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题号        136        题材分类        行为类        考频       
题材倾向        选择之多与少
136. "The absence of choice is a circumstance that is very, very rare."
  
没有选择的情况少之又少
立场
大正小负        1：完全同意 2：完全反对 3：中立态度 4：大正小负 5：大负小正
中文提纲
中文        论证        例证
1        从物质世界来看，生产力提高，可供选择的物品繁多        商品的种类与数量
2        从精神世界来看，自由民主的社会里，人们享有自主的选择权        政治、婚姻、宗教信仰
3        确实存在有选择很少的时候，但这种情况很少.就算有人说自己没有什么选择，主要是因为他们的选择受到限制，或是不能达到其预期，但实际上还是有很多可供选择的        经济能力、知识的限制等
被关押的犯人被剥夺了一些选择权，战乱中的国家的人选择受限


Now the society we live in is peaceful and prosperous. Accompany with it, there are a high productivity level and a democratic social atmosphere. Therefore, choices we confront are numerous and various in daily life. In the first place, the products which offered to be chosen are so many. In the second place, the restrictions which prevent us from freely choosing are merely, of course, under normal condition. And in indeed, the absence of choice is existed in particular circumstances, but such case seldom happens in an advanced and civilized society.
   
First of all, it is obvious that products booming reach to an unprecedented level, with the development of industrialization and three times of technology evolution. The piece of history, shortage of food, short on house holds and commodity in short supply because of the limitation on productive forces, would never repeat, as expect. At that time, deficiency on commodity makes a few choices provided to people at every realm of everyday life. Some small but typical examples could describe that hard time, the color of clothes people wore are white, blue and black mostly, the kinds of toys we played with are no more than five, even more, they are usually uninteresting and unattractive compared with which in the high-tech society. Meanwhile, the sorts of color of clothes people wear now, the varieties of toys cannot be countable, and more and more colors and more fancy toys are being created through the developing technology. Hence, people now face so many choices that cannot easily make decision, which is the fact in the modern society.

Besides, with the civilization of society, people have more civil rights which also involve the right of choose. And the right entitles people to freely choose in every respects of social life, such as the right to vote to choose president from presidential candidates. At liberty to choose some one to fall in love with, no matter how old he or she is, what he or she looks like, which country he or she comes from, only if love, whether to be loved is another case. Another example is that optional religious faith, allowing many people who believe in different religions live together harmoniously. At the matter of, people are authorized so many rights of choosing that merely in trouble of cannot choose.

Admittedly, absence of option is existed in some special circumstances, for instance, the prisoners barred in a cell do not have choices as many as other ordinary people have, so to speak, the punishment of law deprives their rights of choose. And the individuals ruled by colonist have much less choices than people in normal society, which is also an example of despoiling right of choosing. Nevertheless, such special situation is a small portion of our society and world; we still have a large mount of choices as a normal individual in a democratic and fair union. Some people, who claim “no choice”, are disappointed with the choices which fall behind expectation or are restrained by economic, knowledge ability and forth. Yet, it could not prove they have no choice, just imply they want to have better choices which cannot be gained by themselves. And the options they have are not as few as they complaint.

In conclusion, people except who are dealing with justice have numerous and various choices in a democratic and peaceful society. Further more, people would not admit the fact in the reason that their continually unsatisfied with reality. Better and more choices are desired at any time for any one.

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1        从物质世界来看，生产力提高，可供选择的物品繁多        商品的种类与数量
2        从精神世界来看，自由民主的社会里，人们享有自主的选择权        政治、婚姻、宗教信仰
3        确实存在有选择很少的时候，但这种情况很少.就算有人说自己没有什么选择，主要是因为他们的选择受到限制，或是不能达到其预期，但实际上还是有很多可供选择的        经济能力、知识的限制等
被关押的犯人被剥夺了一些选择权，战乱中的国家的人选择受限


Now the society we live in is peaceful and prosperous. Accompany 我查的CB，它是动词词性with it, there are a high productivity level and a democratic social atmosphere. Therefore, choices we confront are numerous and various in daily life. In the first place, the products which offered to be chosen are so many. In the second place, the restrictions which prevent us from freely choosing are merely ADV。 , of course稍显口语 , under normal condition. And 我觉得不用加ANDin indeed, the absence of choice is existed 不应该是被动吧 in particular circumstances, but such case seldom happens in an advanced and civilized society.
   
