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westlife007_huUID: 2270665

103 "The study of history has value only to the extent that it is relevant to our daily lives."
研究历史的价值只体现在这种研究和我们的日常生活相关时。

提纲
1.让步,同意作者观点,在个人的角度上,与日常生活相关的历史可以有助于树立与困难做斗争的信心,如名人的奋斗史
2转折,然而，有些与日常生活无关的领域比那些与生活相关的历史更有价值。如，在文化的角度上，研究已经灭亡的古文明的历史有助于我们找到文化消亡的原因以及更好的促进我们自身文化的发展，eg：玛雅
3在社会的角度上，研究与日常生活无关的思想史即古人观念变化的历史有助于我们找出社会变革的原因以及预测社会发展的方向，eg：人们对自由的概念的变化是封建社会到民主社会变革的原因之一
4 诚然，研究与日常生活相关的历史是由价值的，但着眼于社会和文化的整体发展，研究于日常生活相关的历史如古文明的历史和思想史的意义更加深远

The speaker asserts that only when it is relative to our daily lives does the study of history has value. I concede that it is true with the speaker’s claim, however, in my opinion, it is whether the study of history is worthwhile that has no connection with whether it is pertinent with daily life. The study of history extraneous to our daily lives, on certain cases, whereas makes much greater sense.

Admittedly, on the level of individuals, to study the history that associated to our daily lives could be a guidance to steer a right path to success and a kind of impetus to struggle with adverse circumstances. I follow the reasoning that when plunging into a dilemma, studying the resembling experiences of those historical celebrities bears tremendous magnitude in regaining confidence to pit oneself against fate. Here is an instance that is convincing. Edison, a great inventor, carried out experiments more than one thousand times and finally discovered the material of wolfram which was suitable to be the filament of electric bulb. In the process of seeking for the most appropriate one, it was the persistent efforts and the resolute belief that enabled him to sustain unimaginable difficulties and eventually approach to success. Through learning the history of Edison can we obtain confidence and courage which are one of the essential traits for us to overcome hardness and weather crises and ultimately acquire accomplishment. On the contrary, acquaintance with the mistakes that previous celebrities had ever committed and the serious consequence they had produced can be a reminder to prevent people from making parallel mistakes once again. Therefore, it is valuable for us to study the history relative to daily life.

Nevertheless, the study of history that does not affiliated with daily life, on certain cases, has more merits far beyond that does. First of all，on the level of culture, historical investigation of an ancient civilization extinctive from the earth, which has nothing to do with our daily lives, actually has its own value in exploring causes for the debilitation of culture and thus facilitating the development of our own culture. For instance, to study the history of Marya civilization which was one of the most prosperous and advanced civilization during the process of anthropic history supplies us with more evidences to search for the real reasons why it experienced so progressive a society and then suddenly disappeared in this world. There are reports speculating that its extinction might be temping to originate from consuming in excess resources of the nature. After all, it is greatly meaningful to reveal the answers of these mysterious enigmas due to its status as a signal to enlighten modern people how to maintain the nourishment of a sort of culture and to admonish them how to deter it from declining and even falling into ruin. Obviously, in comparison with the historical study relative to daily life, the one of an extinctive race is inclined to be much more valuable.

Furthermore, on the level of society, the study of ideological history concerning about conceptual alteration of antiquity is conducive to summarize the substantive causes for the change of social institution and to predict the direction of social development，though it is also totally irrelevant to our daily lives. An apt illustration of this point involves the research of ancient people’s notions referring to “freedom”。In the forepart of modern society, civil freedom indicated a kind of status, a state of independence from the perspective of law and society.When entering 18th centuries, this idea converted into a lack of intervention. And then it is substituted and expanded to factual profit of the populace with the advent of 19th century. The transformation of this conception is likely to be one of the principle causes that resulted in the reform of social system from feudalism to democracy. It is beyond no doubt that not only do the research of history pertaining to people’s idea conversion makes for probing into the regulation of social development, but also makes it possible to construct a mode of social development and predict the future society. In this sense, thereby, such kind of historical study impertinent with daily life is surely worth being studied, contributing more to the society as a whole.

To sum up, the study of history is indeed valuable to the extent that it is relative to daily life, nonetheless, with an eye to the development of society and culture, the vast value and far-reaching significance of the historical study irrespective to daily life such as that of culture and ideology should not be underestimate.



