ISSUE144 艺术家 VS 评论家， 求互拍！

G10T5UID：2101393

144. It is the artist, not the critic, who gives society something of lasting value. A person who evaluates works of art, such as novels, films, music, paintings, etc.

这个题目都写了三次了，还是不会写。在规定时间内只写完了前2段。谢谢指教

In this assertion, the speaker claims that our artists contribute to social lasting values, and critics have nothing to do with them. I concede that, after all, it is artists who create countless great artworks which facilitate the dissemination and maintenance of social lasting values. At the same time, however, artists have their own unique function which cannot and should not be neglected.

Admittedly, artists are the creators of artworks, including novels, music, films, paintings, and so forth, all of which would contribute to lasting values. Novels and films provide us beautiful or solemn stories. In appreciating them, we search ourselves in the characters, experience their joys and their sorrows, and forecast ourselves’ behaviors when facing a similar dilemma. On the one hand, through imagining the involvement in the plot, it gives us a chance to confirm, refine or refute our previous values. On the other hand, the characters’ response poses great impression on us which forces us to think the true significance of life, humanity flaws and drawbacks, and ambitions deeply hidden in our nature. From the miserable life of victims of war, we could understand to cherish precious peace; from the support and influence that Lincoln gained from his stepmother, we could learn the time-honored theme of love; and even from those fantastic fictions, such as Harry Potter, we could also see honesty, courage and loyalty, which are considered as lasting values. Just through this kind of critical and thorough thinking rather than boring dictating, we would really understand lasting values. When novels and films' function seems to be comparative obvious, function of other forms of art is more indirect. Painting, a piece of paper, only illustrates us a static picture, but from which we can see painters' emotion and thought, and their comprehension about our society and values. Music, a piece of sound, even does not give us any visual impact, but its mysterious spiritual effect would calm our heart, inspire our enthusiasm which are also essential for the pursuit of true values.

Although from above discussion artists' contributions are obvious, we are also aware that they rarely directly tell us what we should do or what we should not. Artists rarely put forward their really thought in a clear means, but prefer to elaborately design some characters and plots, paint a picture which usually is abstract, or compose a graceful melody. They hide their thought deeply and require readers to explore it or experience it through their own thinking. But, unfortunately, the comprehension of art is a hard work which calls for certain background knowledge, critical thinking and the careful comparison between imaginary world and our mundane living. Most people do not want to do it or simply are incapable to do it. Under this circumstance, critics are persons we can rely on. While artists create artworks, critics reveal their values. From The Old Man and the Sea, while Hemingway only describe a wise and patient old fisherman and his once fishing experience, critics embody the theme of courage, endurance, the fighting against nature and the relationship between life and death; and from the symphony Hero, while Beethoven only provide exciting rhythm, critics reveal the fact that it was written to honor equality and liberty. Critics’ endeavor greatly enhances artworks’ influence and contributions on lasting values.

Moreover, with the increasing living pace, more and more, we depend on critics to select and filter artworks and therefore their influence and contribution are soaring. Which artworks is a great one, whether the film would give us a perfect spiritual experience or is replete with violence and sex, whether this long story deserves our precious time and many such questions become hard to be answered today, because of numerous artworks and decreasing leisure time. We cannot afford this onerous task and therefore shift it to critics. For a supporting example, we need look no further than Amazon, a famous online bookstore. Behind the description of every book, Amazon puts some criticism as suggestions, which come from booksellers, professional critics, and even common readers who have purchased this book. Generally speaking, we would trust them and rely on their criticism for guidance. What is a best seller? Firstly, it should be recommended wholeheartedly by critics. And then many people would read it just because they are suggested to purchase it. This phenomenon aptly illustrates nowadays critics’ importance. While artists create artworks, critics judge which is good or which is bad, at least to some extent.   

In sum, artists create artworks which in turn facilitate the dissemination of lasting values. However, critics help us comprehend these artworks and even select and filter them for us. Without artists, no artwork would exist. But without critics, we would be confused by vague literary expression or be immersed in the boundless ocean of artworks. So therein lies contributions of each.

[ Last edited by staralways on 2005-8-6 at 10:42 ]

emmieleungUID：195465

字数太多了, 没必要 的.

加油!!!:victory:

cityriversonUID：2119340

In this assertion, the speaker claims that our artists contribute to social lasting values, and critics have nothing to do with them. I concede that, after all, it is artists who create countless great artworks which facilitate the dissemination and maintenance of social lasting values. At the same time, however, artists(critics?) have their own unique function which cannot and should not be neglected.

