issue203 英雄的作用 (大家使劲拍啊)

leo_chenUID: 206840

203 "The best way to understand the character of a society is to examine the character of the men and women that the society chooses as its heroes or its heroines."

了解历史人物是了解社会的主要途径，但也不能忽视对不同人的了解
1．        历史是由普通人创造的
2．        英雄受到更多的关注和记载，了解他们比了解普通人更加方便
3．        英雄的事迹是一个社会发展最耀眼的部分，他们很大程度上的领导着文化的发展

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Human is the one of most important aspects in the study of history and politics, because not only the significant events but also long-term evolutions are driven by people.  As a result, the most effective way to understand a society is to investigate the heroes or heroines in the society among other approaches.

It is true in theory that, a through study on a society requires careful check on every person in the society whether or not he or she is famous, because society, as well as its history, is the crystal of the involved humans activities. Technically, the target of social research is concerned with human social relations or group life.  Not could a great achievement in a society be done if not for the combined supports from the mass.  For example, the victory of WWII against Nazi cost millions of lives; while the construction of Hove Dam consumed countless efforts of the workers.  

However, it is much easier for researches to track the footsteps of heroes or heroines, because their highlight activities were reported and documented specifically.  Heroes or heroines often refer to the notable person who contribute to the society most and are memorized by the public.  Because of their admirable achievements and influence, their story cost most of historians' ink in their works and attracted most of attention from reporters.  By the detailed materials on the character of heroes or heroines, social researchers can access the necessary documents on their topics without too much trouble in information collection.  In contrast, the common people, general speaking, was covered under the lights of their heroes or heroines.  It is hard, for researchers, to dig out the interested information of common people, such as works, characters and thoughts.


Moreover, as a part of treasure to be analyzed, the character of heroes or heroines leads the social evolution in every aspects ranging from arts to science, and from politics to business.  In every critical moment in history, it is the leaders to decide the direction of future.  Without the vision of President F D. Roosevelt, Nazi would probably invaded the Europe, and Japan might occupy the region of Asia-Pacific.  Likewise, if not for the belief of President Washington in freedom and democracy, America would be ruled by King Washington from generation to generation instead of presidents elected by people.   To some considerable extends, the characters of a society is steered by the beliefs of their leaders.  Therefore, analyzing the characters of the leaders could help researchers to understand the essence of a society, especially to the important changes.

In a conclusion, although social development is achieved by the combined efforts of every person, the major and effective approach in sociology is to understand the activities of the men and women respected as heroes and heroines.

Nikita56cnUID: 2104632

Human is the one of most important aspects 用subject行不行哦？ in the study of history and politics, because not only the significant events but also long-term evolutions are driven by people.  As a result, the most effective way to understand a society is to investigate the heroes or heroines in the society among other approaches.第一句和第二句因果关系不明显，people和heroes/heroines不是一个概念啊

It is true in theory that theoretically, it is true that a through thorough study on a society requires careful check on every person in the society whether or not he or she is famous, because society, as well as its history, is the crystal of the involved humans activities. Technically, the target of social research is concerned with human social relations or group life.  Not could a great achievement in a society be done accomplished if not for the combined supports from the mass.  For example, the victory of WWII 写完整吧 World War II against Nazi cost 换一个词 millions of lives; while the construction of Hove Dam consumed countless efforts of the workers. 你在说人民群众创造的历史，应该是在褒扬人民，但是举的例子用的词没体现出来这种褒扬，给人的感觉是人民上当受骗了，付出了惨痛的代价

However, it is much easier for researches to track the footsteps of heroes or heroines, because their highlight activities were reported and documented specifically.  Heroes or heroines often refer to the notable person who contribute to the society most and are memorized by the public.  Because of their admirable achievements and influence, their story cost most of historians' ink in their works and attracted most of attention from reporters.  By the detailed materials on the character of heroes or heroines, social researchers can access the necessary documents on their topics without too much trouble in information collection.  In contrast, the common people, genera lly speaking, was covered dimmed under the lights of their heroes or heroines.  It is hard, for researchers, to dig out the interested information of common people, such as works, characters and thoughts.

Moreover, as a part of treasure to be analyzed, the character of heroes or heroines leads the social evolution in every aspects ranging from arts to science, and from politics to business.  In every critical moment in history, it is the leaders to删 that/who decide the direction of future.  Without the vision of President F D. Roosevelt, Nazi would probably invaded删 inthe Europe, and Japan might occupy the region of Asia-Pacific.  Likewise, if not for the belief resolution of President Washington in freedom and democracy, America would be ruled by King Washington “Kings” from generation to generation instead of presidents elected by people.   To some considerable extends extent, the characters of a society is steered by the beliefs of their leaders.  Therefore, analyzing the characters of the leaders could help researchers to understand the essence of a society, especially to the important changes.

In a conclusion, although social development is achieved by the combined efforts of every person, the major and effective approach in sociology is to understand the activities of the men and women respected as heroes and heroines.