[ 本帖最后由 westlife007_hu 于 2006-12-27 00:40 编辑 ]

christainUID: 2200210

以前改过你的一片，不过忘了是哪篇，把它贴在这里了，i103还没看
你把提纲贴出来我看看，最近事情多，看文章都扫得很快

The speaker asserts that scandals, whether in politics, academia, or other areas, can be useful. I concede that scandals in various areas do play a positive role to promote the soundness of our social system. However, over-concern on scandals will in turn produce some negative effects.

To begin with, the revelation of scandals provides more opportunity for the masses to be aware of the concealed problems and deficiency of laws. The universe attention paid to those problems are more likely to facilitate the government or relative organization to pursue a series of reforms which are conducive to address those problems and make our society to become more progressive and amolieated. For example, in the 1970s and 1980s,a succession of scientific scandals coming from the area of academia, say, the Baltimore Case, the Harvad Medicine School Darcie Affair, the Yale Medicine School Affair, enable the public to recognize the seriousness of corruption in academia hence that exert momentum on the American government to increase additional policies such as promulgating new legislations and setting up new governmental investigated institutions during the past twenty years. These coercive measures affirmatively perform a certain function to prevent such misconduct in science from occurring again, thereby working as a significant and lasting benefit to the society .
你这段有问题，你ts里是laws，后面的例子是学术。
However, the negative influences that scandals will bring along with its positive effects should not be overlooked. First of all, the exposue of scandals may cause the masses’ distrust in government. The classic instance might be the Watergate Affair which directly resulted in the public’s discredit and disappointment in government. Morever, scandals will influence the stability of the society. Perhaps the convincing instance involves Mitsubishi Motors, which had concealed significant defects in the break system of Pajero, one of the company's major products, before apologized to the public. Hundreds of car accidents were caused by the break error. The problems of merely one company engendered the consumers’ panic to all the other commodities, which ,to a certain extent, decreased the level of consumption and impact the stability of the whole society as well.(这段写的不行，本来想举倒扁运动的例子，但不知道怎么表述倒扁运动)

Secondly, the media, motivated by profits, will exaggerated or even make up some scandals to satisfy the need of the masses. These overstatement or spurious scandals, it is beyond all doubt, will result in endless harms to celebrities including the destruction of their reputation. For instance, in the realm of entertainment, in order to cater to the interests of the public. the reporters always report news referring to the private lives of those stars. Admittedly, some reports are real but many of them are fictitious and have little reliability leading to individual defamation as well as rendering those celebrities sorrowful and dejected. After all, we have no right to probe into others’ privacies, let alone fabricate those scandals.

Furthermore, a large quantity of scandals appearing on magazines, televisions, newspapers and internet might be tempting to adversely affects the teenagers’ growth. Accompanying With the popularization of the mass media, it is much more facile for teenagers to know about and get in touch with those scandals, who have not yet formed the correct world outlooks. As a result, those over-exposed scandals possibly serve to direct them an astray way to depravation. The famous sex-scandals of former American president Bill Cliton and white house intern Lewinsky is a paradigmatic example, ”The Starr Report”, which disclosed the complete process of this sex scandal including intimate details, was pulished on the internet. If without right guidance, the teenagers who are in a particular phase——adolescence, will probably begin to show great interest on those sexual affairs and the like. Apparently, as for teenagers, those bad social phenomenas uncovered by scandals might be an obstacle to the health growth of them.

In conclusion, while scandals, to some extent, serve as a stimulant to generate the effective reforms that make for the development of the society, nonetheless, in the meantime they will also give rise to many negative influences which may outweight their benefits. Therefore, people should control the degree and keep calm and fair when they pay attention to scandals.

最后一次建议：写完后在word里自己先检查一下，如果在这样的话，改你的作文人会越来越少。
另外，你标点的使用也要注意：，。后要空一格
感觉你的知识面很广，例子很多
红色表示你有问题的地方，蓝色表示我认为好的地方

westlife007_huUID: 2270665

faith所言及是阿，以前比较土还不会用word检查，确实有很多拼写错误，现在一般写完了都会用word检查一下的

另外，跟你讨论下，
你这段有问题，你ts里是laws，后面的例子是学术。

我是想说通过学术界丑闻意识到法律的漏洞，之后政府颁布了一系列的立法有效的抑制了学术丑闻

hyt0303UID: 2254178

The speaker asserts that only when it is relative to our daily lives does the study of history has value. I concede that it is true with the speaker’s claim (what the speaker has claimed is true in some way), however, in my opinion, it is whether the study of history is worthwhile that has no connection with whether it is pertinent with daily life （the value of the study of history is not only decided by the benefit it gives to our daily lives）. The study of history extraneous to our daily lives, on certain cases, whereas makes much greater sense.

