issue103 [0710G ＋U Aug小组]第2次作业 iris

vampirelqkUID: 2350379

Issue 103.
"The study of history has value only to the extent that it is relevant to our daily lives."

WORDS: 692          TIME: 00:46:13          DATE: 2007-7-26 20:16:00

The issue that the study has value only when it is relevant to our daily lives is totally a fallacy. I hold the opinion that study the history not only relevant to our daily lives has its potential value, but far beyond our lives can get its value as well.
First reason I insist is that our lives can be improved to be better or joyful through the study of history, in this point I agree with the issue. In a society with socal and technological developping rapidly as ours, we can’t ignore the machine revolution and knowledge economy, which can be regarded as history affairs that already took place hundreds of years ago. As a Chinese empirer Li Shimin once said (and I paraphrase):” if we take a brone plate as a mirror, we can dress ourselves; take the history as a mirror, we can know whether there is a rise or a fall in social development; take a friend as a mirror, we can know whether we are doing right things or wrong.” This conclusion well illustrates that if we want to know our social development better, which certainly affect our daily lives since we are the resident make up the society, we had better study history. History just like a mirror that reflects the flurishing and decandence of the society.
But we can’t make conclusion too absolutely that if it doesn’t correlate with our daily lives then the study of history will lack its value, which seems presumptuous. Are the numberous inventions in the history all useful to our lives or help to put the society forward? As far as now, not all things seem to be good, such as nuclear weapon which put us in the threaten that one day we human beings will be destroyed be our proud invention, environment pollution that let us live in the harsh condition, traffic jam and unemployment which can partly ascribe to the technologies. The definition of the item “history” can be so vast that everything happened before now, even a second ago, can be history, not only the remains in the desert which once was a wealty country or fossiles buried underearth are history. Thus, everything we already have and every informed that can be achieved from whatever medias can regarded as “study of history”. I will argue that when one person trys to invent a tool that will make to accomplish particular problem, he will probably to look for the useful information about experiment once took by forrunners, but he will not know how his invention will do good to our daily lives. The atom bomb is a tremendous invention and a progress in the science history but it is safe to say that atom bombs make us more dangerous rather than to make the world peaceful and friendly. Since people can’t tell whether a technology will do good or bad to our lives, we can’t deduce that only if things relate to our daily lives that the study of history make sense and acquire value. If it was the case, people who are facing the threaten to starvation haven’t to study to study the dinosaur fossil founded in their country, what will the fossil do good to their lives? Neither should they support the archiologist to study the old books which record the how history developping and evolving unearthed according to the issue, cause it does no good to improve the condition of the human lives. Certainly it is not the case, still the value exists as well studying the history for it makes us to realize whether we are in this unique planet and how our earth will develop and how our goals will be fulfilled.
In summary, I didn’t agree the notion that only when the study of history has something to do with our daily lives does it gains value, cause we can’t fortell whether we are study the history that is relevant to our lives and neither can we know it does good or bad eventually. Study the history makes us know better about ourselves and put the society forward in its right way.

totalsm45518UID: 2286658

The issue that the study has value only when it is relevant to our daily lives is totally a fallacy（我看范文当中很少有这种完全否定的，要慎用啊）. I hold the opinion that study the history(studying history) not only relevant to our daily lives has its potential value, but far beyond our lives can get its value as well.(这句话有多个主语，好好整理一下，看着有点乱)
First reason（the first reason,但是这里为什么用reason？） I insist is that our lives can be improved to be better or joyful through the study of history, in this point I agree with the issue（你前面既然都说是totally a fallacy，这里又说agree，矛盾啊）. In a society with socal and technological developping rapidly as ours（什么意思，没有看懂）, we can’t ignore the machine revolution and knowledge economy, which can be regarded as history affairs that already took place hundreds of years ago. As a Chinese empirer Li Shimin once said (and I paraphrase):” if we take a brone plate as a mirror, we can dress ourselves; take the history as a mirror, we can know whether there is a rise or a fall in social development; take a friend as a mirror, we can know whether we are doing right things or wrong.（只要引用第二条就可以了，如果都用，就强调第三条了）” This conclusion well illustrates that if we want to know our social development better, which certainly affect our daily lives since we are the resident make up the society, we had better study history. History just like a mirror that reflects the flurishing and decandence of the society. （这句没有谓语，但是观点很好）
But we can’t make conclusion too absolutely that if it doesn’t correlate with our daily lives then the study of history will lack its value, which seems presumptuous. Are the numberous inventions in the history all useful to our lives or help to put the society forward? As far as now, not all things seem to be good, such as nuclear weapon which put us in the threaten that one day we human beings will be destroyed be our proud invention, environment pollution that let us live in the harsh condition, traffic jam and unemployment which can partly ascribe to the technologies（这里的例子有点过了，我们的主题是历史，而不是现在，你应该着重说历史除了和现实生活有关以外还和什么有关，而不是反正现在的事物没有value，这样的反正是不正确的）. The definition of the item “history” can be so vast that everything happened before now, even a second ago, can be history, not only the remains in the desert which once was a wealty country or fossiles buried underearth are history. Thus, everything we already have and every informed that can be achieved from whatever medias can regarded as “study of history”（这个观点很新颖，也可以说我们也是在创造历史）. I will argue that when one person trys to invent a tool that will make to accomplish particular problem, he will probably to look for the useful information about experiment once took by forrunners, but he will not know how his invention will do good to our daily lives. The atom bomb is a tremendous invention and a progress in the science history but it is safe to say that atom bombs make us more dangerous rather than to make the world peaceful and friendly. Since people can’t tell whether a technology will do good or bad to our lives, we can’t deduce that only if things relate to our daily lives that the study of history make sense and acquire value（这个因果论证我不是很赞同，你说不能区分一个科技是好还是坏，这个和历史是否只和我们生活有关没有关系啊，这个论证很牵强，而且有点跑题）. If it was the case, people who are facing the threaten to starvation haven’t to study to study the dinosaur fossil founded in their country, what will the fossil do good to their lives? Neither should they support the archiologist to study the old books which record the how history developping and evolving unearthed according to the issue, cause it does no good to improve the condition of the human lives. Certainly it is not the case, still the value exists as well studying the history for it makes us to realize whether we are in this unique planet and how our earth will develop and how our goals will be fulfilled.
In summary, I didn’t agree the notion that only when the study of history has something to do with our daily lives does it gains value, cause we can’t fortell whether we are study the history that is relevant to our lives and neither can we know it does good or bad eventually. Study the history makes us know better about ourselves and put the society forward in its right way.
怎么说呢，后面的我就有点蒙了，有点看不太清楚你的论点了，具体的我们在交流
你的论据很丰富，应该像你学习
还有就是一定要围绕自己的观点阿，最好写提纲，不然你这么多论据，看得出你思维很发散，这是好事，就像你文章中有很多新的观点，但是这也有弊端，就是容易写跑，所以写之前先写提纲，再围绕提纲写论据，一定会写得很好的，加油哦！！

xiefen0223UID: 2301911

写得很顺而且语气很义正言辞，论据多得眼花缭乱～让人不得不服。

宝宝让我看看是不是偏题，我看问题主要是在论证第二个论点的时候扯得太远了，很多论据都是为了证明people can’t tell whether a technology will do good or bad to our lives,然后用so we can’t deduce that only if things relate to our daily lives that the study of history make sense and acquire value.。。。。移花接木 。。。
写作的技巧很不错，在general statement 和 specific details 之间 move back and forth。。.