Admittedly, artists are the creators of artworks, including novels, music, films, paintings, and so forth, all of which would contribute to lasting values. Novels and films provide us beautiful or solemn stories. In appreciating them, we search ourselves in the characters, experience their joys and their sorrows, and forecast ourselves’ behaviors when facing a similar dilemma. On the one hand, through imagining the involvement in the plot, it gives us a chance to confirm, refine or refute our previous values. On the other hand, the characters’ response poses great impression on us which forces us to think the true significance of life, humanity flaws and drawbacks, and ambitions deeply hidden in our nature. From the miserable life of victims of war, we could understand to cherish precious peace; from the support and influence that Lincoln gained from his stepmother, we could learn the time-honored theme of love; and even from those fantastic fictions, such as Harry Potter, we could also see honesty, courage and loyalty, which are considered as lasting values. Just through this kind of critical and thorough thinking rather than boring dictating, we would really understand lasting values. When novels and films' function seems to be comparative obvious, function of other forms of art is more indirect. Painting, a piece of paper, only illustrates us a static picture, but from which we can see painters' emotion and thought, and their comprehension about our society and values. Music, a piece of sound, even does not give us any visual impact, but its mysterious spiritual effect would calm our heart, inspire our enthusiasm which are also essential for the pursuit of true values. (novel和film的例子举得很流畅,但是太多了,似乎没有这个必要.而后面的art和music甚至有点否定的意味了,因为他们的传达不够明显,是不是干脆就不要提及,反而更好一些?)

Although from above discussion artists' contributions are obvious, we are also aware that they rarely directly tell us what we should do or what we should not. Artists rarely put forward their really thought in a clear means, but prefer to elaborately design some characters and plots, paint a picture which usually is abstract, or compose a graceful melody. They hide their thought deeply and require readers to explore it or experience it through their own thinking. But, unfortunately, the comprehension of art is a hard work which calls for certain background knowledge, critical thinking and the careful comparison between imaginary world and our mundane living. Most people do not want to do it or simply are incapable to do it. Under this circumstance, critics are persons we can rely on. While artists create artworks, critics reveal their values. From The Old Man and the Sea, while Hemingway only describe a wise and patient old fisherman and his once fishing experience, critics embody the theme of courage, endurance, the fighting against nature and the relationship between life and death; and from the symphony Hero, while Beethoven only provide exciting rhythm, critics reveal the fact that it was written to honor equality and liberty. Critics’ endeavor greatly enhances artworks’ influence and contributions on lasting values. (这一段后面的例子举得很不错,要向你学习啊:P 不过前面绕了很大的一个圈子引出critics的作用,用的笔墨太多了一些似乎,精简一些可能更好吧?)

Moreover, with the increasing living pace, more and more, we depend on critics to select and filter artworks and therefore their influence and contribution are soaring. Which artworks is a great one, whether the film would give us a perfect spiritual experience or is replete with violence and sex, whether this long story deserves our precious time and many such questions become hard to be answered today, because of numerous artworks and decreasing leisure time. We cannot afford this onerous task and therefore shift it to critics. For a supporting example, we need look no further than Amazon, a famous online bookstore. Behind the description of every book, Amazon puts some criticism as suggestions, which come from booksellers, professional critics, and even common readers who have purchased this book. Generally speaking, we would trust them and rely on their criticism for guidance. What is a best seller?感觉有点突兀 呵呵 Firstly, it should be recommended wholeheartedly by critics. And then many people would read it just because they are suggested to purchase it. This phenomenon aptly illustrates nowadays critics’ importance. While artists create artworks, critics judge which is good or which is bad, at least to some extent.   

In sum, artists create artworks which in turn facilitate the dissemination of lasting values. However, critics help us comprehend these artworks and even select and filter them for us. Without artists, no artwork would exist. But without critics, we would be confused by vague literary expression or be immersed in the boundless ocean of artworks. So therein lies contributions of each.


总的说来,举例真的很丰富,而且每个例子都能展得很开,说得比较透彻来支持你的观点
但是写这么多,有时候可能没有必要,视情况做一些精简吧

另外,你的二三段在开头找不到TS,这似乎是一种比较危险的写法
绕了一大圈才能明白你这一段要说什么,很可能会给人以误导

写得很不错了,相比我昨天写的,论述要透彻很多,我要向你学习啊:)
加油~~

G10T5UID：2101393

For cityriverson
竟然犯了这么弱智的错误，还是在观点句中，真是……
best seller的例子我也觉得比较突然，但是没想到太好的方法将它比较自然的引出。还有就是TS的问题，有时感觉在每段前面加上一个TS，很是影响全文的连贯性。比如说我写第三段是，就不知道怎么不提前面的话，直接将观点放在前面，又不会显得突然。

fxs_007UID：2101152

In this assertion, the speaker claims that our artists contribute to social lasting values, and critics have nothing to do with them. I concede that, after all, it is artists who create countless great artworks which facilitate the dissemination and maintenance of social lasting values. At the same time, however, artists have their own unique function which cannot and should not be neglected.