Admittedly, on the level of individuals, to study the history that is associated to (with) our daily lives could be a guidance to steer a right path to success and a kind of impetus to struggle with adverse circumstances. I follow the reasoning that when plunging into a dilemma, studying the resembling experiences of those historical celebrities bears tremendous magnitude in regaining confidence to pit oneself against fate(这句话成分不完整好像只有主语。Studying the resembling experiences of those great ancestors who bear tremendous magnitude in regaining confidence to pit themselves against fate will help us to overcome the difficulties and finally make some achievement). Here is an instance that is convincing. Edison, a great inventor, carried out experiments more than one thousand times and finally discovered the material of wolfram which was suitable to be the filament of electric bulb. In the process of seeking for the most appropriate one, it was the persistent efforts and the resolute belief that enabled him to sustain unimaginable difficulties and eventually approach to success. Through learning the history of Edison can we obtain confidence and courage which are one of the essential traits for us to overcome hardness and weather crises and ultimately acquire accomplishment. On the contrary, (这里并不是观点的转折，貌似用in addition 就可以了吧) （keeping）acquaintance with the mistakes that previous celebrities had ever committed and the serious consequence they had produced can be a reminder to prevent people from making parallel mistakes once again. Therefore, it is valuable for us to study the history relative to daily life.

Nevertheless, the study of history that does (is) not (directly) affiliated with daily life, on certain cases, has more merits far beyond that does (指代不明，what I have discussed above). First of all，on the level of culture (in the cultural aspect), historical investigation of an ancient civilization extinctive from the earth, which has nothing to do with our daily lives, actually has its own value in exploring causes for the debilitation of culture and thus facilitating the development of our own culture. For instance, to study the history of Marya civilization which was one of the most prosperous and advanced civilization during the process of anthropic history supplies us with more evidences to search for (about) the real reasons why it experienced so progressive a society and then suddenly disappeared in this world. There are reports speculating that its extinction might be temping to originate from consuming in excess resources of the nature. After all, it is greatly meaningful to reveal the answers of these mysterious enigmas due to its status as a signal to enlighten modern people how to maintain the nourishment of a sort of culture and to admonish them how to deter it from declining and even falling into ruin. Obviously, in comparison with the historical study relative to daily life, the one of an extinctive race is inclined to be much more valuable.

Furthermore, on the level of society, the study of ideological history concerning about conceptual alteration of antiquity is conducive to summarize the substantive causes for the change of social institution and to predict the direction of social development，though it is also totally irrelevant to our daily lives. An apt illustration of this point involves the research of ancient people’s notions referring to “freedom”。In the forepart of modern society, civil freedom indicated a kind of status, a state of independence from the perspective of law and society.When entering 18th centuries, this idea converted into a lack of intervention. And then it is substituted and expanded to factual profit of the populace with the advent of 19th century. The transformation of this conception is likely to be one of the principle causes that resulted in the reform of social system from feudalism to democracy. It is beyond no doubt that not only do the research of history pertaining to people’s idea conversion makes for probing into the regulation of social development, but also makes it possible to construct a mode of social development and predict the future society. In this sense (From this perspective), thereby, such kind of historical study impertinent with daily life is surely worth being studied, contributing more to the society as a whole.(感觉这段读下来比较费劲啊~~句子的节奏掌握得不是很好好像)

To sum up, the study of history is indeed valuable to the extent that it is relative to daily life, nonetheless, with an eye to the development of society and culture, the vast value and far-reaching significance of the historical study irrespective to daily life such as that of culture and ideology should not be underestimate.

[ 本帖最后由 hyt0303 于 2006-12-28 10:46 编辑 ]

westlife007_huUID: 2270665

it is whether the study of history is worthwhile that has no connection with whether it is pertinent with daily life
这个句子想用强调句型,句意是历史研究有没有价值与它是不是与日常生活相关毫无联系,但是不会写这个句子,大家帮我想一下

studying the resembling experiences of those historical celebrities bears tremendous magnitude in regaining confidence to pit oneself against fate
bears是谓语,studying the resembling experiences of those historical celebrities是主语,tremendous magnitude是宾语
意思是在树立与命运抗争的信心方面,学习历史名人的经历具有重要的意义.