argument133 不太好写 拍者定重重回拍

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133.
The argument concludes that Academic High School should replace its after-school performing-arts programs with computer-technology programs. However, the argument is fundamentally based on scant evidence and flawed reasoning that lead to unconvincing conclusion.

To begin with, the arguer unfairly assumes that the students in Techno High School support such a replacement. The arguer indicates that the total enrollment in all after-school activities after the replacement remains the same. Yet, perhaps most of them are those who attend another physic or dancing program. If so, the total number of attending technology-computer program can decline significantly. Moreover, the fact that many Techno students choose a major directly related to their after-school activities after entering collage proves nothing about the total number of Techno students who interest in the technology-computer programs. Perhaps, most of them are those who attend after-school performing-arts programs. If this is the case, it would serve to undermine the arguer's assumption.

Moreover, even assuming that the Techno students favor such a replacement, the arguer rests on a false analysis to assume that the replacement in Techno can successfully apply to Academia. Common sense tells me that Techno High School students are more inclined to participate computer-technology programs than are the students of academia school. Accordingly, such a replacement may cause dissatisfaction among the students. Furthermore, the factors such as the quality of teachers, the equipments, the place, and other factors must be taken into account before any change. Perhaps, Academia has fewer qualified computer teachers, poor computer and equipments, and insufficient places. Any scenario, if true, would serve to undermine the arguer’s assumption.

Last but not least, it is falsely to say that most students do not interest in the performing arts based on the 10 percent of Academia’s graduating seniors who choose performing arts as their major field of study in their first year of college. Nevertheless, the 10 percent may be a large part of the graduating seniors by comparison to those who chose other curricula as their major field of study. Maybe the percentage of other areas’ students is all lower than 10 percent. Therefore, if this is the case, the arguer cannot convince me that most students are not interested in the performing arts.

In sum, the argument is not thoroughly well supported as it stands. To bolster the argument, the arguer must provide better and further evidence that such replacement of its after-school performing-arts programs with computer-technology programs can benefits the Academia students.

[ Last edited by staralways on 2005-8-6 at 18:54 ]

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我来回拍，不过这个题7 8月都没考过，你居然有精力写pfpf

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还没开始写机井的题目呢，是不是很晕啊

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"Academia High School should abolish its after-school performing-arts programs and replace them with computer-technology programs. When nearby Techno High School did so last year, total enrollment in all of its after-school activities remained about the same. Moreover, on entering college, many Techno students chose a major directly related to their after-school activities. On the other hand, last year only 10 percent of Academia's graduating seniors chose performing arts as their major field of study in their first year of college, clearly indicating that most students do not have a strong interest in the performing arts."


The argument concludes that Academic High School should replace its after-school performing-arts programs with computer-technology programs. However, the argument is fundamentally based on scant evidence and flawed reasoning that lead to unconvincing conclusion.

To begin with, the arguer unfairly assumes that the students in Techno High School support such a replacement. The arguer indicates that the total enrollment in all after-school activities after the replacement remains the same. Yet, perhaps most of them are those who attend another physic or dancing program. If so, the total number of attending technology-computer program can decline significantly. 没看懂，为什么attend other program就等于total number of attending technology-computer program decline Moreover, the fact that many Techno students choose a major directly related to their after-school activities after entering collage proves nothing about the total number of Techno students who interest in the technology-computer programs. Perhaps, most of them are those who attend after-school performing-arts programs. 需要更详细的论述来证明你的观点，这句话我是看了好几遍才明白你什么意思的。如果我写这个题，我不会把这个点作为一个批驳点的。If this is the case, it would serve to undermine the arguer's assumption.

Moreover, even assuming that the Techno students favor such a replacement, the arguer rests on a false analysis to assume that the replacement in Techno can successfully apply to Academia. Common sense tells me that Techno High School students are more inclined to participate computer-technology programs than are the students of academia school. Accordingly, such a replacement may cause dissatisfaction among the students. Furthermore, the factors such as the quality of teachers, the equipments, the place, and other factors must be taken into account before any change. Perhaps, Academia has fewer qualified computer teachers, poor computer and equipments, and insufficient places. Any scenario, if true, would serve to undermine the arguer’s assumption.

Last but not least, it is falsely to say that most students do not interest in the performing arts based on the 10 percent of Academia’s graduating seniors who choose performing arts as their major field of study in their first year of college. Nevertheless, the 10 percent may be a large part of the graduating seniors by comparison to those who chose other curricula 不会把课程当专业的,field怎么样？ as their major field of study. Maybe the percentage of other areas’ students is all lower than 10 percent. Therefore, if this is the case, the arguer cannot convince me that most students are not interested in the performing arts.

In sum, the argument is not thoroughly well supported as it stands. To bolster the argument, the arguer must provide better and further evidence that such replacement of its after-school performing-arts programs with computer-technology programs can benefits the Academia students.
写得不错，没什么好拍的地方

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你哪天考啊？
要是明年6g的话，不急看jj也行啊

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马上开始看了。只是准备的不充分啊！issue题目还没过一遍呢，怎么说也得先看一遍吧。到时考试不考机井上的，不就死定了!

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辛苦了，有什么要互拍的尽管说啊，给我连接，我帮你拍啊。你是几号考啊？

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没看懂，为什么attend other program就等于total number of attending technology-computer program decline
The arguer indicates that the total enrollment in all after-school activities after the replacement remains the same. Yet, perhaps most of them are those who attend another physic or dancing program. If so, the total number of attending technology-computer program can decline significantly.
这句话说的是总的课余活动中的人数保持不变，可其中可能大多数参加的是体育或跳舞之类的活动，因而参加计算机技术活动的人数就可能很少，因而可能下降了。
唉，原来是我“一厢情愿”啊，没说清楚，怪不得你看不清楚。
很感激 ！



Moreover, the fact that many Techno students choose a major directly related to their after-school activities after entering collage proves nothing about the total number of Techno students who interest in the technology-computer programs. Perhaps, most of them are those who attend after-school performing-arts programs. 需要更详细的论述来证明你的观点，这句话我是看了好几遍才明白你什么意思的。如果我写这个题，我不会把这个点作为一个批驳点的。

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Originally posted by czl223 at 2005-8-6 19:02
辛苦了，有什么要互拍的尽管说啊，给我连接，我帮你拍啊。你是几号考啊？

我19号

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真的希望我也是19号才考。现在是欲哭无泪啊