First of all, it is obvious that products booming 单独的形容词放在动词后面，感觉不合适 reach to an unprecedented level, with the development of industrialization and three times of technology evolution 前面是reach，后面用的with，特别是with里的事情是一个过程性的，经历了很长时间。不合适，经过工业化和工业革命我们达到了什么水平。汉语说得随着xxx的进行,yyy达到了什么地步也是表示xxx之后yyy达到，或者随着xxx，yyy逐步达到。个人意见. The piece of history, shortage of food, short on house holds and commodity in short supply because of the limitation on productive forces, would never 有些绝对，看看非洲兄弟 repeat, as expect. At that time, deficiency on commodity makes a few choices provided to people at every realm of everyday life. Some small but typical examples could describe that hard time, the color of clothes people wore are white, blue and black mostly, the kinds of toys we played with are no more than five, even more, they are usually uninteresting and unattractive compared with which in the high-tech society.据老人回忆，电视里所见，那个年代的玩具在当时来看还是很有意思的，这里仅仅说选择的少就行了。另外，前面描述的都是中国的6、70年代的情况，是否加个地点啊，不然老外会晕的 Meanwhile 好像和后面不太贴 , the sorts of color of clothes people wear now, the varieties of toys cannot be countable, and more and more colors and more fancy toys are being created through the developing technology. Hence, people now face so many choices that cannot easily make decision, which is the fact in the modern society.

Besides, with the civilization of society, people have more civil rights which also involve the right of choose 这是动词. And the right entitles people to freely choose in every respects of social life, such as the right to vote to choose president from presidential 可去，稍显累赘candidates. At liberty to choose some one to fall in love with, no matter how old he or she is 这个例证不太合适，过去人不是想爱谁就爱谁吗，其实如你在提纲中所言，婚姻自由，其实说这个感觉还是和封建礼教有关的东西，呵呵，我人文方面太差，搞不清了 , what he or she looks like, which country he or she comes from, only if love, whether to be loved is another case. Another example is that optional religious faith, allowing many people who believe in different religions live together harmoniously. At the matter of ？, people are authorized so many rights of choosing that merely in trouble of cannot choose lacking of choice等 .

Admittedly, absence of option is existed in some special circumstances,   句号for instance, the prisoners barred in a cell do not have choices as many as other ordinary people have, so to speak, the punishment of law deprives their rights of choose. And the individuals ruled by colonist have much less choices than people in normal society, which is also an example of despoiling right of choosing. Nevertheless, such special situation is a small portion of our society and world; we still have a large mount of choices as a normal individual in a democratic and fair union. Some people, who claim “no choice”, are disappointed with the choices which fall behind expectation or are restrained by economic, knowledge ability and forth. Yet, it could not prove they have no choice, just imply they want to have better choices which cannot be gained by themselves. And the options they have are not as few as they complaint. 后面的语言的东西没怎么找，感觉这段的顺序可以调整一下，首先，说明确少选择的情况是有的，或者如现在的TS，在一些特殊情形下，但这是很少的。后面点明原因（你的nevertheless后面的部分），因为这是一个民主的社会，而他们之所说没得选择，是因为xxxxxx(如你所说），然后加那些例子（TS后面的）。我感觉这样安排好些，可能是符合我的思维吧

In conclusion, people except who are dealing with justice have numerous and various choices in a democratic and peaceful society. Further more, people would not admit the fact in the reason that their continually unsatisfied with reality. Better and more choices are desired at any time for any one.


整篇的结构和逻辑性以及论证不错(based on my thinking and writing level)，就是在B3里，我觉得语句上可以考虑一下，当然，个人愚见，说得不对望包涵。

p.s.，那篇T和M的题的确让我头疼，现在还没完全缓过来，所以可能上面说了些谬论。哎，对我这个从小没对人文感过兴趣的人来说，人文话题的确挠头，谢谢你给我改作文。

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谢谢马甲!!
B1我是以过去与现在对比表现现在的选择已经很多了
但B2重点不在比较,婚姻自由那个例子本不想用于比较,但经你一提醒确实有点混乱,可能加上对过去处于封建礼教的约束会清楚些
B3的逻辑顺序确实应该调整如你所说,比较符合直线思维
呵呵,看来你不人文的头脑很适合写ISSUE!!!!