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第一楼用做心灵喊话
阅读积累--过题目--写提纲--练作文--计时模考
还要兼顾背单词 一个都不能少！
↖(^ω^)↗加油~~~为了4.5++++为了dream school~~~

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ISSUE138 - "Only through mistakes can there be discovery or progress."

From my perspective, discovery, or progress is a procedure of human being to understand the whole universe, started from recognizing through expanding, deepening and ended with utilizing in reality. In terms of mistake, it doesn't equally means to failure, instead it could be a necessary step of development. Therefore  mistake definitely helps discovery or progress, because of its inevitable feature and both of its positive influences on improving individuals' personality and seeking for the final truth.

To be sure, there are millions of errors we could blame for making messes or troubles or causing indisputable damages. But look at this through a different lens and you'll see another story -- mistakes are inevitable. Mistakes are happened in thousands of lab, treatments or hospitals anytime. There is no road map for how an organism that's not a bacterium lives and works together on this planet in numbers in excess of 6 billion. If careless, even Einstein, could make a mistake. Thus, mistake couldn't be completely avoided when pursuing successful achievements and it is fortunate that instead of harmful, mistake is significant to progress.

Qualified people are built by mistakes. Every step of discovery or progress is closely related to people's attitude and ability. Thus well-groomed individuals have more opportunities to make discovery. And for shaping a strong mind knowing the complexity of this world, for accumulating life experiences from which one could learn varied lessons, for reminding an active spirit and establishing a sense of worrying, the key to becoming a better "you" is mistake.

The tool that makes more righteous decisions is as well mistake. When facing series of changeable circumstances, it is mistake that always help keep the right direction. When making a crucial choice, it is mistake that always take clutters away and purify  people's mind. Through the history of every currently powerful country, looking for a suitable political system is a prolonged road dotted with wrong choices. If temporarily attempted capitalism failed, it may suggest that following other instructions like socialism could work. This was happened in Chinese history more than once. And those failures consolidated the whole country's determination of developing a Chinese characteristic socialism. The point of raising this example is to serve notice that mistake is important on verifying what is the real truth in order to make a discovery or progress.

I will make a mistake myself if to romantize all this any more than its strictly necessary. Sure, mistaking is not the only way to get success. Likewise, standing on the shoulders of giants is an alternative strategy. Moreover, some repeated mistakes might not deserve to be forgiven and should be corrected. However, it is undoubted that going through the darkness of mistake could there be a brightness of discovery or progress.

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From my perspective, discovery, or progress is a procedure of human being to understand the whole universe, started from recognizing through expanding, deepening and ended with utilizing in reality. In terms of mistake, it doesn't equally means to failure, instead it could be a necessary step of development. Therefore  mistake definitely helps discovery or progress, because of its inevitable feature and both of its positive influences on improving individuals' personality and seeking for the final truth.

To be sure, there are millions of errors we could blame for making messes or troubles or causing indisputable damages. But look at this through a different lens and you'll see another story -- mistakes are inevitable. Mistakes are happened (happening?) in thousands of labs, treatments or hospitals anytime. There is no road map for how an organism that's not a bacterium lives and works together on this planet in numbers in excess of 6 billion. If careless, even Einstein, could make a mistake. Thus, mistake couldn't be completely avoided when pursuing successful achievements and it is fortunate that instead of harmful, mistake is significant to progress.（过渡句）本段阐述错误的不可避免

Qualified people are built by mistakes. Every step of discovery or progress is closely related to people's attitude and ability. Thus well-groomed individuals have more opportunities to make discovery. And for shaping a strong mind knowing the complexity of this world, for accumulating life experiences from which one could learn varied lessons, for reminding an active spirit and establishing a sense of worrying, the key to becoming a better "you" is mistake. 错误帮助塑造一个人

The tool that makes more righteous decisions is as well mistake. When facing series of changeable circumstances, it is mistake that always help keep the right direction. When making a crucial choice, it is mistake that always take clutters away and purify  people's mind. Through the history of every currently powerful country, looking for a suitable political system is a prolonged road dotted with wrong choices. If temporarily attempted capitalism failed, it may suggest that following other instructions like socialism could work. This was happened in Chinese history more than once. And those failures consolidated the whole country's determination of developing a Chinese characteristic socialism. The point of raising this example is to serve notice that mistake is important on verifying what is the real truth in order to make a discovery or progress. 错误帮助做出正确的抉择。

I will make a mistake myself if to romantize all this any more than its strictly necessary. Sure, mistaking is not the only way to get success. Likewise, standing on the shoulders of giants is an alternative strategy. Moreover, some repeated mistakes might not deserve to be forgiven and should be corrected. However, it is undoubted that going through the darkness of mistake could there be a brightness of discovery or progress.结尾做出让步，并归纳全文。



楼主本文真的是非常精彩，
首先是在逻辑上抓住错误的两个功能分别展开了论述；
其次在遣词造句生动而又富有变化，特别是排比句的运用，另外很多词语也非常传神；
最后的结尾非常用精彩的让步方法使论证更加无懈可击。
就文章的衔接而言，段与段之间有过渡句链接，句与句之间也有连词照应。
除了些许语法错误外，我只有一点建议想与楼主分享：就是文章第二段论证了错误是不可避免，这一段与后文的两个分论点的逻辑关系似乎可以再加强些，因为后文似乎并没有提到错误的必然性。。。。
总而言之本文我觉得至少可以给到4分！楼主加油！

