2009 进军美利坚作文组作业

HYPS2011UID: 2618437

一年至少上课11个月，可以更好更有效地学习。同意这种说法吗？不同意。
sometimes people tend to believe that the amount of time that spent on study or work is largely related to the achievement .However , from my personal experience i firmly contradict such statement and the conspicuous reasons and instances that support my view go as follows .

The decisive factor I think should be pointed out at the very beginning is that "all time study and no play makes jerk a dull boy". For different grades of students their main responsibilities are varied . Take
a first grade child for instance, the child's work is to play games to adjust the new environment while if they allowed to sit quietly with 20 minutes you will find that really is a difficult .similarly, the high school students might under severe pressure for the college entrance examination ,but too much time studying will be harmful for their physical development . thus, because of different ages and learning background differ from students to students that compelling them to learn as much as 11 months one year is not wise.

Another equally important element accounting for my propensity lies in the fact that naturally as the process of study itself goes people's learning in most cases depend on their own rather than the teacher . for the reason that classes given by the teacher are designed for most students thus boring or uninteresting you may feel is quite a common thing , under this situation studying by yourself after class is a good complementary way of learning .otherwise, if most of time are occupied by the teacher and that there is no schedule for your own plan .Hardly can you make any tiny progress on the subject .even worse you may lose confident and courage in the final. in this sense, too much class time may be counterproductive ,even harmful .because too tight class schedule means too little freedom time for self study .

while , we have to admit that learning enough time actually has certain merits on one complex and totally new field, for any new explorers need a large amount of time and energy to learn about this fresh field and then can make accomplishments on it .

In the final analysis , according to the forgoing discussion ,we can safely come to the conclusion that students required to attend class 11 months per year may go against with the original purpose of education, for the different needs among different students and self studying values  .

我是chineseladyUID: 2662783

sometimes people tend to believe that the amount of time that spent on study or work is largely related to the achievement总觉得宾语从句的主语和宾语换下跟通顺的, 你再读读看的说 .However , from my personal experience i firmly contradict such statement and the conspicuous reasons and instances that support my view go as follows 开头很好很干脆

The decisive factor I think should be pointed out at the very beginning is that "all time study and no play makes jerk汗..杰克怎么变成混蛋了..拼写错误 a dull boy". For different grades of students(students in different grades) their main responsibilities are varied . Take a first grade child for instance, the child's work is to play games to adjust the new environment while if they (are)allowed to sit quietly with 20 minutes you will find that really is a difficult .similarly, the high school students might under severe pressure for the college entrance examination ,but too much time studying will be harmful for their physical development . thus, because of different ages and learning backgrounds differ from students to students that compelling them to learn as much as 11 months one year is not wise.

Another equally important element accounting for my propensity lies in the fact that naturally as the process of study itself goes people's learning in most cases depend on their own rather than the teacher . for the reason is that classes given by the teacher are designed for most students thus boring or uninteresting you may feel is quite a common thing个人觉得跟前部分句子不搭配 (even if some students feel bored and are not interested in) , under this situation studying by yourself after class is a good complementary way of learning .otherwise, if most of time are occupied by the teacher and that there is no schedule for your own plan .Hardly can you make any tiny progress on the subject .even worse you may lose confident and courage in the final. in this sense, too much class time may be counterproductive ,even harmful .because too tight class schedule means(results in) too little freedom time for self study这观点好的

while , we have to admit that learning enough time actually has certain merits on one complex and totally new field, for any new explorers need a large amount of time and energy to learn about this fresh field and then can make accomplishments on it .

In the final analysis , according to the forgoing discussion ,we can safely come to the conclusion that students required to attend class 11 months per year may go against with the original purpose of education, for the different needs among different students and self studying values. 句子结构不错的写作功底也好.表达的很干脆.

larcwingUID: 2528204

1# HYPS2011

sometimes people tend to believe that the amount of time that spent on study or work is largely related to the achievement（这句读起来总觉得很不顺。。。） .However , from my personal experience i firmly contradict such statement and the conspicuous reasons and instances that support my view go as follows. The decisive factor I think should be pointed out at the very beginning is that "all time study and no play makes jerk(Jack，你的拼写错误和typing错误有点多，还是需要注意下) a dull boy". For different grades of students(students in different grades) their main responsibilities are varied . Take a first grade child for instance, the child's work is to play games to adjust(adapt to) the new environment while if they allowed to sit quietly with(within) 20 minutes you will find that really is a difficulty(这句很费解。。。句子结构有点问题） .similarly, the high school students might under severe pressure for the college entrance examination ,but too much time studying will be harmful for their physical development . thus, because of different ages and learning background differ from students to students that compelling them to learn as much as 11 months one year is not wise.(这段例子的表述对于证明你的分论点似乎不是太有效。。。你的分论点并没有把学生进行区分，所以后面突然区分来讲我觉得有点突兀。。。) Another equally important element accounting for my propensity lies in the fact that naturally as the process of study itself goes people's learning in most cases depends on their own rather than the teacher . for the reason that classes given by the teacher are designed for most students thus boring or uninteresting you may feel is quite a common thing , under this situation studying by yourself after class is a good complementary way of learning .otherwise, if most of (the) time are(is) occupied by the teacher and that there is no schedule for your own plan .Hardly(,hardly晕了。。。该用大写的时候你不用，不该大写的时候你偏又大写了。。。) can you make any tiny progress on the subject .（这里就应该大写了呀！）even worse you may lose confident(confidence) and courage in the final(end). in this sense, too much class time may be counterproductive ,even harmful .because too tight class schedule means too little freedom time for self study.（最后这两句话不错，比较有说服力~~） while , we have to admit that learning enough time actually has certain merits on one complex and totally new field, for any new explorers need a large amount of time and energy to learn about this fresh field and then can make accomplishments on it . In the final analysis , according to the forgoing discussion ,we can safely come to the conclusion that students required to attend class 11 months per year may go against with the original purpose of education, for the different needs among different students and self studying values(varies). 文章结构不错，词汇也比较多，句型有变化~~总体不错 但是一定要注意拼写和typing错误的问题。。。多了也是很影响得分的！！平时就要严格按要求来打字，不然有了不好的打字习惯到考试就麻烦了。。。