Admittedly, artists are the creators of artworks, including novels, music, films, paintings, and so forth, all of which would contribute to lasting values. Novels and films provide us beautiful or solemn stories. In appreciating them, we search ourselves in the characters, experience their joys and their sorrows, and forecast ourselves’ behaviors when facing a similar dilemma. On the one hand, through imagining the involvement in the plot, it gives us a chance to confirm, refine or refute our previous values. On the other hand, the characters’ response poses great impression on us which forces us to think the true significance of life, humanity flaws and drawbacks, and ambitions deeply hidden in our nature. From the miserable life of victims of war, we could understand to cherish precious peace; from the support and influence that Lincoln gained from his stepmother, we could learn the time-honored theme of love; and even from those fantastic fictions, such as Harry Potter, we could also see honesty, courage and loyalty, which are considered as lasting values. Just through this kind of critical and thorough thinking rather than boring dictating, we would really understand lasting values. When novels and films' function seems to be comparative obvious, function of other forms of art is more indirect. Painting, a piece of paper, only illustrates us a static picture, but from which we can see painters' emotion and thought, and their comprehension about our society and values. Music, a piece of sound, even does not give us any visual impact, but its mysterious spiritual effect would calm our heart, inspire our enthusiasm which are also essential for the pursuit of true values.
一点是和楼上一样的：例子很流畅，但是没有必要这么祥细，还有一点是：你这一段似乎是说artwork的好处，但是实际上应该实说artist的好处吧

Although from above discussion artists' contributions are obvious, we are also aware that they rarely directly tell us what we should do or what we should not. Artists rarely put forward their really thought in a clear means, but prefer to elaborately design some characters and plots, paint a picture which usually is abstract, or compose a graceful melody. They hide their thought deeply and require readers to explore it or experience it through their own thinking. But, unfortunately, the comprehension of art is a hard work which calls for certain background knowledge, critical thinking and the careful comparison between imaginary world and our mundane living. Most people do not want to do it or simply are incapable to do it. Under this circumstance, critics are persons we can rely on. While artists create artworks, critics reveal their values. From The Old Man and the Sea, while Hemingway only describe a wise and patient old fisherman and his once fishing experience, critics embody the theme of courage, endurance, the fighting against nature and the relationship between life and death; and from the symphony Hero, while Beethoven only provide exciting rhythm, critics reveal the fact that it was written to honor equality and liberty. Critics’ endeavor greatly enhances artworks’ influence and contributions on lasting values.
这一段的感觉也是观点太靠后，搂住你要是用给出观点在解释型的方式来论证应该更符合老美的习惯。

Moreover, with the increasing living pace, more and more, we depend on critics to select and filter artworks and therefore their influence and contribution are soaring. Which artworks is a great one, whether the film would give us a perfect spiritual experience or is replete with violence and sex, whether this long story deserves our precious time and many such questions become hard to be answered today, because of numerous artworks and decreasing leisure time. We cannot afford this onerous task and therefore shift it to critics. 比如这里，叙述了这么多才轻描淡写一句,we need look no further than therefore shift it to critics.是不是有点少呢？如果来点artistic create..., but....Without critics, 我们就会迷失在...，不是更好么？（你的文字很好我就不献丑了）For a supporting example, we need look no further than Amazon, a famous online bookstore. Behind the description of every book, Amazon puts some criticism as suggestions, which come from booksellers, professional critics, and even common readers who have purchased this book. Generally speaking, we would trust them and rely on their criticism for guidance. What is a best seller? Firstly, it should be recommended wholeheartedly by critics. And then many people would read it just because they are suggested to purchase it. This phenomenon aptly illustrates nowadays critics’ importance. While artists create artworks, critics judge which is good or which is bad, at least to some extent.   

In sum, artists create artworks which in turn facilitate the dissemination of lasting values. However, critics help us comprehend these artworks and even select and filter them for us. Without artists, no artwork would exist. But without critics, we would be confused by vague literary expression or be immersed in the boundless ocean of artworks. So therein lies contributions of each.


感觉你叙述很好，文字能力应该不错的。但是文章叙述多，说理少，而ets似乎更关心的是文章中表现出的说理能力，叙述(举例）是为说理服务的。没关系，这是习惯的问题，相信你参考别人文章时多注意宏观理解，很快就可以提高的。

有时间帮我看一下，我就是文字烂，写不出例子，你教教我啊
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alcestisUID：2101945

说一点我的看法：
你的主要观点是批评家在赋予价值上的重要性，b1的作用是让步，但竟然一下就让了近300字削弱了你本来要表达的意思
b1关于绘画和音乐的例子可以考虑放到b2中证明artist的东西隐晦不易理解。主题句Although from above discussion artists' contributions are obvious, we are also aware that they rarely directly tell us what we should do or what we should not.的后面可以加上“这时我们就需要评论家”一类的句子加强你的观点