Issue175 个人与集体对创新之作用

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Issue175  个人与集体对创新之作用
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作者：dezhi 共用时间：45分41秒     635 words
从2004年2月18日14时15分到2004年2月18日15时0分
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It is always an individual who is the impetus for innovation; the details may be worked out by a team, but true innovation results from the enterprise and unique perception of an individual.
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Does true innovation result from the enterprise and unique perception of an individual rather than a team? The speaker claims so, for the reason that it is always an individual who is the impetus for innovation. Although the influence of a team as a whole should be taken into consideration, I fundamentally agree with this statement, and I would like to give my evidences as bellow.

First of all, real innovative and creative thoughts or opinions often exist in the minds of only a few individuals, who are anxious to apply their innovation to practice. Individuals who have rich experience and profound knowledge are rare in a team, while most of the members are just ordinary people. Due to the enterprise and unique perception of a few individuals, they are more likely to dip into the essence of a problem, and form their feasible, innovative and creative ways of solving it. As a matter of fact, it is their wisdom over ordinary ones that pushes the team towards revolutionary innovation. Without their leadership in intelligence, the team would not go any further. The story of Gandhi is a good case in point. He once inhabited in several western countries, where he was well educated and formed his view of point towards liberation and violence. On his return to India, he led the non-violence campaign against the oppression from England, and finally succeeded. If there was no such a person in India, the liberation of this country may be slowed down for several years.

The second reason I would like to point out is that it is individual independence that results in advance of a whole team against the conventional trends in the team itself. Almost anyone has a inclination to agree with others, while only a few think, criticize and act depending on themselves. Although alone sometimes, they are the impetus for innovation indeed. As we know, arguing with the majority of members in a team is really an unpleasant matter, however, total agreement with the mainstream trend would simply lead to no innovation. It is the responsibilities of few individuals who could think and act depending on themselves to take risk in offending most of others in the process of advancement. If they yield to conventional thoughts anyway, it would be where the innovation stopped. As the saying goes, the truth is often under control of the minority. The independence and persistence of these minorities really make sense.

Although several individuals play a significant role in true innovation, I concede that this innovation would not go long without the support and encouragement from the team. As for an individual, his or her opinions are often focused within a narrow scope without taking everything into account, which may bring harm to the team in some unexpected aspects. On the contrary, every member in a team comes from different backgrounds with different thoughts. They can make contributions to the team by providing their ideas from different aspects, which are likely to stimulate inspirations of other members, even those who are considered leaders. The best approach to innovation is to combine efforts of a few individuals with the wisdom from all members in a team. The brainstorm, which was brought about in management, serves as a good means for such a purpose. Every member is required to claim his or her own thoughts in an open-minded meeting, no matter his or her opinions are right or wrong. Such a lively atmosphere for any member to take part in the discussion would contribute much to the innovative ideas in the end, which make true innovation more accessible.

To sum up, true innovation is more likely to achieve when the enterprise and unique perception of an individual can be emphasized on without overlooking support from the team.

九月爱上乒乓球UID: 151821

互改一下吧!!
https://bbs.gter.net/showthread.php?s=&threadid=174957

coolwitsUID: 149150

[最近忙着补专业课，很少过来看，对不起大家拉
只能说尽量多来了，nod]

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It is always an individual who is the impetus for innovation; the details may be worked out by a team, but true innovation results from the enterprise and unique perception of an individual.
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Does true innovation result from the enterprise and unique perception of an individual rather than a team?[rather than 前后不匹配] The speaker claims so, for the reason that it is always an individual who is the impetus for innovation.[这句罗嗦，改] Although the influence of a team as a whole should be taken into consideration, I fundamentally agree with this statement, and I would like to give my evidences[reasons] as bellow.

First of all, real innovative and creative thoughts or opinions often exist in the minds of only a few individuals, who are anxious to apply their innovation to practice. Individuals who have rich experience and profound knowledge are rare in a team, while most of the members are just ordinary people. Due to the enterprise and unique perception of a few individuals, they are more likely to dip into the essence of a problem, and form their feasible, innovative and creative ways of solving it. As a matter of fact, it is their wisdom over ordinary ones that pushes the team towards revolutionary innovation. Without their leadership in intelligence, the team would not go any further. The story of Gandhi is a good case in point. He once inhabited in several western countries, where he was well educated and formed his view of point towards liberation and violence. On his return to India, he led the non-violence campaign against the oppression from England, and finally succeeded. If there was no such a person in India, the liberation of this country may be slowed down for several years.
[这里用例子要突出没有甘地就没有非暴力不合作运动，你这里只说甘地引导了这次运动，没有论证为什么没有它就不行
其实你可以说印度人民受压迫已经很长时间，但是由于没有对时局的深刻了解，就是没办法进行成气候的对抗什么什么的
然后甘地出现。。。。。。]