看你的提纲，立场是有倾向性的赞成，但文章首尾段给我的感觉就跟提纲不一致，更像完全赞成。呵呵这个问题也不大就是了，提纲又不用交。
如果写完全赞成，可以再把后两段写详细点，分析深点（但我也不晓得怎么才叫深入）第4段例子举的好些，可以再写细点而不是一句带过，这样字数也多点嘛。第3段是说从“技术上”更可行，是吧？感觉不太好，又不知道怎么说。。。差不多就这么多。对了，语言还要提高，我自己也是

逗逗UID: 173558

这篇个题目和我写过的一篇精英和大众在历史中的作用有点象，但是我觉得本篇的重点还在于分析精英的特点是否能代表整个社会上。还有关于题目中的“the best way to"．在保留的观点或对立立场上可以谈一下有没有alternative way．

首段句子的衔接不太好，刚开始读第一句以为people是想强调人民大众，后一句就变成的heroes or heroines ，首段紧扣题目的中心词和其指出的关系．
第二段的例子是需要斟酌一下．
第三段如果从研究的方法（way)上看，资料的易获得性的确可以作为论点．
第四段的论证不够深入，具体谈下精英是如何改变的人民大众的视野，如何引导了历史事件的走向，他们的言论和行为又是如何体现了当代社会的特征的．

sophywUID: 203712

203 "The best way to understand the character of a society is to examine the character of the men and women that the society chooses as its heroes or its heroines."

了解历史人物是了解社会的主要途径，但也不能忽视对不同人的了解
1．        历史是由普通人创造的
2．        英雄受到更多的关注和记载，了解他们比了解普通人更加方便
3．        英雄的事迹是一个社会发展最耀眼的部分，他们很大程度上的领导着文化的发展

465 words

Human is the one of most important aspects in the study of history and politics, because not only the significant events but also long-term evolutions are driven by people.  As a result, the most effective way to understand a society is to investigate the heroes or heroines in the society among other approaches.
（主提句和提纲相悖，不是说平衡观点吗？读下来，觉得还是本句观点）

It is true in theory that, a through study on a society requires careful check on every person in the society whether or not he or she is famous, because society, as well as its history, is the crystal of the involved humans activities. Technically, the target of social research is concerned with human social relations or group life.  Not could a great achievement in a society be done if not for the combined supports from the mass.  For example, the victory of WWII against Nazi cost millions of lives; while the construction of Hove Dam consumed countless efforts of the workers.  （还可以在深入论证，虽然我现在不知道如何深入，总觉得有点薄弱）

However,（转折) it is much easier for researches to track the footsteps of heroes or heroines, because their highlight activities were reported and documented specifically.  Heroes or heroines often refer to the notable person who contribute to the society most and are memorized by the public.  Because of their admirable achievements and influence, their story cost most of historians' ink in their works and attracted most of attention from reporters.  By the detailed materials on the character of heroes or heroines, social researchers can access the necessary documents on their topics without too much trouble in information collection.  In contrast, the common people, general speaking, was covered under the lights of their heroes or heroines.  It is hard, for researchers, to dig out the interested information of common people, such as works, characters and thoughts.（还是从历史的角度，觉得不妥当，从现在的角度来看呢，研究普通人的确也要费工夫，要做调查，了解等等）

Moreover, as a part of treasure to be analyzed, the character of heroes or heroines leads the social evolution in every aspects ranging from arts to science, and from politics to business.  In every critical moment in history, it is the leaders to decide the direction of future.  Without the vision of President F D. Roosevelt, Nazi would probably invaded the Europe, and Japan might occupy the region of Asia-Pacific.  Likewise, if not for the belief of President Washington in freedom and democracy, America would be ruled by King Washington from generation to generation instead of presidents elected by people.   To some considerable extends, the characters of a society is steered by the beliefs of their leaders.  Therefore, analyzing the characters of the leaders could help researchers to understand the essence of a society, especially to the important changes.

In a conclusion, although social development is achieved by the combined efforts of every person, the major and effective approach in sociology is to understand the activities of the men and women respected as heroes and heroines.

说一个很严肃的问题，这个题目好像说的是社会的特征，而并非历史，我们是不是可以这样理解，社会是指的是当代，而并非对于以前时光的理解，所以，这篇文章从提纲来看有走题之嫌，而且是完全走了 :L

看了文章，好像还可以，没有太走，如果要从历史角度出发，建议说。。。。的社会，而不要有历史的字眼。

总体读下来，觉得还是有所侧重，侧重于英雄对于研究社会的重要性，观点挺明确的，差点被你的提纲误导了，你把第二段写成了本文反对的内容，但是你没有批驳他，觉得还是有点遗憾，或者写成让步，也没有，这样的布局是否合理，还有待讨论。

