argument76 443words，怎么会这么少~~~~

echostateUID: 194935

Here the author claims that Luxess is really effective in improving facial skin, based up the fact that in a study of Luxess, a group of volunteers report that their skin look and felt much better after one month of applying Luxess as well as mild soap every morning. However, the author may be someone related to the company of Luxess and this argument is rather one-sided. Regardless to who the author is, there are many facets of this argument that the author fails to notice or choose to ignore.

To begin with, for a survey to be reliable, it must ensure that the sampling are representative of the whole customers and take into account many other factor such as the ages, sex, initial skin conditions, and so on. In the study above, however, the author provides no information about these. For instance, we know nothing about the ages of volunteers. It is entirely possible that the survey only focus on a narrow range of ages. Further, we also do not know the initial skin conditions of these respondents, perhaps most of them are with extremely well-maintained skin and Luxess is only useful for this kind of customers.

Moreover, the author conclude without solid evidence that it is applying Luxess everyday morning that lead to the improvement of appearance and feeling of skin. Nonetheless, without solid evidence, this causality is still full of loopholes. Actually, there exist more than a few possible alternatives which can be responsible for the desirable effect. For example, the author offers no information to rule out the possibility that the mild soap and only the mild soap play a vital
role in improving skin conditions. It is also likely that these respondents have applied some other effective measures to make their skin better. In either event, the author can not safely arrive at the conclusion that it is Luxess that performs as a main contributor in the experiment.

Finally, mere one month is too short to evalute the effect of a face cream. Lacking evidence to the contrary, it is entirely probable that most of these volunteers has used some other face creams before this experiment and the improvement we observed in this survey should be contributed to other creams. Furthermore, the author furnishes no information of the long-term function of Luxess. Perhaps it will do harm to our skins three months later. In short, we could not ensure that Luxess is beneficial to our skins without some other information.

In last analysis, a convincing argument should depend on reliable survey, reasonable reasoning, and rule out other possibilities that undermine its basis. The author fails to do these.

[ Last edited by staralways on 2005-7-20 at 23:51 ]

echostateUID: 194935

发现一限时就写不了太多
30分钟还是不够~~

seraph_hydeUID: 184809

字少没关系啊，我现在就在尽力把字数降低，这样文章条理更清除，写起来也可以避免超时

ahqing008UID: 181498

Here the author claims that Luxess is really effective in improving facial skin, based up on the fact that in a study of Luxess, a group of volunteers report that their skin look and felt much better after one month of applying Luxess as well as mild soap every morning. However, the author may be someone related to the company of Luxess and this argument is rather one-sided. 理解你想表达的意思，但是感觉表达的有点含糊,再看看范文是怎么写的，one－sided和对作者身份的猜测最好分开Regardless to of who the author is, there are many facets of this argument that the author fails to notice or choose to ignore.
开头不错，能看出来仔细研究过范文！
To begin with, for a survey to be reliable, it must ensure that the sampling are representative of the whole customers and take into account many other factor such as the ages, sex, initial skin conditions, and so on. In the study above, however, the author provides no information about these. For instance, we know nothing about the ages of volunteers. It is entirely possible that the survey only focus on a narrow range of ages. Further, we also do not know the initial skin conditions of these respondents, perhaps most of them are with extremely well-maintained skin and Luxess is only useful for this kind of customers.
想字数多，结尾再总结一下！
Moreover, the author concludeconcludes without solid evidence that it is applying Luxess everyday everymorning that lead to the improvement of appearance and feeling of skin. Nonetheless, without solid evidence,这段开头到现在重复了两次without solid evidence this causality is still full of loopholes. 头一次见这个用法，能给解释解释吗？Actually, there exist more than a few more than a few?possible alternatives which can be responsible for the desirable effect. For example, the author offers no information to rule out the possibility that the mild soap and only the mild soap play a vital role in improving skin conditions.在我看来，你这句话可以分开写：一句写mild soap可能起作用，再一句写很可能完全是mild soap导致 It is also likely that these respondents have applied some other effective measures to make their skin better. In either event, the author can not safely arrive at the conclusion that it is Luxess that performs as a main contributor in the experiment.结尾不错！

Finally, mere one month is too short to evalute the effect of a face cream. Lacking evidence to the contrary, it is entirely probable that most of these volunteers has used some other face creams before this experiment and the improvement we observed in this survey should be contributed to other creams.其实这个理由用在这里也可以，但是用在不了解实验的情况，第一段处也可以！ Furthermore, the author furnishes no information of the long-term function of Luxess. Perhaps it will do harm to our skins three months later. In short, we could not ensure that Luxess is beneficial to our skins without some other information.other information？这里最好限定是什么information

In last analysis, a convincing argument should depend on reliable survey, reasonable reasoning, and rule out other possibilities that undermine its basis. The author fails to do these.