The second reason I would like to point out is that it is individual independence that results in advance of a whole team against the conventional trends in the team itself. Almost anyone has a inclination to agree with others, while only a few think, criticize and act depending on themselves. Although alone sometimes, they are the impetus for innovation indeed. As we know, arguing with the majority of members in a team is really an unpleasant matter, however, total agreement with the mainstream trend would simply lead to no innovation. It is the responsibilities of few individuals who could think and act depending on themselves to take risk in offending most of others in the process of advancement. If they yield to conventional thoughts anyway, it would be where the innovation stopped. As the saying goes, the truth is often under control of the minority. The independence and persistence of these minorities really make sense.
[感觉这里没说清楚，绕来绕去
重点要论述为什么“total agreement with the mainstream trend would simply lead to no innovation.”
要多些实质性的东西]

Although several individuals play a significant role in true innovation, I concede that this innovation would not go long without the support and encouragement from the team. As for an individual, his or her opinions are often focused within a narrow scope without taking everything into account, which may bring harm to the team in some unexpected aspects. On the contrary, every member in a team comes from different backgrounds with different thoughts. They can make contributions to the team by providing their ideas from different aspects, which are likely to stimulate inspirations of other members, even those who are considered leaders. The best approach to innovation is to combine efforts of a few individuals with the wisdom from all members in a team. The brainstorm, which was brought about in management, serves as a good means for such a purpose. Every member is required to claim his or her own thoughts in an open-minded meeting, no matter his or her opinions are right or wrong. Such a lively atmosphere for any member to take part in the discussion would contribute much to the innovative ideas in the end, which make true innovation more accessible.
[这里让步太大了些
这里brainstorm,大家畅所欲言，不就成了集体智慧产生innovation了吗？]

To sum up, true innovation is more likely to achieve when the enterprise and unique perception of an individual can be emphasized on without overlooking support from the team.
[稍微看了下，语言还比较流畅，就是很多地方显罗嗦
dezhi水平比较高了，所以就不表扬了，全都批评
高标准严要求，哈.]

九月爱上乒乓球UID: 151821

Does true innovation result from the enterprise and unique perception of an individual rather than a team? The speaker claims so, for the reason that it is always an individual who is the impetus for innovation. Although the influence of a team as a whole should be taken into consideration, I fundamentally agree with this statement, and I would like to give my evidences as bellow.

First of all, real innovative and creative [U]thoughts or opinions [/U] (同义重复) often exist in the minds of only a few individuals, who are anxious to apply their innovation to practice. Individuals who have [U]rich experience and profound knowledge [/U](从innovative and creative 又转到这个特征 但在后面又转回去了 多余信息)  are rare in a team, while most of the members are just ordinary people. Due to the enterprise and unique perception of a few individuals, they are more likely to dip into the essence of a problem, and form their feasible, innovative and creative ways of solving it. As a matter of fact, it is their wisdom over ordinary ones that pushes the team towards revolutionary innovation. Without their leadership in intelligence, the team would not go any further. The story of Gandhi is a good case in point. He once inhabited in several western countries, where he was well educated and formed his view of point towards liberation and violence. On his return to India, he led the non-violence campaign against the oppression from England, and finally succeeded. If there was(were) no such a person in India, the liberation of this country may(would) be slowed down for several years.

The second reason I would like to point out is that it is individual independence that results in advance of a whole team against the conventional trends in the team itself. Almost anyone has a inclination to agree with others, while only a few think, criticize and act depending on themselves. Although alone sometimes, they are the impetus for innovation indeed. As we know, arguing with the majority of members in a team is really an unpleasant matter, however, total agreement with the mainstream trend would simply lead to no innovation. It is the responsibilities of (a) few individuals who could think and act [U]depending on themselves [/U] (independently) to take risk in offending most of others in the process of advancement. If they yield to conventional thoughts anyway, it would be where the innovation stopped. As the saying goes, the truth is often under control of the minority. The independence and persistence of these minorities really make sense.

Although several individuals play a significant role in true innovation, I concede that this innovation would not go long without the support and encouragement from the team. As for an individual, his or her opinions are often focused within a narrow scope without taking everything into account, which may bring harm to the team in some unexpected aspects. On the contrary(不妥), every member in a team comes from different backgrounds with different thoughts. They can make contributions to the team by providing their ideas from different aspects, which(具体指代什么?) are likely to stimulate inspirations of other members, even those who are considered (as) leaders. The best approach to innovation is to combine efforts of a few individuals with the wisdom from all members in a team. The brainstorm, which was brought about in management, serves as a good means for such a purpose. Every member is required to claim his or her own thoughts in an open-minded meeting, no matter his or her opinions are right or wrong. Such a lively atmosphere for any member to take part in the discussion would contribute much to the innovative ideas in the end, which make true innovation more accessible.

To sum up, true innovation is more likely to achieve (success) when the enterprise and unique perception of an individual can be emphasized on without overlooking support from the team.

语言很规整 读起来比较顺口
例子也还不错
body 2 论证稍微有点混乱
很好了~~向你学习 限时写成这样 让我很惭愧

caleUID: 150437

Does true innovation result from the enterprise and unique perception of an individual rather than a team? The speaker claims so, for the reason that it is always an individual who is the impetus for innovation. Although the influence of a team as a whole should be taken into consideration, I fundamentally agree with this statement, and I would like to give my evidences as bellow.