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From my perspective, discovery, or progress is a procedure of human being to understand the whole universe, started from recognizing through expanding, deepening and ended with utilizing in reality. In terms of mistake, it doesn't equally means (mean) to failure, instead it could be a necessary step of development. Therefore  mistake definitely helps discovery or progress, because of its inevitable feature and both of its positive influences on improving individuals' personality and seeking for the final truth.
To be sure, there are millions of errors we could blame for making messes or(and我认为可能好点) troubles or causing indisputable damages. But look at this through (looking through) a different lens and you'll see another story -- mistakes are inevitable. Mistakes are happened (happening) in thousands of lab, treatments or hospitals anytime. There is no road map for how an organism that's not a bacterium lives and works together (是否可以这样：for how organisms, that’s not a bacterium lives, works together)on this planet in numbers in excess of 6 billion. If careless, even Einstein, could make a mistake. Thus, mistake couldn't be completely avoided when pursuing successful achievements and it is fortunate that instead of harmful, mistake is significant to progress.(失误在所难免)

Qualified people are built by mistakes. Every step of discovery or progress is closely related to people's attitude and ability. Thus well-groomed individuals have more opportunities to make discovery. And for shaping a strong mind knowing the complexity of this world, for accumulating life experiences from which one could learn varied lessons, for reminding an active spirit and establishing a sense of worrying, the key to becoming(become) a better "you" is mistake. (排比句式用的非常的棒)

The tool that makes more righteous decisions is as well mistake. When facing series of changeable circumstances, it is mistake that always help keep the right direction. When making a crucial choice, it is mistake that always take clutters away and purify  people's mind. Through the history of every currently powerful country, looking for a suitable political system is a prolonged road dotted with wrong choices. If temporarily attempted capitalism failed, it may suggest that following other instructions like socialism could work. This was happened (happened) in Chinese history more than once. And those failures consolidated the whole country's determination of developing a Chinese characteristic socialism. The point of raising this example is to serve notice that mistake is important on verifying what is the real truth
(what the real truth is) in order to make a discovery or progress.

I will make a mistake myself if to romantize all this any more than its strictly necessary. Sure, mistaking is not the only way to get success. Likewise, standing on the shoulders of giants is an alternative strategy. Moreover, some repeated mistakes might not deserve to be forgiven and should be corrected. However, it is undoubted that going through the darkness of mistake could there be a brightness of discovery or progress.(何来倒装句？)
版主此文非常精彩，逻辑严谨：开头给出观点，根据失误的特点说失误在进步和发现过程中也很重要，紧接着说明失误的特点-在所难免，第三段失误塑造更优秀的“你”，第四段强调失误让你做出正确抉择，步步深入，而且句语句之间连词用的很好。尽管有小错误，此文仍然非常好。我要多多向你学习啊

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ISSUE 112
Some educational systems emphasize the development of students' capacity for reasoning and logical thinking, but students would benefit more from an education that also taught them to explore their own emotions.

What is the purpose of education? This question agitates scholars, schools, parents and all of the thoughtful men and women. The conventional answer is the acquisition of knowledge, the development of variety kinds of skills, as well as the formation of righteous common values. And an even more all-embracing answer is the statement that education is "to produce qualified citizens". From this point of view, the ability of reasoning and logical thinking, together with the capacity of exploring and mastering one's own emotions, is equally essential, because it could complement each other.

The function of reasoning and logical thinking is to be able to understand and analyse difficult situations, exhume theories behind simple facts, and to apply them into reality usages. In this way, one could become a helpful citizen, no matter whatever or how much he could do within his ability, to make contributions to the whole society. For instance, the child learning mathematics is learning invaluable lessons in citizenship. Arithmetic is an important pre-curriculum influencing child's later understanding of economics. As economical problems are increasingly drawing our attention, and due to its vital position in national progress, a citizen who could deal well with his own economical issues, or a professional who could carry out available solutions and policies is in desperate need. In order to handle these situations, an adequate awareness of logical and reasoning methods should be absorbed and formed through arithmetic courses.

And the meaning of concentrating on self-emotions is to build comprehensive personality and character. It is emotional relationships between individuals that connected the whole human community closely together. Therefore people who have learned to conduct the relationship with the rest of world can be called well-developed citizen, as well as cultivated quality demanded by the modern society. On one hand, some other school contacts--social activities and athletics--develop team spirit, leadership, and thoughts and considerations for others. These are all necessary in good emotional cultivations. On the other hand, a good educational system should definitely involved the participation of parents and other home surroundings. The example of those who dear to children and constantly with them is what makes the wrap and woof of their spiritual lives. And for knowing the complexity of the whole universe, for concerning the government and the society, for caring the movements of one's own mental and psychological activities, eductaion of exploring one's emotions shouldn't be ignored.

From this perspective, how shall we arrive at both objectives? My answer is grasping the art of combination and complement. The difference even contradiction between sensible and sensitive minds were clearly depicted hundreds of years ago in Jane Austin's famous novel. However, in spite of fearing its negative consequence, I perceive that reasoning mind and emotional thoughts could perfectly work with each other. There are many questions today between economy and environment, reservation and innovation, and other matter which is related to the global cooperation and competition. Mathematics and humanity are required to be intertwined, so that a effective and well-balanced solution could come out.

To be sure, in reality, few people could develop these two capacities into an equal level. Likewise, an artist who specialized in emotional affairs of course is a contributed citizen as well as a good result of education. So is a scientist. However, it is no doubt that any extremely reasoning or emotional citizens would be hardly accepted by groups of people. And those who could balance them better are supposed to be the best.

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