issue103 v6 8。19 主要花在了构思上的时间多些！

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103 "The study of history has value only to the extent that it is relevant to our daily lives."

15:46 2005-8-19

I totally agree with the speaker's assertion. Besides, it is unnecessary for the author to use 'only' since in my opinion everything regarded as values is beneficial to one's personal development, which is actually involves one's daily life.

Mainly, people are inclined to judge whether something have value or not according to the ensuing benefits in two aspects--material and mental benefits. In fact, study of history suits both of two criteria, and therefore helps improve the personal development which is shown in one's daily life.

Firstly, through the study of science history, we learned the basic principles in scientific areas, which could be applied in new technology that leading to our comfortable life nowadays. Today, we could conveniently communicate with our friends or relatives through mobile phone or internet, greatly reducing time as before. The air-conditioning in summer provides us cool environment in house. Fast developed technology in pharmacy encourages us to be calm when facing diseases, which might cause great pressure to medieval people. Are these new technologies not relevant to our daily life? Without studying of science history, which includes the great scientists' intelligent contribution as basis for all technologies, we human beings may still live in the barbarism. In short, study of science history indirectly satisfied our desire in material aspects relevant to our daily life.

Furthermore, when concerning the mental aspects, on the one hand, study of heroes or heroines inspires us to be brave when facing adversity in our daily life. They also persuade us to comply with high moral standard in whatever situation. Copernicus's persistence in pursuing for truth despite pressure from religion authority instills us the character of insistence. Mother Teresa, who got the Nobel Prize for her dedication to helping the poorest in India, shows us the kind heart of mankind and tells us to help others in need. There are also many others' good characters of famous people in the history available. If integrating these characters, people would present them naturally in daily life and also are most likely to earn good reputation from others.

Studying of history also provides us opportunities to appreciate the great value of beautiful arts like paintings, perfect constructions, sound music, all of which satisfy our aesthetic needs and add to happiness in daily life. For instance, the world famous art gallery 卢孚宫 , the beautiful music from Mozart, the attractive and puzzling smile from great work Mona Lisa, all of these works in history make it possible for us to touch the essence of human world.

Above are only several examples that illustrate the benefits of studying of history while there are also many others that have not been shown. Whatever we are studying, including history, we are benefiting from absorbing others' experience to make personal development, shown in our daily life.

16:51 2005-8-19

kobestrongUID: 2117374

占着～～

kobestrongUID: 2117374

I totally agree with the speaker's assertion. Besides, it is unnecessary for the author to use 'only' since in my opinion everything regarded as values is beneficial to one's personal development, which is actually involves one's daily life.

Mainly, people are inclined to judge whether something have value or not according to the ensuing benefits in two aspects--material and mental benefits. In fact, study of history suits both of two criteria, and therefore helps improve the personal development which is shown in one's daily life.(其实这段可以列到第一段里面去说)

Firstly, through the study of science history, we learned the basic principles in scientific areas, which could be applied in new technology that leading to our comfortable life nowadays. Today, we could conveniently communicate with our friends or relatives through mobile phone or internet, greatly reducing（which greatly saves）这里好象不能用ing吧？ time as before. The air-conditioning in summer provides us cool environment in house. Fast developed technology in pharmacy encourages us to be calm when facing diseases, which might cause great pressure to medieval people.（这句读的有点不通，从句的主语是什么？） Are these new technologies not relevant to our daily life? Without studying of science history, which includes the great scientists' intelligent contribution as basis for all technologies, we human beings may still live in the barbarism. In short, study of science history indirectly satisfied our desire in material aspects relevant to our daily life.

Furthermore, when concerning the mental aspects, on the one hand, study of heroes or heroines inspires us to be brave when facing adversity in our daily life. They also persuade us to comply with high moral standard in whatever situation. Copernicus's persistence in pursuing for truth despite pressure from religion authority instills us the character of insistence. Mother Teresa, who got the Nobel Prize for her dedication to helping the poorest in India, shows us the kind heart of mankind and tells us to help others in need. There are also many others' good characters of famous people in the history available. If integrating these characters, people would present them naturally in daily life and also are most likely to earn good reputation from others.

Studying of history also provides us opportunities to appreciate the great value of beautiful arts like paintings, perfect constructions, sound music, all of which satisfy our aesthetic needs and add to happiness in daily life. For instance, the world famous art gallery 卢孚宫 Grande Gallery of the Louvre, the beautiful music from Mozart, the attractive and puzzling smile from great work Mona Lisa, all of these works in history make it possible for us to touch the essence of human world. 这段显得好单薄啊！尽量再多说点！可以就艺术如何让我们感受到快乐说点
Above are only several examples that illustrate the benefits of studying of history while there are also many others that have not been shown. Whatever we are studying, including history, we are benefiting from absorbing others' experience to make personal development, shown in our daily life.

语言还要润色！最好别重复用同一个简单的词！
结构可以，将value分成物质和精神上说不错！
另外，我对这个题目的理解还有点疑惑：
所谓与生活相关的历史到底是指什么啊？大点说，一切在研究的历史都终将有利与生活，要不不会有人去研究啊；小点说的话，那范围又太小了！

[ Last edited by kobestrong on 2005-8-19 at 20:06 ]

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Fast developed technology in pharmacy encourages us to be calm when facing diseases, which might cause great pressure to medieval people.（这句读的有点不通，从句的主语是什么？）

改为....be calm when facing diseases that might caused.....也许好些！
唉，语言质量下降中！