12.9 幽默还是严肃的老师好 请改

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12.9 Do you agree or disagree teacher who is a serious and strict person more effective than a teacher is humor and is easygoing person.

A heated debate that which teacher , a humorous or a serious one, will have more positive effect on the students is under way. Considering that a teacher who is humor and easygoing seems to be more superior on their teaching consequence, I agree the statement that a humorous teacher is more suitable for students.

To begin with, it is undeniable that a humorous teacher is apt to intrigue students' study interests. Take my experience for example. Once I attended a swimming club whose members are not skilled in swimming. You can imagine that how boring a class would be if it would have fulfilled with strict practice. Luckily, my swimming coacher,a person who has a humor sense, didn't teach us in academic discipline with a monotonous word, but rather sometimes made jokes during our practice. Because of his encouragement without serious words, I became more interested in the swimming class. Though my swimming skill can not be improved in such a short-term class, I found that I was more prefer to go to swimming pool to have a practice with the help of my humorous teacher. In contrast, if I encountered a teacher who is serious, I would have dropped up this class.

Furthermore, it is undisputable that student must be more willing to communicate with a teacher who has a humor sense. It is not exaggerate to say that humor sense is an essential character a good teacher should possess, especially for some student in primary level. My Chinese Literature teacher is a good example. as we know, some ancient Chinese articles are hard to understand, so we may have some questions about the lecture after class. If I were given a chance, I would like to ask questions to a teacher who isn't seems to be serious. My Chinese literature teacher is just a person who is welcomed because of her humor sense. She is always around by her students in her office hour, and we would not turn to a serious professor for help unless she is absent.

Judging from evidence I offered above, not only will a humorous teacher nurture students’ good awareness of studying, but also it will promote the communication between teachers and students, thus improving students' grades more apparently. Therefore, I prefer a humorous person as my teacher.

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A heated debate that which teacher , a humorous or a serious one, will have more positive effect on the students is under way（赞一个！）. Considering that a teacher who is humor and easygoing seems to be more superior on（这个用法我偷去啦！） their teaching consequence, I agree the statement that a humorous teacher is more suitable for students.

To begin with, it is undeniable that a humorous teacher is apt to intrigue students' study interests. Take my experience for example. Once I attended a swimming club whose members are （时态不一致了，were）not skilled in swimming. You can imagine that how boring a class would be if it would have fulfilled with strict practice.(用boring貌似有点不准) Luckily, my swimming coacher,a person who has a humor sense, didn't teach us in academic discipline with a monotonous word（这个地方，改成words可能好些吧）, but rather sometimes made jokes during our practice. Because of his encouragement without serious words, I became more interested in the swimming class. Though my swimming skill can （could）not be improved in such a short-term class, I found that I was more prefer (两个动词连用了)to go to swimming pool to have a practice with the help of my humorous teacher. In contrast, if I encountered a teacher who is （was） serious, I would have dropped up this class.

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Furthermore, it is undisputable that student must be (说得绝对了点)more willing to communicate with a teacher who has a humor sense. It is not exaggerate （exaggerated）to say that humor sense is an essential character a good teacher should possess, especially for some student(students) in primary level. My Chinese Literature (课程不用大写首字母吧？)teacher is a good example. as we know, some ancient Chinese articles are hard to understand, so we may have some questions about the lecture after class. If I were given a chance, I would like to ask questions to a teacher who isn't seems （两个动词连用了）to be serious. My Chinese literature teacher is just a person who is welcomed because of her humor sense. She is always around by her students in her office hour, and we would not turn to a serious professor for help unless she is absent.

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Judging from evidence I offered above, not only will a humorous teacher nurture students’ good awareness of studying, but also it will promote the communication between teachers and students, thus improving students' grades more apparently. Therefore, I prefer a humorous person as my teacher.

个人觉得这篇文章不太好写。同学已经写得不错了。语言用词我都要好好学习。就是例子写得是自己的，这个不太好。XDF的一个老师说，编一个Tom,Jim的也比用自己的好。

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12.9 Do you agree or disagree teacher who is a serious and strict person more effective than a teacher is humor and is easygoing person. ( O  i1 a) F( A, }9 k# ]
不好意思，最初看到你给我的修改的时候不知道怎么找你的地址~后来忘掉了，补上，真是对不起了，现在学会怎么找对方帖子了……:dizzy:


A heated debate that which teacher , a humorous or a serious one, will have more positive effect on the students is under way. Considering that a teacher who is humor and easygoing seems to be more superior on their teaching consequence, I agree the statement that a humorous teacher is more suitable for students.

To begin with, it is undeniable that a humorous teacher is apt to intrigue students' study interests. Take my experience for example. Once I attended a swimming club whose members are not skilled in swimming.（连起来会不会好些呢？ Take这样写有点奇怪） You can imagine that how boring a class would be if it would have fulfilled with strict practice. Luckily, my swimming coacher（coach）,a person who has a humor sense, didn't teach us in academic discipline with a monotonous word, but rather sometimes made jokes during our practice. Because of his encouragement without serious words, I became more interested in the swimming class（关键是体现爱上游泳吧，去掉class也许效果更好）. Though my swimming skill can not （建议换个不那么绝对的词，应该是表达一种可能性）be improved in such a short-term class, I found that I was more prefer to go （个人理解从逻辑上看改为going更好）to swimming pool to have a practice with the help of my humorous teacher. In contrast, if I encountered a teacher who is serious, I would（probably仅仅是因为我想到了这里，不加也没啥问题，加上为了让观点不显得极端） have dropped up（out） this class.

Furthermore, it is undisputable that (可以加个限定词，否则也太说不过去了)student must be more willing to communicate with a teacher who has a humor sense. It is not exaggerate(d) to say that humor sense is an essential character a good teacher should possess, especially for some students in primary level. My Chinese Literature teacher is a good example. as we know, some ancient Chinese articles are hard to understand, so we may have some questions about the lecture after class. If I were given a chance, I would like to ask questions to a teacher who isn't seems to be serious. My Chinese literature teacher is just a person who is welcomed because of her humor sense. She is always around by her students in her office hour, and we would not turn to a serious professor for help unless she is absent.

Judging from evidence I offered above, not only will a humorous teacher nurture students’ good awareness of studying, but also it will promote the communication between teachers and students, thus improving students' grades more apparently. Therefore, I prefer a humorous person as my teacher.

同学文章写得不错，语法错误非常少，结构也算清晰。好多词汇用的非常精彩~我学到不少哦，谢啦~
但是我觉得观点的逻辑性不强，准确的说是观点的因果关系上有时候太过极端，即使是西方人思维我想也不是这个样子吧，不过貌似这里不会影响得分。
另外建议把那个文言文的例子换个别的什么学科，省得爆料是中国考生