分析的可以，用词也挺准确！
结尾很简练，但正如你所说，简练的结尾就不会有很多的字数！
个人感觉不用太在意字数，看考试的情况，时间紧的话这种简练的结尾完全可以达到效果的！

chris_zhUID: 2101887

Here the author claims that Luxess is really effective in improving facial skin, based up onthe fact that in a study of Luxess, a group of volunteers report that their skin look and felt much better after one month of applying Luxess as well as mild soap every morning. However, the author may be someone related to the company of Luxess 我觉得这样的话有一点多余and this argument is rather one-sided. Regardless to who the author is, there are many facets of this argument that the author fails to notice or choose to ignore.

To begin with, for a survey to be reliable, it must ensure that the sampling are representative of the whole customers and take into account many other factors such as the ages, sex, initial skin conditions, and so on. In the study above, however, the author provides no information about these. For instance, we know nothing about the ages of volunteers. It is entirely possible that the survey only focus on a narrow range of ages. Further, we also do not know the initial skin conditions of these respondents, perhaps most of them are with extremely well-maintained skin and Luxess is only useful for this kind of customers. 我觉得这句话本身也有逻辑错误，如果是well-maintained skin那末后来的look and feel better岂不是更不能说明是Luxess的作用？

Moreover, the author conclude without solid evidence that it is applying Luxess everyday morning that lead to the improvement of appearance and feeling of skin. Nonetheless,这句话是承接又不是转折为什莫要用nonetheless? without solid evidence, this causality is still full of loopholes. Actually, there exist more than a few possible alternatives which can be responsible for the desirable effect. For example, the author offers no information to rule out the possibility that the mild soap and only the mild soap play a vital
role in improving skin conditions. It is also likely that these respondents have applied some other effective measures to make their skin better. In either event, the author can not safely arrive at the conclusion that it is Luxess that performs as a main contributor in the experiment.

Finally, mere one month is too short to evalute the effect of a face cream. Lacking evidence to the contrary, it is entirely probable that most of these volunteers has used some other face creams before this experiment and the improvement we observed in this survey should be contributed to other creams. Furthermore, the author furnishes no information of the long-term function of Luxess. Perhaps it will do harm to our skins three months later. In short, we could not ensure that Luxess is beneficial to our skins without some other information.

In last analysis, a convincing argument should depend on reliable survey, reasonable reasoning, and rule out other possibilities that undermine its basis. The author fails to do these.
你的用词很值得我学习的，很丰富。但我觉得在说时间不够长的时候你又提到了有其它因素的影响，是不是可以把它放到上一段去，要不然会显得有点乱，时间不够长是说他还没有足够到可以有效果的长度。一点个人意见，以后多多互改啊，我的在签名里都有

shanekunUID: 2104358

Here the author claims that Luxess is really effective in improving facial skin, based up(on) the fact that in a study of Luxess, a group of volunteers report that their skin look and felt much better after one month of applying Luxess as well as mild soap every morning. However, the author may be someone related to the company of Luxess and this argument is rather one-sided.(这句在下面没有明显体现阿，不如开头简洁一点) Regardless to who the author is, there are many facets of this argument that the author fails to notice or choose to ignore.

To begin with, for a survey to be reliable, it must ensure that the sampling are representative of the whole customers and take into account many other factor such as the ages, sex, initial skin conditions, and so on. In the study above, however, the author provides no information about these. For instance, we know nothing about the ages of volunteers. It is entirely possible that the survey only focus on a narrow range of ages. Further, we also do not know the initial skin conditions of these respondents, perhaps most of them are with extremely well-maintained skin and Luxess is only useful for this kind of customers.

Moreover, the author conclude without solid evidence that it is applying Luxess everyday morning that lead to the improvement of appearance and feeling of skin. Nonetheless, without solid evidence, this causality is still full of loopholes. Actually, there exist more than a few （这里好像不太通顺）possible alternatives which can be responsible for the desirable effect. For example, the author offers no information to rule out the possibility that the mild soap and only the mild soap play a vital
role in improving skin conditions. It is also likely that these respondents （换成volunteer/participants）have applied some other effective measures(products) to make their skin better(in this month). In either event, the author can not safely arrive at the conclusion that it is Luxess that performs as a main contributor in the experiment.

Finally, mere one month is too short to evalute the effect of a face cream. Lacking evidence to the contrary, it is entirely probable that most of these volunteers has used some other face creams before this experiment and the improvement we observed in this survey should be contributed to other creams. (看到这句怎么跟本段的ts有出入阿，TS说的是使用Luxess的时间短，而这里说的应该归为上一段的other posibilities 吧)Furthermore, the author furnishes no information of the long-term function of Luxess. Perhaps it will do harm to our skins three months later. In short, we could not ensure that Luxess is beneficial to our skins without some other information.

In last analysis, a convincing argument should depend on reliable survey, reasonable reasoning, and rule out other possibilities that undermine its basis. The author fails to do these.

楼主的条例还是清除的， 个人觉得B3可能稍有偏差，
另外，同感字数并非决定因素，把问题说清说透就可以了，
伤起十指不如断其一指 。。
等候回拍。。https://bbs.gter.net/viewthread.php?tid=305175