总之，是从历史的角度来看问题，而并非题目中所说的社会，有跑题之嫌

conquer0824UID: 2102638

个人觉得这篇文章有点跑题，这个题目和逗逗说的那个精英与大众在历史中的作用还是不一样的，这是一道问题解决行的题目，安新东方老师的归类。所以可以先肯定文中的观点，说英雄的确可以帮助我们理解社会的特征，比如毛泽东当年评英雄母亲，可以看出当时重视人的力量，不过这个观点还是不要写了吧，最好写点通用的老外知道的。纳粹德国将战争贩子希特勒定为英雄，体现了他们的侵略性等等，还有好多这样的例子。肯定完了再用他因法，说还有其他的方法可以帮我们理解社会形态。

leo_chenUID: 206840

大家都在拍我提纲和文章不相符:L
可能这篇文章写得太草率了，提纲还没想好就动手。原来是想写一个大正小负的论点。结果写着写着自己的立场就变了。

if_lotusUID: 175616

了解历史人物是了解社会的主要途径，但也不能忽视对不同人的了解
1．        历史是由普通人创造的
2．        英雄受到更多的关注和记载，了解他们比了解普通人更加方便
3．        英雄的事迹是一个社会发展最耀眼的部分，他们很大程度上的领导着文化的发展

465 words

Human is the one of most important aspects in the study of history and politics, because not only the significant events but also long-term evolutions are driven by people.  As a result, the most effective way to understand a society is to investigate the heroes or heroines in the society among other approaches.

It is true in theory that, a through study on a society requires careful check on every person in the society whether or not he or she is famous[这段如果不想大动的话，是不是可以改为：best way应该是分析社会中每个人的character，而不仅限于examine the charater of heroes。或者退一步说，在短时期内，可以examine the charater of heroes，如果有时间，想全面地了解社会的character，应该分析社会中每个人的character], because society, as well as its history, is the crystal of the involved humans activities. Technically, the target of social research is concerned with human social relations or group life.  Not could a great achievement in a society be done if not for the combined supports from the mass.  For example, the victory of WWII against Nazi cost millions of lives; while the construction of Hove Dam consumed countless efforts of the workers.

However, it is much easier for researches to track the footsteps of heroes or heroines, because their highlight activities were reported and documented specifically.  Heroes or heroines often refer to the notable person who contribute to the society most and are memorized by the public.  Because of their admirable achievements and influence, their story cost most of historians' ink in their works and attracted most of attention from reporters.  By the detailed materials on the character of heroes or heroines, social researchers can access the necessary documents on their topics without too much trouble in information collection.  In contrast[对比用得好！], the common people, general speaking, was covered under the lights of their heroes or heroines.  It is hard, for researchers, to dig out the interested information of common people, such as works, characters and thoughts.
[这段不错]


Moreover, as a part of treasure to be analyzed, the character of heroes or heroines leads the social evolution in every aspects ranging from arts to science, and from politics to business.  In every critical moment in history, it is the leaders to decide the direction of future.  Without the vision of President F D. Roosevelt, Nazi would probably invaded the Europe, and Japan might occupy the region of Asia-Pacific.  Likewise, if not for the belief of President Washington in freedom and democracy, America would be ruled by King Washington from generation to generation instead of presidents elected by people. [你所列举的这些heroes，到底能代表了什么社会character呢？这点没有挑明]  To some considerable extends, the characters of a society is steered by the beliefs of their leaders.  Therefore, analyzing the characters of the leaders could help researchers to understand the essence of a society, especially to the important changes.
[题目并没有让你分析英雄在社会推动方面起什么作用，有点跑]

In a conclusion, although social development is achieved by the combined efforts of every person[这个分句跑题], the major and effective approach in sociology is to understand the activities of the men and women respected as heroes and heroines.

单看提纲的话，1、3都有点跑，题目是the best way to...问题解决型，是讨论通过examine the charater of heroes的方法来understand the character of a society到底好不好。

fhxyweiUID: 157384

我觉得这篇文章不是比较精英和大众；
题目的核心在这里：
英雄的特征究竟能不能代表一个社会的特征？

leo_chenUID: 206840

我的文章用的是有倾向的平衡观点：
1。社会是由普通人构成，理论上说只有了解大众才能完整的了解社会
2。研究英雄的资料详尽，了解起来更加方便
3。英雄通常也是leader，他们决定了社会的发展方向。因此更加重要

leo_chenUID: 206840

[你所列举的这些heroes，到底能代表了什么社会character呢？这点没有挑明]

这里的确有缺陷，应该多加几句话，把英雄的重要性突出出来。

这段如果不想大动的话，是不是可以改为：best way应该是分析社会中每个人的character，而不仅限于examine the charater of heroes。或者退一步说，在短时期内，可以examine the charater of heroes，如果有时间，想全面地了解社会的character，应该分析社会中每个人的character

嗯，可以改成。
It is true that if we are only focus on the characters of heros and heroines, but ignorace the existence of the ordinary, we may face the risk of hasty generalized conclusion, because society, as well as its history, is the crystal of the involved humans activities.

if_lotusUID: 175616

恩，如果B1这样改的话，可以放在最后一段，不做重点。