argument81 比较难写的一篇,可别在考场上遇见

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TOPIC: ARGUMENT81 - Allergies are an overreaction of the immune system to certain stimuli. One view is that allergies can develop as the result of childhood exposure to certain irritants, such as dust or animal dander, while the immune system is not yet mature. Another view is that exposure to particular bacteria early in childhood actually triggers the proper development of the immune system, and that limiting exposure to these bacteria through excessive hygiene can cause children's immune systems to overreact to certain irritants later on. A new study supports the second view: children who are washed especially frequently and whose parents clean their homes especially frequently are more likely to develop allergies than are other children. So in order to reduce the incidence of allergies in children and adults, parents should not limit children's exposure to irritants or bacteria.
WORDS: 395          TIME: 上午 12:30:00          DATE: 2006-7-21

第一。关于调查是否可信，是否能代表所有的孩子，这些家庭是否具有代表性，为什么经常洗澡，经常打扫，是不是因为这个地区刚好是工业区，就比较脏，或者实验是在春天进行的，本来就是比较多过敏。

第二，也没有提高足够的证据这些孩子是真的接触细菌少了？孩子除在在家里活动外，还有一个重要的地方就是学校，这里的环境和大家是一样的，细菌是很难彻底通过洗澡去除的，因为很多是通过空气传播的

第三，暴露在细菌里面也有坏处，孩子的免疫系统毕竟不成熟，可能过分暴露会导致疾病的

The author of this argument advises parents not to limit children's exposure to irritants or bacteria in order to reduce the incidence of allergies in both children and adults, and he employs two contradictive viewpoints and a study to bolster his advice. Unfortunately, his argument is specious in several aspects.

To begin with, as for that new study cited in the argument, in the absence of its procedures, its reliability is open to doubt. The statistic evidence of the number and percentage of children participating in this study is not informed, thus we have good reason to doubt whether the sample is statistically enough to draw any sound conclusion .Additionally, from the description in the argument, there is good chance that those families locate in a poor hygienic community that they have to clean their homes and wash especially frequently. Furthermore, when this study operates is also important, if it is in spring, common sense and experience tells us that the incidence of allergies during this period is higher than other seasons, there is no surprise the incidence of allergies is higher. The sample in these two cases cannot typify the situation of the whole children.

In the second place, the author do not convince us that those children involved in the study is living in an environment having less bacteria and irritants. As we know, common washing cannot remove bacteria from body, and cleaning homes frequently does not necessarily means that there would be less bacteria and irritants in the home. What is more, consider that children have spend most of time in school and other places, these places may also contains a great number of bacteria and irritants, which is being ignoring by the author.

Final and not least, even assuming that exposure to irritants and bacteria in childhood can prevent allergies in children and adults, the author fails to consider that it may also cause some disadvantages. The scientific evidence have already proved that bacteria can cause disease, how the author can guarantee that children would not catch diseases if they exposed to bacteria, especially considering that immune system in childhood remain immature.

In sum, from what has been discuss above, the author simply rely on a unreliable study to make a conclusion is not advisable. To bolter his advice, the further investigation about how bacteria and irritants cause allergies should be done and how immune system react to them should be researched as well.

paburawUID: 2204657

没人改?

wp123UID: 2187508

写的挺好。

wp123UID: 2187508

算了,兄弟,既然看了你的文章,也算我们有缘分,我就把我的一点点小小看法告诉你吧.
这道题目虽然前面说的都是大段陈述,扰乱了我们的视听.但是,只要我们把握最后结论,题目不攻自破. 其实作者在用A,B,C,....一堆,材料,来推倒----人,口,手,上,中下....
您想啊,拿英文推中文,有推的对的嘛.
所以啊,推出一个结论,咱反一个结论.
看兄弟我的攻击点吧
善在善在,出家人说出这么不逊的话,哎,其实我们佛门也不是情境地了啊~.....

首先,你要把握最后一句.最后一句说 in order to reduce... in children and adults,注意adults
全文就没提成人啥事情.成人接触啥都可能过敏的!!!!这个得攻击.

第2就是倒数第3个词汇,irritants 观点1已经说了接触到irritant会造成过敏,study又没证明观点1不对, 因此,我们绝对不能把孩子往火坑里推啊!!!! 况且,更重要的是,观点2和STUDY是在说,DEVELOP 过敏的问题,而到了 结论,直接变成了incidence 过敏的问题了,这两个词绝对不一样。所以这个一定要攻击!!!

第3 就是你说的对这个调查的怀疑,和调查与观点2之间关系的怀疑了。这个我不多说了。

这样结构文章,应该来说就比较圆满了.~呵呵.善在善在,还有2天考试了,我还啥也没看呢~呵呵呵呵,我佛慈悲,哎,,,不知道论坛上有多少像我一样的,去学佛学的...

[ 本帖最后由 wp123 于 2006-7-22 00:40 编辑 ]

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我上面的说法没考虑攻击顺序,大家自己调整吧.
楼主,你看完给我回个话祝个福吧,
我可真是啥也没看啊....

wp123UID: 2187508

顶一下,大家再看看吧.

paburawUID: 2204657

这个问题我看的好头大的,昨天看了你的留言了,回去也想了好久,可能因为我自己是医学的,所以有些先入为主的观念在里面,导致我在看题目的时候,一直一直在想我的专业知识,到最后混淆了........................傻了我..................................

paburawUID: 2204657

[quote]首先,你要把握最后一句.最后一句说 in order to reduce... in children and adults,注意adults

全文就没提成人啥事情.成人接触啥都可能过敏的!!!!这个得攻击.[/quote]这个观点不错,不过按我的专业知识,小孩时期是比大人容易过敏的,所以小时候不过敏,大了就不过敏了,不过估计这个文章的作者不是我这么想的,该攻击

第2就是倒数第3个词汇,irritants 观点1已经说了接触到irritant会造成过敏,study又没证明观点1不对, 因此,我们绝对不能把孩子往火坑里推啊!!!!

这个应该和我的第三个攻击类似,不过我只说了细菌的

况且,更重要的是,观点2和STUDY是在说,DEVELOP 过敏的问题,而到了 结论,直接变成了incidence 过敏的问题了,这两个词绝对不一样。所以这个一定要攻击!!!

are more likely to develop allergies than are other children,这句话应该就可以理解是INCIDENCE多了

paburawUID: 2204657

明天就考了哦,要我的祝福,我的祝福能值多大的价值,不过看你的分析,嘿嘿,也有点小牛的意思啦,别担心,你这种人最容易放火箭了,在这边,祝你.........................
GOOD LUCK
说不出其他的了,兄弟保重

paburawUID: 2204657

佛门就想清净,考G的人,居然还有想清净的,老兄你真是另类啊
不过你应该是考过T的吧,那就别想太多,没问题的,明天能考好