进军美利坚小组之综合写作作业 Steven Ku

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12.3 TPO3 Integrated Writing by Steven Ku
自己先把错字啥的改了

In the lecture, the speaker acknowledges the details described in the passage, however, he states that the painting known as Portrait of an Elderly Woman in a White Bonnet is Rembrandit's work, challenging what is asserted in the passage that P is not painted by R.

To begin with, the speaker refutes the viewpoint in the passage that there is an inconsistent about the way the woman dressed in the painting. From the lecture, the speaker says that the fur collar is added by someone else many years after the original painting in order to increase the value of the work. Therefore, the reason in the passage cannot convince us.

Next, contrary to the belief in the passage that the light and shadow does not fit together, the professor says that if we remove the fur collar in the painting, the light would illuminate the woman's face perfectly, and the light and the shadow is very realistic. Thus, the passage does not make sense.

Finally, the lecturer points out that the wood panel style should not attribute to R, in contrast, the passage holds the opposite opinion. In accordance with the lecture, the speaker says that the panel is added by others as well for they want to make the painting more grand and valuable. Actually, the painting is based on a piece of wood. In addition, the speaker cites a fact that the wood used in the painting is the same as another painting by R. In short, the passage’s evidence cannot persuade us.

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估计我会被分到改你的作文，我就乘热打铁啦！呵呵！:lol

貌似超过字数了。这个问题一定要注意啊！还有，不要偷懒用字母代替人名哦！
主要信息都说到了，一篇不错的文章！这上面有好的我可以学习的东西啊！我都标上了蓝色。

In the lecture, the speaker acknowledges the details described in the passage, however, he states that the painting known as Portrait of an Elderly Woman in a White Bonnet is Rembrandit's work, challenging what is asserted in the passage that P is not painted by R.

To begin with, the speaker refutes the viewpoint in the passage that there is an inconsistent about the way the woman dressed in the painting. From the lecture, the speaker says that the fur collar is added by someone else many years after the original painting in order to increase the value of the work. Therefore, the reason in the passage cannot convince us.

Next, contrary to the belief in the passage that the light and shadow does not fit together, the professor says that if we remove the fur collar in the painting, the light would illuminate the woman's face perfectly, and the light and the shadow is very realistic. Thus, the passage does not make sense。

Finally, the lecturer points out that the wood panel style should not attribute to R, in contrast, the passage holds the opposite opinion. In accordance with the lecture, the speaker says that the panel is added by others as well for they want to make the painting more grand and valuable. Actually, the painting is based on a piece of wood. In addition, the speaker cites a fact that the wood used in the painting is the same as another painting by R. In short, the passage’s evidence cannot persuade us.

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In the lecture, the speaker acknowledges the details described in the passage, however, he states that the painting known as Portrait of an Elderly Woman in a White Bonnet is Rembrandit's work, challenging what is asserted in the passage that P[正式考试的时候，你是打算用这个P代替整个画的名称那么长？如果全都敲上的话，与上句重复了。最好还是用the picture。别用字母代替了，又不是做听力笔记，这是写作文呢] is not painted by R.

To begin with, the speaker refutes the viewpoint in the passage that there is an inconsistent[inconsistency] about the way the woman dressed in the painting. From[In] the lecture, the speaker says that the fur collar is added by someone else many years after the original painting in order to increase the value of the work. Therefore, the reason in the passage cannot convince us.

Next, contrary to the belief in the passage that the light and shadow does[do] not fit together, the professor says that if we remove the fur collar in the painting, the light would illuminate the woman's face perfectly, and the light and the shadow is very realistic. Thus, the passage does not make sense.

Finally, the lecturer points out that the wood panel style should not attribute[被动语态] to R, in contrast, the passage holds the opposite opinion. In accordance with the lecture, the speaker says that the panel is added by others as well for
they[不一定是复数they，也许是某一个人改的] want to make the painting more grand and valuable. Actually, the painting is based on a piece of wood. In addition, the speaker cites a fact that the wood used in the painting is the same as another painting by R[不仅是一样的木料，并且是同一棵树上的]. In short, the passage’s evidence cannot persuade us[看到你用了两次us，但我不太sure在正式的书面文体中，这么写是否合适].

总的来说，这篇文章很好很强大，论证有力，语言地道。着实不错。保持。