argument237 我们的九月 第十六次作业

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TOPIC: ARGUMENT237 - The following appeared as part of an article in a local Beauville newspaper.

"According to a government report, last year the city of Dillton reduced its corporate tax rate by 15 percent; at the same time, it began offering relocation grants and favorable rates on city utilities to any company that would relocate to Dillton. Within 18 months, two manufacturing companies moved to Dillton, where they employ a total of 300 people. Therefore, the fastest way for Beauville to stimulate economic development and hence reduce unemployment is to provide tax incentives and other financial inducements that encourage private companies to relocate here."
WORDS: 453          TIME: 0:30:00          DATE: 2006-8-10

The author suggests that Beauville should provide tax incentives and other financial inducements to encourage private companies to relocated and it is the fastest way to stimulate economic development and reduce unemployment, based on the experience of Dillton. However, the suggestion is unpersuasive after a careful examination revealing some flaws on some aspects.

First, the author problematic based his suggestion on the experience of Dillton, who reduced its corporate tax rate last year and two manufacturing companies moves to Dillton within 18 month. For one thing, no evidence is provided to indicate the two manufacturing companies moved to Dillton for the favorable tax rates, maybe it is the location and condition of transportation of Dillton that is attractive to the companies. For the other thing, the author fails to cite detail of the situation of economy and unemployment of Dillton, it is equally possible that new companies made the local economy decreased and unemployment increased. Thus, it is not persuasive that Dillton hold a successful experience that Beauville should follow.

Even Dillton's policy is successful, it is unconvincing that Beauville should follow them. Since little information of the condition of Beauville is offered, it is possible that the location and condition is not suitable for manufacturing, even the tax incentives is provied and other financial inducements is attractive, rarely companies will come.  If then, new policy should be put into practice to stimulate economic development, but not simply copy the Dillton's. Hence, if no further information is offered, it is not convincing that Beauville should provide tax incentives and other financial inducements.

Besides, even the policy of Beauville encourage companies to relocate there, it will not necessarily stimulate economic development and reduce unemployment. Such possibility should not be ignored that the new coming companies will damage local economy by making local enterprise shrink and even bankrupt, thus causing large amount of unemployment ,which is more than the employment by the new coming companies. Therefore, it is too hasty to claim that the relocation of new companies will stimulate local economic development and hence reduce unemployment.

The last, even the new coming companies will benefit to development of local economy and reduce unemployment, it is too hasty to consider it to be the fastest way, without compare to other solutions.

To sum up, the author unpersuasive to suggest that Beauville should provide tax incentives and other financial inducements to encourage private companies to relocate here and to stimulated economic development and reduce unemployment. If no further information of the condition of Beauville that is suitable to manufacture should be provided, and the comprehensive consideration on the possible influence of the new coming company should be taken into account , the argument will not cogent.

badouUID: 2240203

The author suggests that Beauville should provide tax incentives and other financial inducements to encourage private companies to relocated and it is the fastest way to stimulate economic development and reduce unemployment, based on the experience of Dillton. However, the suggestion is unpersuasive after a careful examination revealing some flaws on some aspects.

First, the author problematic based his suggestion on the experience of Dillton, who reduced its corporate tax rate last year and two manufacturing companies moves(move) to Dillton within 18 month. For one thing, no evidence is provided to indicate the two manufacturing companies moved to Dillton for the favorable tax rates, maybe it is the location and condition of transportation of Dillton that is(are?) attractive to the companies. For the other thing, the author fails to cite (the) detail of the situation of economy and unemployment of Dillton, it is equally possible that new companies made the local economy decreased and unemployment increased. Thus, it is not persuasive that Dillton hold a successful experience that Beauville should follow.

Even Dillton's policy is successful, it is unconvincing that Beauville should follow them. Since little information of the condition of Beauville is offered, it is possible that the location and condition is not suitable for manufacturing, even the tax incentives is(are) provied and other financial inducements is(are) attractive, rarely(rare) companies will come.  If then, new policy should be put into practice to stimulate economic development, but not simply copy the Dillton's. Hence, if no further information is offered, it is not convincing that Beauville should provide tax incentives and other financial inducements.

Besides, even the policy of Beauville encourage companies to relocate there, it will not necessarily stimulate economic development and reduce unemployment. Such possibility should not be ignored that the new coming companies will damage local economy by making local enterprise shrink and even bankrupt, thus causing large amount of unemployment ,which is more than the employment by the new coming companies. Therefore, it is too hasty to claim that the relocation of new companies will stimulate local economic development and hence reduce unemployment.

The last, even the new coming companies will benefit to development of local economy and reduce unemployment, it is too hasty to consider it to be the fastest way, without compare(“comparison” maybe better) to other solutions.

To sum up, the author unpersuasive to(unpersuasively?) suggest that Beauville should provide tax incentives and other financial inducements to encourage private companies to relocate here and to stimulated economic development and reduce unemployment. If no further information of the condition of Beauville that is suitable to manufacture (suitable for manufacturing --- “A is suitable to v” can only be used when “v A” is a phrase )should be provided, and the comprehensive consideration on the possible influence of the new coming company should be taken into account, the argument will not (be) cogent.

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