Argument29（附提纲）好象各个小组都满员了呜 寄托新人恳请前辈猛拍～～必回拍

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好象各个小组都满员了５５５５５
寄托新人恳请前辈猛拍～～必回拍

１.四年前失败的原因不一定是环境一项，否则会导致继续的失败
２.参加循环再生项目市民不足以说明会欢迎禁停车的做法，有可能怨声载道
３.ＦＡＬＳＥ　ＡＮＡＬＯＧＹ（某城市污染很严重而我们不是）

Argument29  第1篇 让砖头来得更猛烈些吧！
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作者：寄托家园作文版普通用户     共用时间：31分36秒     457 words
从2005年7月11日2时0分到2005年7月11日2时31分
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When Ida McAllister ran for mayor of Lake City four years ago, she failed to win even 30 percent of the vote. But since then, McAllister has made public her commitment to environmental causes. She would be wise, therefore, to announce her intention to close all Lake City parks to automobile traffic, thus following the example of the former mayor of Plainsville, Alecia Yu . On the recommendation of a small group of concerned citizens, Mayor Yu prohibited automobile traffic in all Plainsville parks, and therefore was credited with solving the pollution problem and improving the quality of life in Plainsville. This action would have great appeal to the citizens of Lake City, most of whom participate in the community's recycling program, and would guarantee McAllister's success in her current quest to be Lake City's new mayor.
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What is the mainly reason for the failure of Ida McAllister?Will the citizens approve the announcement?Do  Lake City and McAllister's share the same problem?Those important questions will have to be answered before the prohibition of automobile traffic in all Plainsville parks is considered as a brilliant one.Judging merely from the argument above,one should not so confident about the claims for several  critical flaws,I will offer my insight of the questions I rasised above.

Firstly,the arguer failed to provide any evidence to show that the failure is due to the less attention to the environment.In the other hand,there exists a possibility that the citizens didn't choose her because of the suspicion of her ability.It is highly possible that what is concerned about by the masses that time is the high crime rates and the low education level.However,Ida McAllister ran for the vote without any wish to make a improvement at those subjects.No matter how much effort she paid at the announcement of protecting evironment,she is surely to fail again.Before her announcement,she should take an accurate investigation about the reason she failed last time.

Secondly,the mere fact that the participation in the community's recycling program can't support the claim that the citizens will approve the prohibition of automobile traffic.The author failed to rule out the possibility that the city had already done a good job in environment protecting and the what accurate people to the program is just the high pay-back.What's more,the private cars maybe prevail there ,thus the announcement will bring about negative influence.The masses will spare more time to go to their office and the additional route will cause much more consuming of oil which will also contribute to the pollution.I’d like to see any evidence such as a survey among citizens that could convince us the masses would support the prohibition.

Last but not the least,the author make a false analogy between Lake City and Plainsville.The differences of the two cities can't be neglected.In fact,The people in the Lake City may live in good air with health while Lake City was polluted seriously which lead to illness. In that case, the announcement may be just what the citizens need.However,whether it is proper to Lake City is open to doubt. More evidence must be applied to convince us the two cities share the same problem.

In summary,Ida McAllister will fail again probably if the above questions are conveniently ignored.Thus,an effective survey must be carried out to reveal the truly reason of the failure last time.Additionally,the accurate information that what is the expectation of the masses is needed.If we can't take those into actions, we may well see the failure again before the victory.

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What is the mainly reason for the failure of Ida McAllister? Will the citizens approve the announcement? Do Lake City and McAllister's share the same problem? Those important questions will have to be answered before the prohibition of automobile traffic in all Plainsville parks is considered as a brilliant one. Judging merely from the argument above, one should not so confident about the claims for several critical flaws, I will offer my insight of the questions I rasised (raised) above.

Firstly, the arguer failed to provide any evidence to show that the failure is due to the less attention to the environment. In the other hand, there exists a possibility that the citizens didn't choose her because of the suspicion of her ability. It is highly possible that what is (are) concerned about by the masses that time is the high crime rates and the low education level. However, Ida McAllister ran for the vote without any wish to make a (an) improvement at those subjects. No matter how much effort she paid at the announcement of protecting evironment (environment), she is surely to fail again. Before her announcement, she should take an accurate investigation about the reason she failed last time.

Secondly, the mere fact that the participation in the community's recycling program can't support the claim that the citizens will approve the prohibition of automobile traffic. The author failed to rule out the possibility that the city had already done a good job in environment protecting and the what accurate people to the program is just the high pay-back. What's more, the private cars maybe prevail there, thus the announcement will bring about negative influence. The masses will spare more time to go to their office and the additional route will cause much more consuming of oil which will also contribute to the pollution. I’d like to see any evidence such as a survey among citizens that could convince us the masses would support the prohibition.

Last but not the least, the author make a false analogy between Lake City and Plainsville. The differences of the two cities can't be neglected. In fact, the people in the Lake City may live in good air with health while Lake City was polluted seriously which lead to illness. In that case, the announcement may be just what the citizens need. However, whether it is proper to Lake City is open to doubt. More evidence must be applied to convince us the two cities share the same problem.

In summary, Ida McAllister will fail again probably if the above questions are conveniently ignored. Thus, an effective survey must be carried out to reveal the truly (true) reason of the failure last time. Additionally, the accurate information that what is the expectation of the masses is needed. If we can't take those into actions, we may well see the failure again before the victory.


