【AW六人行】AW7.26作业by D

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Issue No.50【六人行】by D
WORDS: 424          TIME: 00:44:16         
According to the speaker of this statement, the college and university should let their teachers to spend time working outside the academic world in professions relevant to improve their teaching level. I think this statement is fundamentally correct.

The chief reason why I generally agree with the  statement is that ,for better or worse, there are too many problems existing in colleges' or universities’ education: what the teachers' saying always far away from the practice situation. And the content of course is always boring and uninteresting. The practice experience can hear from the class hardly. Some students even don’t have a serious attitude to their own majors because they don’t like them at all. It’s really an emergency that the education needing reformed.

The another reason why I agree with the statement is that it is an excellent idea to send the teachers of applied disciplines take part in practical work. Firstly, it can inspire the interesting of the researchers and expend their field of view to learn the most current development trend. Secondly, that could help the students know more practical application about the knowledge in the books, and make the students interested in the books. It could be a part of preparation of the students to the future job.

As we all know that ,science is the first productivity of the society. All the kinds of science should service the society. The direct way is making the science into social wealth. This measure could let the teachers transform the theory into the practice and make the product better and faster. This could promote the cooperation between the schools and the companies. Then the colleges or the universities could have many chances to train their students. And of course, the schools also could get enough money to be the fund.

But the other side, I don't think there is the necessary to send the professors in sphere of learning go to work outside the academic world. It seems that there are few jobs fitting them very well. It just a deed which is wasting time. And what we expect to them is only the achievement of science, not any practice production. They should focus on the research of academic instead of unmeaningful job.

In sum, we should encourage the professors to work outside the academic world in a reasonable ways. That could be an unusual experience to the teachers, and it will benefit both the schools and the society It's a thing that contributes to contemporary and brings benefits for the future centuries.





Argument NO.17【六人行】by D

WORDS: 423          TIME: 00:36:22          DATE: 2010-7-26 10:11:04
In this argument, the arguer advocates that we should continue using EZ, Although this argument might seem reasonable at first glance, it is in fact ill-conceived. The reason are stated as follows.

In the first place , the arguer assumes that EZ collects trash twice a week, while ABC collects only once. Although this is entirely possible, the arguer offers no evidence to substantiate this crucial assumption. It is very likely that might  there is few trash in the town, so there is unnecessarily to collect the trash twice a week. And we also don't know that what kind of technology did the EZ use. The author also don't give any record about the level of the cleaning. So, the arguer's reasoning is definitely flawed unless the arguer can convince me that these and other possible scenarios are unlikely.

In the second place , the arguer assumes that EZ has ordered additional trucks. So EZ has more trucks than ABC. Nevertheless, there is no guarantee that it is necessarily the case , and the arguer does not supply any evidence to confirm this assumption. It is quite possible that EZ doesn't want the additional trucks to collect the trash ,or just lat them to collect the trash for the other city. Without accounting for and ruling out these and other alternative explanations, the arguer cannot bolster the recommendation.

The last but not the least important, even if the evidence turns out to support the foregoing assumption, the arguer just think that EZ is better than ABC because 80 percent of respondent to last year's town survey agreed that were satisfied with EZ's performance, first of all, we don't know that which group of people join in the survey. maybe most of them like EZ so they call back the survey and the people who don't like EZ don't pay attention to the survey at all. As what the survey says, EZ have service the town 10 years ,and the people don't have other reference to compare with, so it is normal to satisfied with EZ. To reach the cited conclusion, the arguer must explain either why none of these alternative is available or why none them is able to sustain.

To sum up, the arguer's argument mention above is not based on valid evidence or sound reasoning, Neither of which is dispensable for a conclusion argument. In order to draw a better conclusion, the arguer  should reason more convincing, cite some evidence that is more persuasive, and tale every possible consideration into account.

