. It is possible that the informants in the investigation suffer from congenital heart disease which has no correlation with the level of iron in their diets. （in the diet 的意思应该是食谱吧）However, they coincidentally（这个词更常用的意思是一致性吧。。我觉得用by chance，或happen会更好） eat a lot of iron in their daily diet, which causes the surveyor think that it is the high level of iron in their diet that results in the heart disease. Without ruling out such possibilities, I can not simply accept that there is any correlation between the level of iron in people’s diet and the increased risk of heart disease.（其实质疑study还是可以写很多的，可以再写点。）

Secondly, （注意和第一段的开头词对应）it is doubtful whether the level of iron in the red meat is notably higher than other food. The arguer provides no data information which makes the reasoning unconvincing. It is possible that the quantity of iron in chicken is much higher than that in red meat. Without certain data unimpeachably proving the notably higher level of iron in the red meat compared with other food, it can not be accepted that the level of iron in the iron in the red meat（不通顺吧） is so high that it can cause the increased risk of heart disease.（其实你的意思是不是想说可能别的食物含铁更高，所以不一定就是红肉引起的这个关系，我个人觉得这个嘛，还是要看对function的理解，如果只是一个作用的理解，你的论点就不成立了，但是如果理解为决定性，那就可以，你说呢，这个问题我也很困惑，强烈要求高手支招）

In addition, I can not simply accept the dubious reasoning to prove that the high levels of iron in the red meat arouse the correlation between the red meat and heart disease. Even though there is high level of iron in red meat, there is no evidence that the level of other substances is lower than that of iron. It is probable that the fat, which is also stored in a large amount in red meat, that leads to the appearance of heart disease. Moreover, chances are certain unknown substance in red meat enhance the tendency of watching dracula movies, which is the actual reason why red meat in diet has a certain correlation with heart disease. Without ruling out such possibilities, it is too arbitrary to draw the conclusion that the high level of iron in the red meat results in the correlation between red meat and heart disease.（这段论述的很棒，其实也就是这个argu最明显的错误，他因法即可搞定）

To sum up, not only are the evidences in the argument insufficient, the reasoning process is also impeachable, which makes the conclusion arbitrary at best as it stands.（结尾模板化了，你说呢？？ ）

有不同意见我们联系沟通吧，我21号考，你呢