argument4 偷懒一下,写篇A

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Argument4:
The following was posted on an Internet real estate discussion site.
'Of the two leading real estate firms in our town—Adams Realty and Fitch Realty—Adams is clearly superior. Adams has 40 real estate agents. In contrast, Fitch has 25, many of whom work only part-time. Moreover, Adams' revenue last year was twice as high as that of Fitch, and included home sales that averaged $168,000, compared to Fitch's $144,000. Homes listed with Adams sell faster as well: ten years ago, I listed my home with Fitch and it took more than four months to sell; last year, when I sold another home, I listed it with Adams, and it took only one month. Thus, if you want to sell your home quickly and at a good price, you should use Adams.'

在本市的两家最大的房地产经纪公司--Adams Realty和Fitch Realty--之中，Adams显然更优秀一些。Adams有40名房地产经纪人，而Fitch只有25个，且很多是兼职工作。而且，Adams去年的收入是Fitch的两倍，其平均房价为$168000，而Fitch仅为$144000。在Adams销售的房屋卖得也更快：十年前，我把我的房产交给Fitch，它用了四个多月才卖出去；去年，我在Adams卖了另一处房产，仅用一个月就售出了。因此，要想让你的房产卖的更快更好，你应该选择Adams。


1.数量多不代表有优势
2.收入高还受其他因素影响
3.时间太久无法比较

In this argument, the arguer claims that real estate firm Adam is superior to Fitch. To sopport this conclusion the arguer lists the number of two estate agents, compares their revenue and cites his own experience. However, close scurtiny reveals that they provide little credible support for the arguer's conclusion.

To begin with, while Adams has 40 real estate agents, Fitch has 25, the arguer cannot conclude for sure that Adams is better than Ficth. No offical envidence that show there is a certain relation between the agent number and estate firm superiority. On the contrary, it is possible that the size of the town is not large and Fictch' 25 agents is enough, and the site of its agent is more reasonable than the Adams'.

Even if the number of angents is an important factor, that the arguer goes on to cite the revenue of Adams is twice as high as that of Fitch is also not convicing. Considering the number of two agents, the real difference is not so obvious. And the way Adams increase revenue by making use of its large number of agents is very dangerous in this more and more fierce social competence. Therefore it maybe stble to choose Fitch agent in the long run.

The arguer continues by claiming his own experience of solding house by Adams and Fitch. This argument by analogy is wholly unpersuasive. For instance,ten years ago,most sales are dealt with by hands and nowdays they are done by advanced computer technology. The diffent price and needs of estate in different time will also influence the rate of sales. Therefore, comparing the sales rate through arguer experience is not unfair for Fitch because of different time.

In conclution, the arguement is unconvincing as it stands. Not only does it leave out such key issues, but also cites in the analysis the evidence, which does not lend strong support to what arguer claims. If the argument includes the given factors discussed above, it would have been more thorough and adequate.

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In this argument, the arguer claims that real estate firm Adam is superior to Fitch. To sopport (support) this conclusion the arguer lists the number of two estate agents, compares their revenue and cites his own experience. However, close scurtiny (scrutiny) reveals that they provide little credible support for the arguer's conclusion.
这个开头很简洁，我arg的开头都太长，一般会在100字，是不是很危险？

To begin with, while Adams has 40 real estate agents, Fitch has 25, the arguer cannot conclude for sure that Adams is better than Ficth. No offical (official) envidence that show there is a certain relation between the agent number and estate firm superiority. On the contrary, it is possible that the size of the town is not large and Fictch' 25 agents is enough, and the site of its agent is more reasonable than the Adams'.

Even if the number of angents (agents) is an important factor, that the arguer goes on to cite the revenue of Adams is twice as high as that of Fitch is also not convicing (convincing). Considering the number of two agents, the real difference is not so obvious. And the way Adams increase revenue by making use of its large number of agents is very dangerous in this more and more fierce social competence. （可以在深入说个几句，说受到宏观经济影响，这样做会导致在未来利润的降低等等）Therefore it maybe stble (stable) to choose Fitch agent in the long run.

The arguer continues by claiming his own experience of solding house by Adams and Fitch. This argument by analogy is wholly unpersuasive. For instance,ten years ago,most sales are dealt with by hands and nowdays they are done by advanced computer technology. The diffent price and needs of estate in different time will also influence the rate of sales. Therefore, comparing the sales rate through arguer experience is not unfair for Fitch because of different time.
都可以深入加个几个条件，什么交通，环境，边上的商业区，学校，等等

In conclution, the arguement is unconvincing as it stands. Not only does it leave out such key issues, but also cites in the analysis the evidence, which does not lend strong support to what arguer claims. If the argument includes the given factors discussed above, it would have been more thorough and adequate.

感觉还有几段可以多写点，实在不行就上模板啊，我就这么干的

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