Argument50 同主题写作，很难很郁闷啊！想讨论一下，互拍！

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限时，有4分修改时间，但只有341字，少了，自觉第二三body重了，第三段移至第二段末尾，修改后的放在括号里，蓝字标出。加了东西后，560字。写的很郁闷！觉得小津给的第一条提纲比较偏，不太切题。;P水平不高，斑竹海涵！:victory:
提纲：
1，        在地球到达现规模之前
2，        彗星是唯一原因
3，        （指出其他原因的可能）加小津给的第一条提纲的内容
The author concludes that the water in Earth's oceans must have originated from comets'. It seems sound at first glance, but after considerate analysis, there are some flaws in it which undermine the credibility of this argument.

Firstly, the arguer fails to indicate before the globe reached the present scale, but was bigger than the primary situation, whether the water evaporated from rocks could be retained by the global gravitation. Perhaps the continuous collision of space rocks increased the earth so significant that the globe could retain a little water other than let it go off into space. Between the can and cannot there should be a moderate state. If this possibility can not be ruled out, the author's statement is doubtable.

Secondly, even if water evaporated from space rocks had gone off into space, the arguer still lack some detailed information to support his statement. He fails to provide the specific data about how often comets stroked earth and how much water comets could bring to earth. If comets ever stroked earth could not reach a certain number and total water brought by comets were not large enough to fill current oceans in earth, the statement that oceans must have originated from comets' is ridiculous to convince us.（ Moreover, I can not find any evidence to exclude other possible reasons beside from comets' which account for oceans water. It is possible that universal rain had fallen on the earth during the earth forming. There may be other unknown reasons. The author draws an only conclusion basing on an insufficient datum. Without any advanced information, the argument is not persuasive to accept.） (原来的第三点合并了)

(Last but no least, since the comets made up of frozen water and gas could cool earth, there is a problem whether comets are cold enough to solidify surface of earth. Another problem is whether comets are so excessive that before earth approaching present scale they could not melt. Both problems could not be answered basing on information provided by the author. If comets are too few to cool earth, the arguer should give us other reasons to explain earth solid. And if comets are excessive, the later falling ones could not melt to water. So what have occurred resulting in the water forming? Without any definite answer, we should keep prudent to make a credible conclusion.) (按小津给的提纲后来加的)

In sum, the statement that the author claims in the argument is rootless and needs more detailed data to convince us. He should indicate all water from space rocks which took part in forming earth gone off to space and there is no other account for the ocean water. In addition, the author should demonstrate the current oceans could be just filled with water from comets.

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The author concludes that the water in Earth's oceans must have originated from comets'. It seems sound at first glance, but after considerate analysis, there are some flaws in it which undermine the credibility of this argument.

Firstly, the arguer fails to indicate before the globe reached the present scale, but was bigger than the primary situation, whether the water evaporated from rocks could be retained by the global gravitation. Perhaps the continuous collision of space rocks increased the earth so significant that the globe could retain a little water other than let it go off into space. Between the can and cannot there should be a moderate state.（很晦涩这句话） If this possibility can not be ruled out, the author's statement is doubtable.
（我觉得从彗星撞地球是在地球产生足够引力以后撞得，还是之前呢，之前的话水不就跑了吗，这样写主要是扣住了文章前面给的背景介绍）
Secondly, even if water evaporated from space rocks had gone off into space, the arguer still lack some detailed information to support his statement. He fails to provide the specific data about how often comets stroked earth and how much water comets could bring to earth. If comets ever stroked earth could not reach a certain number and total water（应该有量the total amount of water才对哈） brought by comets were not large enough to fill current oceans in earth, the statement that oceans must have originated from comets' is (too)ridiculous to convince us.（ Moreover, I can not find any evidence to exclude other possible reasons beside from comets' which account for oceans water. It is possible that universal rain had fallen on the earth during the earth forming.(我没听说过，呵呵，有universal rain码？只要你肯定就可以的) There may be other unknown reasons. The author draws an only conclusion basing on an insufficient datum. Without any advanced information, the argument is not persuasive to accept.） (原来的第三点合并了)
感觉有点乱哈，
(Last but no least, since the comets made up of frozen water and gas could cool earth, there is a problem whether comets are cold enough to solidify surface of earth. Another problem is whether comets are so excessive that before earth approaching present scale they could not melt. Both problems could not be answered basing on information provided by the author. If comets are too few to cool earth, the arguer should give us other reasons to explain earth solid. And if comets are excessive, the later falling ones could not melt to water. So what have occurred resulting in the water forming? Without any definite answer, we should keep prudent to make a credible conclusion.) (按小津给的提纲后来加的)
我个人觉得这点完全是在胡说八道哦，最好别那么写，这不存在什么逻辑，而是在找碴儿阿，呵呵，一家之见。
In sum, the statement that the author claims in the argument is rootless and needs more detailed data to convince us. He should indicate all water from space rocks which took part in forming earth gone off to space and there is no other account for the ocean water. In addition, the author should demonstrate the current oceans could be just filled with water from comets.
j这篇文章本来不好写，我限时就写了375个字，而且乱七八糟的
你写的已经不错了，不过思路还得理理
我的同主题issue还没有写，等我写完再给你改哈