我的第一篇ISSUE!求拍！！~~猛拍~~必回！我离AW只有10天了！望各路大侠指教！！

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"In order to improve the quality of instruction at the college and university level, all faculty should be required to spend time working outside the academic world in professions relevant to the courses they teach."

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Should all faculty be obliged to work outside the academic world in professions relevant to the courses that they teach for the purpose to improve the quality of instruction and university level? Admittedly, it is essential for some faculty to do so. However, I disagree with the statement insofar because it overstates the importance of working outside the academic world.

First and foremost, it is indispensable that the world is changing every moment, with the rapid pace of technological advancement and academic progress, knowledge contained in the published textbooks often lags behind the trends of the time. In addition, as a prominent leader Martin Luther King once put it, "The purpose of education is the preservation and enhancement of knowledge and the development of character within our given form of society which will best prepare the individual for the conditions of extreme novelty the near future is bringing." Follows from that, teachers' goal of education to their students also needs to accords with it. In fact, practical working experience surely will expand their horizons and bring some newest information to students. Without actively engaging in their field, it is difficult for them to learn up to date knowledge and achieve fresh insights. Education is a lifelong enterprise, so in this sense, working outside the academic world in the faculty's fields is crucial.

Aside from the advantages above, it is worthwhile for some college faculty to work in professional fields relevant they teach based on the following two benefits. On one hand, practical working experience in the non-academic world relevant to their major will improve their understanding of their own teaching courses. On the other hand, students in the college always wish to obtain something related to their future career. If their teachers can share experience of working outside they will go into raptures. Since working experience puts college faculty in a better position to help students design a more practical career planning. It can help a large number of students have a clean realization about how to do in the future.

Despite the merits above, however, I can not totally agree the speaker's statement because all faculty need to engage in the work outside relevant to their teaching courses is open to doubt. It is not feasible and necessary to do so. As far as the feasibility and necessity, the speaker neglects a fact that some faculty in professions are rarely find the job outside the academic world. After all, some professions seldom exist due to the market's not demanded. For example, maths and history teachers need not work in non-academic world because society does not offer the relevant working position. Besides, people might focus more concern on their academic results rather than something else. Thus sheer working in the academic field is enough. Also, redundant outside work may do harm to instruction at the college and university level.

From analysis above, I concede the certain academic areas in which work is beneficial to increase of quality of instruction level. Yet working in the academic field in colleges and unversities is of its importance. We should seek a balance and take all-sided consideration about the issue.

这是小弟第一篇ISSUE~~希望大侠猛拍！！我离AW只有10天啦！！拜托+指教+给我点建议~~在此谢过~

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占位晚点改~~

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Should all faculty be obliged to work outside the academic world in professions relevant to the courses that they teach for the purpose to improve the quality of instruction and university level? Admittedly, it is essential for some faculty to do so. However, I disagree with the statement insofar as it overstates the importance of working outside the academic world.

First and foremost, it is indispensable that the world is changing every moment, with the rapid pace of technological advancement and academic progress, knowledge contained in the published textbooks often lags behind the trends of the time. In addition, as a prominent leader Martin Luther King once put it, "The purpose of education is the preservation and enhancement of knowledge and the development of character within our given form of society which will best prepare the individual for the conditions of extreme novelty the near future is bringing." Follows from that, teachers' goal of education to their students also needs to accords with it. In fact, practical working experience surely will expand their horizons and bring some newest information to students. Without actively engaging in their field, it is difficult for them to learn up to date knowledge and achieve fresh insights. Education is a lifelong enterprise, so in this sense, working outside the academic world in the faculty's fields is crucial.  I guess this is the topic sentence of this paragraph.

Aside from the advantages above, it is worthwhile for some college (我觉得到这里就有矛盾了，因为前面你说it is crucial for faculties to work outside, 现在说for same faculties)faculty to work in professional fields relevant they teach based on the following two benefits. On one hand, practical working experience in the non-academic world relevant to their major will improve their understanding of their own teaching courses. On the other hand, students in the college always wish to obtain something related to their future career. If their teachers can share experience of working outside they will go into raptures. Since working experience puts college faculty in a better position to help students design a more practical career planning. It can help a large number of students have a clean realization about how to do in the future.

Despite the merits above, however, I can not totally agree the speaker's statement (这段跟上一段对应，但是也跟第一段要说的内容矛盾吧)because all faculty need to engage in the work outside relevant to their teaching courses is open to doubt. It is not feasible and necessary to do so. As far as the feasibility and necessity, the speaker neglects a fact that some faculty in professions are rarely find the job outside the academic world. After all, some professions seldom exist due to the market's not demanded. For example, maths and history teachers need not work in non-academic world because society does not offer the relevant working position. Besides, people might focus more concern on their academic results rather than something else. Thus sheer working in the academic field is enough. Also, redundant outside work may do harm to instruction at the college and university level.    (abrupt,我觉得这句挺突然的)

From analysis above, I concede the certain academic areas in which work is beneficial to increase of quality of instruction level. Yet working in the academic field in colleges and unversities is of its importance. We should seek a balance and take all-sided consideration about the issue.


第二段论证的跟后面两段是不是有些矛盾呢？不要第二段本来就是一篇完整的论证了，因为你第二段是全正，第三四段是部分支持部分反对。


个人意见，我从自己的角度来看的，你可能有不一样的思路。。。。。but anyway, that's my opinion

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O(∩_∩)O谢谢啦~~你说的也是有道理的~~好像第二段是全正。逻辑上有点问题~~要把它改一下为部分支持就好了！那那我还想请教一下，如果到现在ARGUMENT都没办法限时成功，该怎么办呢？（有一部分原因也是打字速度慢）然后ISSUE也是还不行啊…… 3# doraliu

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哈哈加油加油，前辈们说了，真正考的时候回比现在有效率些，但是。。。。加油吧。。。。