【1010G精英组】F组回收站 Issue144&Argument238（0531）

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第二阶段第五次作业：Issue144 Argument238

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144"It is the artist, not the critic,* who gives society something of lasting value."
*a person who evaluates works of art, such as novels, films, music, paintings, etc.

238.Thefollowing appeared in a memorandum from the president of Mira Vista College to the college's board oftrustees.
"Atnearby Green MountainCollege, which has more businesscourses and more job counselors than does Mira Vista College, 90 percent of last year'sgraduating seniors had job offers from prospective employers. But at Mira Vista College last year, only70 percent of the seniors who informed the placement office that they would beseeking employment had found full-time jobs within three months aftergraduation, and only half of these graduates were employed in their major fieldof study. To help Mira Vista's graduates find employment, we must offer morecourses in business and computer technology and hire additional job counselorsto help students with their resumes and interviewing skills."

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Ground on the fact that Green Mountain College(GMC) has more business courses and more job counselors than does Mira Vista College(MVC), and the fact that 90% of the last year's graduating seniors from GMC got job offers while 70% of the seniors from MVC had found full-time jobs, and synthesize these two incomplete facts, the author put forward some advice in order to help MVC graduates find employment, however the author fail to take into account other factors which led to a higher percentage of graduates who got job offers, whether the two college are comparable in several aspects, and he didn't prove us the details about the jobs and whether the courses in computer technology is an effective approach to help students to hunt for jobs. Thus this thoughtless argument seems illogical and unconvinced as it stands.

To begin with, the author falsely establishes the causal relationship between the fact that GMC has more business courses and job counselors than MVC does and the fact that 90% of graduating seniors from GMC got job offers. It is entirely possible that most of the seniors who got offers majored in engineering, education, law but not business. Moreover, it is also possible that MVC is not comparable with GMC in many aspects such as reputation, rank, academic achievement, for instance, which made their graduates more attractable when find jobs. Or perhaps it is simply because that GMC is a large school with more students; if so, then the comparative numbers are not likely to have any bearing on job-placement success. In short without ruling out other explanations for the difference between the jot-placement rates, the author cannot reasonably conclude that more business courses and more job counselors would enhance MVC's job-placement record.

Secondly, even assume the causal relationship exists, the another problem is that the statistics comparing job-placement rates might be distorted in many respects. First, maybe the numbers of graduates of MVC is larger than that of GMC, thus the total number of 70% of graduates is far more than the 90& of graduates of GMC. If so, the percentage cannot indicate anything to compare the job-placement record of GMC and MVC. Secondly, the author fails to prove the 90% of graduating seniors all found their jobs within three month after graduating. It is entirely possible that GMC's job-placement record is based on a long period of time. Thereby, result in a distorting the comparative success of the job counselors in helping the graduates to find jobs.

Moreover, the author overlooks the total number of job offers got by the graduates and thus ignore the detail information about the job offers. Whether the graduates of GMC got full-time jobs or were employed in their major fields are still unknown because the author didn't have sufficient evidence to make me convince. It is very likely that graduates of MVC got more full-time and advanced jobs or averagely earn much salary than the graduates of GMC. Without taking these scenarios into account, the author cannot reasonably rely on the merely fact and conclude that the MVC's job-placement record is comparatively poor and it is significant to emulate GMC to take measures.

In sum, the argument is untenable for many reasons. To strengthen it the author must should that the causal relationship between the business courses and job counselors and the job-placement record. To bolster it, the author should also prove more detail information about the total each school's number of graduates who got job offers. Meanwhile, the information about the job offers should be provided in order to evaluate the quality of job-placement. Finally, the author should provide supporting evidence that more computer courses would really enhance the job-placement record.