哇，仅有几处拼写错误，好强悍，考回去做模版了!!  我的目标就是写出这种文章，所以水平有限，语言方面我就不能提什么意见了，我就是欠缺论证的能力。

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What is the mainly reason for the failure of Ida McAllister?Will the citizens approve the announcement?Do  Lake City and McAllister's share the same problem?Those important questions will have to be answered before the prohibition of automobile traffic in all Plainsville parks is considered as a brilliant one.Judging merely from the argument above,one should not so confident about the claims for several  critical flaws,I will offer my insight of the questions I rasised above.

Firstly,the arguer failed to provide any evidence to show that the failure is due to the less attention to the environment.In the other hand,there exists a possibility that the citizens didn't choose her because of the suspicion of her ability.It is highly possible that what is concerned about by the masses that time is the high crime rates and the low education level.However,Ida McAllister ran for the vote without any wish to make a improvement at those subjects.No matter how much effort she paid at the announcement of protecting evironment,she is surely to fail again.Before her announcement,she should take an accurate investigation about the reason she failed last time.本人认为该处有问题,在原题中作者说道这一点应该只是告诉我们Ida McAllister落选这个事实吧,不算一个logical fallacy吧,even if它算一个logical fallacy 而且论证的也不是特别完美.反驳下你吧:1 如果就算有环保与落选之间没有必然关系, Ida McAllister完全可以通过支持环保这一个新政策,重新拉拢民众的心. 2 如果环保与落选有联系,则更不能拿这个点驳斥作者了

Secondly,the mere fact that the participation in the community's recycling program can't support the claim that the citizens will approve the prohibition of automobile traffic.The author failed to rule out the possibility that the city had already done a good job in environment protecting and the what accurate people to the program is just the high pay-back.What's more,the private cars maybe prevail there ,thus the announcement will bring about negative influence.The masses will spare more time to go to their office and the additional route will cause much more consuming of oil which will also contribute to the pollution.I’d like to see any evidence such as a survey among citizens that could convince us the masses would support the prohibition.

Last but not the least,the author make a false analogy between Lake City and Plainsville.The differences of the two cities can't be neglected.In fact,The people in the Lake City may live in good air with health while Lake City was polluted seriously which lead to illness. In that case, the announcement may be just what the citizens need.However,whether it is proper to Lake City is open to doubt. More evidence must be applied to convince us the two cities share the same problem.

In summary,Ida McAllister will fail again probably if the above questions are conveniently ignored.Thus,an effective survey must be carried out to reveal the truly reason of the failure last time.Additionally,the accurate information that what is the expectation of the masses is needed.If we can't take those into actions, we may well see the failure again before the victory.

呵呵 其他都很好 值得学习,
那个单词的问题 上楼已经改了 我就不改了 哈哈
至于第一点论述的问题 纯属个人看法
大家再评叙评叙吧

[ Last edited by bishao422 on 2005-8-12 at 16:44 ]

lulu70UID: 2122535

同意楼上的反驳，另外文中的“close all LC parks to automobile traffic "应该是Lc的所有公园禁止车辆通行吧的意思吧。

A recommendation ,in this argument,is made that Ida McAllister who will run for mayor of Lake City(LC) this year should  take an action to close all LC parks to automobile traffic to guarantee her winning in the competition.The recommendation is based on Alecia Yu 's successful experience and the confidence in the attention of the citizens in LC on enviornmental causes.But a careful analysis reveals that the argument is indefensible in several aspects

To start with,the author assumes a causal relationship between the enviornmental action taken by Alecia Yu and her success in running mayor of Plainsville.Obviously,many other important causes have been overlooked.In fact,as the argument says ,there is only a small group of  citizens concerned about the action ,then it is entirely  possible that the action ,though successful in sloving the pollution problem,have not played a key role in her success.Perhaps Alecia Yu have put forward a sound plan on economy which gain much favor from the citizens of Plainsville.Without considering other possible factors ,the recommendation will not have much merit.

At the same time,it is inferred that the successful experience of Alecia Yu is still applicable to Ida McAllister.However,the circumstantces can be wholely different in two different cities.For instance,the enviormnent in LC may be better than that in Plainsville.If so ,then the action's effect on enhancing Ida McAllister's competitive sthength is rather questionable.Moreover,even if the action can have contribution to Ida McAllister's election,the citizens in LC are likely to care more about the plan which can improve the city's overall economy.As a result,to validate the analogy ,more evidence should be cited to verify the similarities of the two cities.

Another problem in the argument involves that no convincing evidence have been offered to substantiate the appeal of the action to LC's citizens. Participating in community's recycling program does not necessarily promise the support from LC's citizens on the action .Perhaps those citizens just take part in the action but do not really care for the enviornment or they may be not think the action is a reasonal idea for which can bring much troubel to their driving.

Finally,the the performence on solving the enviornmental problem is just one element but not the only factor in winning the electiong.Winning the election involves comprehensive aspects.Plans on tax,economy development,and welfare and so on are all people's focus,which play a more important role than the action does.It is wise to take these into consideration to make the recommendation more valuabel.

As it stands,somehow plausible as the argument appears to be at first glance,it is not unconvincing on the whole.To bolster the recommendation,the author should prove the causal relationgship between the action and  Alecia Yu's sucess in the election and the comparability between the two cities.Besides the evidence is needed to demonstrate the influence of the action on LC's citizens.

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以上那篇是我的陋作，点评下