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Issue No.50【六人行】by D
WORDS: 424   TIMES: 00:44:16
According to the speaker of this[直接speaker’s] statement, the college and university should let their teachers to spend time working outside the academic world in professions relevant to improve their teaching level. I think this statement is fundamentally correct.[简洁，直接表明观点]
The chief reason why I generally agree with the statement is that ,for better or worse, there are too many problems existing in colleges' or universities’ education: what the teachers' saying always far away from the practice situation[practical application]. And the content of course is always boring and uninteresting. The practice experience can hear from the class hardly. Some students even don’t have a serious attitude to their own majors because they don’t like them at all. It’s really an emergency that the education needing reformed. [这段很流畅，理论联系现实]
The another[The another不能这样用。 Another即可。] reason why I agree with the statement is that it is an excellent idea to send the teachers of applied disciplines take part in practical work. [没看明白。。。] Firstly, it can inspire the interesting of the researchers and expend their field of view to learn the most current development trend. Secondly, that could help the students know more practical application about the knowledge in the books, and make the students interested in the books. It could be a part of preparation of the students[介词有点多，改为a part of the students’ preparation吧] to the future job.
As we all know that, science is the first productivity of the society. All the kinds of science should service the society. The direct way is making the science into social wealth. This measure could let the teachers transform the theory into the practice and make the product better and faster[不能所有的产品都faster吧，建议直接better & better]. This could promote the cooperation between the schools and the companies. Then the colleges or the universities could have many chances to train their students. And of course, the schools also could get enough money to be the fund.[可以举Stanford的例子]
But the other side, I don't think there is the necessary to send the professors in sphere of learning go to work outside the academic world. It seems that there are few jobs fitting them very well. It[It’s] just a deed which is wasting time. And what we expect to them is only the achievement of science, not any practice production. They should focus on the research of academic instead of unmeaningful[meaningless] job.
In sum, we should encourage the professors to work outside the academic world in a reasonable ways. That could be an unusual experience to the teachers, and it will benefit both the schools and the society It's[it’s] a thing that contributes to contemporary and brings benefits for the future centuries.
[总体很不错，脉络清晰，但缺少一些例证，另，看来咱俩语法都不怎么样，要不就是太粗心了……犯的错都差不多。我也才学着改，大家都加油吧~ARGUMENT正在改，稍等哈~]

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Argument NO.17【六人行】by D
WORDS: 423          TIME: 00:36:22          DATE: 2010-7-26 10:11:04
In this argument, the arguer advocates that we should continue using EZ, Although[although] this argument might seem reasonable at first glance, it is in fact ill-conceived. The reason are stated as follows.
In the first place, the arguer assumes that EZ collects trash twice a week, while ABC collects only once. Although this is entirely possible, the arguer offers no evidence to substantiate this crucial assumption. It is very likely that might there is few[用few修饰不对吧，only a little] trash in the town, so there is unnecessarily to collect the trash twice a week. And we also don't know that what kind of technology did the EZ use[the EZ used]. The author also don't[doesn’t] give any record about the level of the cleaning. So, the arguer's reasoning is definitely flawed unless the arguer can convince me that these and other possible scenarios are unlikely.
In the second place, the arguer assumes that EZ has ordered additional trucks. So EZ has more trucks than ABC. Nevertheless, there is no guarantee that it is necessarily the case, and the arguer does not supply any evidence to confirm this assumption. It is quite possible that EZ doesn't want the additional trucks to collect the trash, or just lat[let] them to collect the trash for the other city. Without accounting for and ruling out these and other alternative explanations, the arguer cannot bolster the recommendation.
The last but not the least important, even if the evidence turns out to support the foregoing assumption, the arguer just think that EZ is better than ABC because 80 percent of respondent to last year's town survey agreed that were satisfied with EZ's performance, first of all, we don't know that which group of people join in the survey. maybe [Maybe] most of them like EZ so they call back the survey and the people who don't like EZ don't pay attention to the survey at all. As what the survey says, EZ have service the town 10 years,[去掉“,”] and the people don't have other reference to compare with, so it is normal to satisfied with EZ. To reach the cited conclusion, the arguer must explain either why none of these[this] alternative is available or why none them is able to sustain.
To sum up, the arguer's argument mention above is not based on valid evidence or sound reasoning, Neither[neither] of which is dispensable for a conclusion argument. In order to draw a better conclusion, the arguer should reason more convincing, cite some evidence that is more persuasive, [去掉“,”] and tale every possible consideration into account.
[挺好的，发现都是小错误，其实ARGUMENT大家都不会有啥大错，看细节吧~]

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