Issue4 v6

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Issue4  第2篇 让砖头来得更猛烈些吧！
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作者：寄托家园作文版普通用户         478 words
从2005年7月23日15时58分到2005年7月23日15时0分
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No field of study can advance significantly unless outsiders bring their knowledge and experience to that field of study.
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It is true that even if without the help of other fields, advantage of one field can be taken by itself, however, as our knowledge largely increases nowadays, there are inevitably relationship among the fields, and many significant advantage are made because the effect of many fields together.

Admittedly, one field of study can advantage by itself. To some extent, with some characters which can tell itself from another, one field of study can develop independently. It have its own bases, own method and own ways to develop. Take math for example, first math was used to count things, then it develop into many branches including abstract aspect and other aspects, nowadays Topology as an important branch come form math influences our lives. In retrospect math mainly go its own way alone. Even in this modern society, knowledge of many fields influences each other, usually a math scientist can use a piece of paper, a pen, and a wise head to work out complex problems of math and make progress without the help with other fields of study. Thus, some times one field of study does can make advance all by itself.

However, nowadays, as our information increases so quickly and the communication became so convenience, many fields have necessarily relationship. Like in a forest, each tree stands for a field of study, and as these trees grow higher and more flourishing, the branches of these trees may contact each other. For example, when people work a math problem, the complex calculation usually bring the scientists much trouble, but computer which is fast in calculating just can help to make these things easier; when research a basic reason of a disease people may need more information about gene, to analyze every molecular of gene people may need chemistry and physics together. On the other hand high technology such as internet makes it possible that if one success in one field occurred, it can be used in other fields in a short time. Thus, it is very hard to cut up the relationship among the fields of study.

Furthermore, many significant advantages which make our lives so convenience owe to the study by several fields together. Important success which has great value usually needs a lot of knowledge including many fields. For example, the most important invention in the modern world may be computer, making a program to make the computer to work need math method, and putting thousands of small parts in very narrow place to make a computer needs physics, and to chose a material of these parts which is cheap as well as with good quality needs chemistry. Thus, this significant advantage does need many fields together.

To sum up, although one field of study can advantage by itself, if people separate each of them in this modern world, hardly any important advantage can be made.

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It is true that even if without the help of other fields, advantage of one field can be taken by itself, however, as our knowledge largely increases nowadays, there are inevitably relationship among the fields, and many significant advantage are made because the effect of many fields together.（开头这两句话有一点相互冲突的感觉，最好界定一下程度或者是范围）

Admittedly, one field of study can advantage by itself. To some extent, with some characters which can tell itself from another, one field of study can develop independently. It have its own bases（basis）, own method and own ways to develop. Take math for example, first math was used to count things, then it develop into many branches including abstract aspect and other aspects, nowadays Topology as an important branch come form math influences our lives. In retrospect math mainly go its own way alone. Even in this modern society, （in which）knowledge of many fields influences each other, usually a math （matic） scientist can use a piece of paper, a pen, and a wise head to work out complex problems of math and make progress without the help with other fields of study. Thus, some times one field of study does can make advance all by itself.

However, nowadays, as our information increases so quickly and the communication became so convenience, many fields have necessarily （adj） relationship. Like in a forest, each tree stands for a field of study, and as these trees grow higher and more flourishing, the branches of these trees may contact each other. （这个比喻很新颖，呵呵，但可以参考一下280对这个观点的论述） For example, when people work a math problem, the complex calculation usually bring the scientists much trouble, but computer which is fast in calculating just can help to make these things easier; when research a basic reason of a disease people may need more information about gene, to analyze every molecular of gene people may need chemistry and physics together. On the other hand high technology such as internet makes it possible that if one success in one field occurred, it can be used in other fields in a short time. Thus, it is very hard to cut up the relationship among the fields of study. （最后这两句对应的不是特别的直接和有力，中心是whether a discipline can advance or not，这几句在讨论necessarily，需要调整一下角度，再把中心强调出来，比如说：without interaction among myriad disciplines, their existence is still open to doubt, let alone advancement）

Furthermore, many significant advantages which make our lives so convenience  （adj）owe to the study by several fields together. Important success which has great value usually needs a lot of knowledge including many fields. For example, the most important invention in the modern world may be computer, making a program to make the computer to work need math method, and putting thousands of small parts in very narrow place to make a computer needs physics, and to chose a material of these parts which is cheap as well as with good quality needs chemistry. Thus, this significant advantage does need many fields together. （这一段的讨论重心转到了social development和学科交叉上来，说不准是否合适）

To sum up, although one field of study can advantage by itself, if people separate each of them in this modern world, hardly any important advantage can be made. （结尾的问题同开头一样--最好作以界定）

总体上说还是不错的，思路上基本上没有问题，但是要注意语言的细节，至少要做到少出低级错误--比如说词性的混淆