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jason0926UID: 200697

117The following is a memo from the business manager of Valu-Mart stores.

"Over 70 percent of the respondents to a recent survey reported that they are required to take more work home with them from the workplace than they were in the past. Since Valu-Mart has not seen impressive sales in its office-supply departments in the past, we should take advantage of this work-at-home trend by increasing at all Valu-Mart stores the stock of home office machines such as printers, small copy machines, paper shredders, and fax machines. We will also increase stock of office supplies such as paper, pens, and staplers. With these changes, our office-supply departments will become the most profitable component of our stores."


In this argument,the arguer concludes that Valu-Mart (VM) should increase at all its stores stock of home office machines and office supplies in order to make more profits.To support the conclusion,the arguer points out that a recent survey which reports over 70 percent of the respondents being required to to take more home work than before.However,this alone neither constitutes a logical argument in favor of the conclusion nor provides compelling support making the argument sound.The arguer ignores certain important concerns,which must be addressed to prove.In my point of view,this argument suffers from 3 flaws.

First of all,the survey cited by the author is too vague to be informative.We are not informed that how many people were surveyed.If,for instance,10 subjects were studied and 7 echoed,the conclusion about 70 percent would be highly suspectable.The arguer fails to point out that what kinds of people were surveyed,did they work in different companies,departments and regions.If they worked in the same company and knew each other,the conclusion is possible an unconvincing one.Furthermore,the arguer fails to indicate that how the survey was conducted.If who conducted the survey by themselves or if these questions were leading,people might echo with expected answers,thus the results would be greatly unconvining.

In addition,the arguer indicate that Valu-Mart has not seen impressive sales in its office-supply departments in the past.It is possible that the leader of this company didnot notice or emphasize the sales about office-supply ,or maybe home office machines was on good vendition but the leaded didnot know and  count the salerooms.On the other hand,taking work at home rather than at workplace otherwise is a temporary method,some companies maybe have heavy businesses in recent time and employees have to continue hie business at home since they cannot complish it in time in companies.The phenomena that people take work at home is just occasional.

Finally, it is unnecessary that increase at all Valu-Mart stores the stock of home office machines.Before not demonstrate the feasibility of selling these merchandises successfully.The company should make an experiment at some stores. If sales in these stores are satisfying,the company can spread this plan to all the stores.A good conductor should try his best to make profits for the company and employees rather than making unadvisable decisions before thinking roundly.

To sum up,though the argument seems to be plausible,in fact, it is neither sound nor persuasive.Not only does it leave out such key issues,but also cites in the analysis the evidence,which doesnot lend strong support to what arguer claims.To make the argument more convincing,the arguer would have to take the following conditions into consideration:  providing suitalble and convictive survey and investigating the sales about home office machines before making decison.If the argument includes the given factors discussed above, it would  have been more thorough and adequate.

[ Last edited by jason0926 on 2005-7-28 at 22:35 ]

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In this argument, the arguer concludes that Valu-Mart (VM) should increase at all its stores stock of home office machines and office supplies in order to make more profits. To support the conclusion, the arguer points out that a recent survey which reports over 70 percent of the respondents being required to take more home work than before. However, this alone neither constitutes a logical argument in favor of the conclusion nor provides compelling support making the argument sound. The arguer ignores certain important concerns, which must be addressed to prove. In my point of view, this argument suffers from 3 flaws. [开头略显冗长。]

First of all, the survey cited by the author is too vague to be informative. We are not informed that how many people were surveyed. If, for instance, 10 subjects were studied and 7 echoed, the conclusion about 70 percent would be highly suspectable. [是不是马上就指出为什么会引起怀疑呢？] The arguer fails to point out that what kinds of people were surveyed, did they work in different companies, departments and regions? If they worked in the same company and knew each other, the conclusion is possible an unconvincing one.[为什么是一个unconvincing的？] Furthermore, the arguer fails to indicate that how the survey was conducted. If who conducted the survey by themselves or if these questions were leading, people might echo with expected answers, thus the results would be greatly unconvincing. [在攻击的时候，在指出错误后可以考虑马上列出可能的情况，以显示你对问题思考的深度。]

In addition, the arguer indicates that Valu-Mart has not seen impressive sales in its office-supply departments in the past. It is possible that the leader of this company did not notice or emphasize the sales about office-supply, or maybe home office machines was on good vendition but the leaded did not know and count the salerooms. On the other hand, taking work at home rather than at workplace otherwise is a temporary method, some companies maybe have heavy businesses in recent time and employees have to continue his business at home since they cannot complish [complete] it in time in companies. The phenomena that people take work at home is just occasional.

Finally, it is unnecessary that increase at all Valu-Mart stores the stock of home office machines. Before not demonstrate the feasibility of selling these merchandises successfully. The company should make an experiment at some stores. If sales in these stores are satisfying, the company can spread this plan to all the stores. A good conductor should try his best to make profits for the company and employees rather than making unadvisable decisions before thinking roundly. [觉得对这个谬误的攻击还不够。]

To sum up, though the argument seems to be plausible, in fact, it is neither sound nor persuasive. Not only does it leave out such key issues, but also cites in the analysis the evidence, which does not lend strong support to what arguer claims. To make the argument more convincing, the arguer would have to take the following conditions into consideration:  providing suitable and convictive survey and investigating the sales about home office machines before making decision. If the argument includes the given factors discussed above, it would have been more thorough and adequate. [这句话感觉有点多余。]