First of all, real innovative and creative thoughts or opinions often exist in the minds of only a few individuals, who are anxious to apply their innovation to practice. Individuals who have rich experience and profound knowledge are rare in a team, while most of the members are just ordinary people. Due to the enterprise and unique perception of a few individuals, they are more likely to dip into （dip into 在金山词霸中是稍加研究的意思，改成delve吧）the essence of a problem, and form their feasible, innovative and creative ways of solving it. As a matter of fact, it is their wisdom over ordinary ones that pushes the team towards revolutionary innovation. Without their leadership in intelligence（在智利上的指导？建议改成in research or work, the team would not go any further(跟我犯了一样的毛病，太绝对了，呵呵). The story of Gandhi is a good case in point. He once inhabited in several western countries, where he was well educated and formed his view of point towards liberation and violence. On his return to India, he led the non-violence campaign against the oppression from England, and finally succeeded. If there was no such a person in India, the liberation of this country may be slowed down for several years.

The second reason I would like to point out is that it is individual independence that results in advance of a whole team against the conventional trends in the team itself. Almost anyone has a （an）inclination to agree with others, while only a few think, criticize and act depending on themselves. Although (being)alone sometimes, they are the impetus for innovation indeed. As we know, arguing with the majority of members in a team is really an unpleasant matter, however, total agreement with the mainstream trend(别扭，改成idea吧) would simply lead to no innovation. It is the responsibilities of few individuals who could think and act depending on themselves（把这个词组改成independently吧） to take risk in offending most of others in the process of advancement. If they yield to conventional thoughts anyway, it would be where the innovation stopped. As the saying goes, the truth is often under control of the minority. The independence and persistence of these minorities really make sense.

Although several individuals play a significant role in true innovation, I concede that this innovation would not go long without the support and encouragement from the team. As for an individual, his or her opinions are often focused within a narrow scope without taking everything into account, which may bring（do感觉更地道一点） harm to the team in some unexpected aspects. On the contrary, every member in a team comes from different backgrounds with different thoughts. They can make contributions to the team by providing their ideas from（我觉得in 要好一点） different aspects, which are likely to stimulate inspirations of other members, even those who are considered leaders. The best approach to innovation is to combine efforts of a few individuals with the wisdom from all members in a team. The brainstorm, which was brought about in management, serves as a good means for such a purpose. Every member is required（建议改成encouraged, 后面相应的改成without concerning the correctness of his opinion） to claim his or her own thoughts in an open-minded meeting, no matter his or her opinions are right or wrong. Such a lively atmosphere for any member to take part in the discussion would contribute much to the (formation) innovative ideas in the end, which make true innovation more accessible.

To sum up, true innovation is more likely to achieve when the enterprise and unique perception of an individual can be emphasized on without overlooking support from the team.

dezhiUID: 156141

谢谢coolwits,九月爱上乒乓球,cale!
感激ing......
尤其是coolwits,考完了还回来关怀小辈,//bow

今天改了四篇Issue,快晕掉了,我先把这个网页存下来,晚上在本本上好好研究研究各位的意见,明天再来respond
我得先去写提纲了,还有那么多的提纲没有做,呜呜呜~~~~~

coolwitsUID: 149150

我也就比你们提前几天当牛人拉，俗话说“考完就是牛人”
你们也快成牛人了，：）

dezhiUID: 156141

to coolwits:
甘地的例子，你说的很对，例子应该为中心服务，既然我想说的是团队中的某些人具有非凡的智慧和能力才能推动集体的进步，在用这个例子时就应突出这一方面，而不能泛泛而谈。

body2确实够烂，我不知道该从哪些方面展开，绕来绕去，晕，我还要加强论证方面的训练呀

body3的头脑风暴的例子不太合适，可能我论述的重点也有问题。我想突出的是，能把两者结合起来。我再想想.....

dezhiUID: 156141

to 九月爱上乒乓球：

“If there was(were) no such a person in India, the liberation of this country may(would) be slowed down for several years.”这个虚拟语气的错误，我写的时候一点也没注意，谢谢指出！

“ depending on themselves (independently) ”－－－这个cale也指出了，接受！

“On the contrary(不妥), ”确实不妥，这里并不是强转折，以后我要注意不能胡乱使用这些过渡词！

dezhiUID: 156141

to cale：
“they are more likely to dip into （dip into 在金山词霸中是稍加研究的意思，改成delve吧）the essence of a problem”－－dip into没有深入研究的意思，faint，我望文生义了，改

“Every member is required（建议改成encouraged, 后面相应的改成without concerning the correctness of his opinion） to claim his or her own thoughts in an open-minded meeting, no matter his or her opinions are right or wrong.”－－这句话改得太好了，用词有句式都更加贴切，接受！

coolwitsUID: 149150

其实要说结合起来的话，你可以说个人智慧不管多么伟大，总会有偏颇的地方
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