Argument76 Luxess是否有效，补同主题写作

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从2005年7月8日12时43分到2005年7月8日13时30分
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The following appeared as part of an article in a health and beauty magazine.
'A group of volunteers participated in a study of consumer responses to the new Luxess face cream. Every morning for a month, they washed their faces with mild soap and then applied Luxess. At the end of that month, most volunteers reported a marked improvement in the way their skin looked and felt. Thus it appears that Luxess is truly effective in improving the condition of facial skin.'
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Based on a study, the arguer claims that Luxess can improve the condition of facial skin effectively. Although at first glance, the argument appears to be plausible, careful scrutiny reveals it to be unwarranted in several respects.

To begin with, the sample and the method of the study are both questionable. First, I cast doubt on the reliability of the sample. Who did the study? How was it carried out? How were the statistics dealt with? Is it authority and representative? Without these details, perhaps the study was carried out by a group of careless and unprofessional workers, and the volunteers only related with a group of women in their twenties, who had better kin. So what about the women of thirty, or forty, or other ages? What about the effect of Luxess to men? I cannot get to know, so the study might be quite partial. Second, the study only lasts one month, which cannot fully indicate its true effects. Generally speaking, the effect of such makeup appears after, and a month-time may seem too short to observe such improvement. What about their skin two months after, or longer? It is possible that the Luxess only has a short time of effect, and after a month, it is totally useless. In such case, I cannot accept that Luxess is effective.

Moreover, the reports of the volunteers might be subjective, and without chemical and biological experiments, the judgment of the effect of the Luxess might be untenable. Before the volunteers participated in the study, they might have already accepted the hint about the Luxess's effect, so whatever the effect really is, they might feel the skin improved. So there are certain personal factors in the study. What is more, the volunteers' feeling about their improvement about their skin just comes from personal judgment without any chemical and biological experiments. Common sense tell us, different people have various standards of the condition of skins, and these reports may just be given out on different definitions of improvement. As the arguer fails to tell us what ingredients in Luxess truly effect, I cannot accept the volunteer's reports.

Finally, even if the volunteer's skin improved, there are many other factors that might be the real reason. As they use the mild soap before Luxess, the improvement may result from the mild soap. Also, as the arguer fails to prove that the volunteer only use Luxess during the day, perhaps the improvement should be attributed to other makeups. The weather and climate of the place of the survey may be very suitable for skin, which is also a factor of improvement in skin. In addition, perhaps under the treatment of the workers of the study, the volunteers treat their skin more carefully than other times, and they might have regular diets and rests, and prevent their skin from the sun light and dirty during the day, which result in the improvement.

To sum up, more strict studies and logical reasoning are needed before final judgment of the effect of Luxess. The arguer fails to do so, therefore makes the argument totally unconvincing.

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分析的非常好啊，很多方面都是我没有想到的
只是语言上有少量不太完善的地方，语法错误什么的
建议楼主自己再仔细改一遍
就肯定会是一篇5分以上的文章了：）