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Argument2 graduate06--Hamming组自己的模考Argument第2篇 TOPIC: ARGUMENT42 - The following appeared in a proposal from the economic minister of the country of Paraterra. "In order to strengthen its lagging economy, last year the government of the nearby country of Bellegea began an advertising campaign to promote ecologically sound tourism (ecotourism). This year the number of foreign visitors arriving at Bellegea's main airport doubled, and per capita income in Bellegea increased by ten percent. To provide more income for the population of Paraterra and also preserve the natural environment of our tiny country, we too should begin to promote ecotourism. To ensure that our advertising campaign is successful, we should hire the current director of Bellegea's National Tourism Office as a consultant for the campaign." WORDS: 400 TIME: 28:00 DATE: 2007-2-6 打题目有点耽误时间，要不这篇就可以多些不少。 攻击点较平均，没有完全展开攻哪个点，中庸式平均用力； The conclusion of the argument that Paraterra government should adopt the same policy as the nearby country of Bellegea did and hire the current director of Bellegea National Tourism Office as a consultant for the policy seems an apparent conclusion at first.这句是不是太长了？有点恐怖了！你可以写 in this argument, the author concludes that…. The conclusion seems an apparent at first glance.好歹也断一下吗 However, careful scrutiny of the evidence and the line of reasoning reveal that the minister provides little support to the conclusion. To begin with, the author assumes that Bellegea's economy developed rapidly after they began an advertising campaign to promote ecologically sound tourism. First, the author provides that this year the number of foreign visitors arriving at Bellegea's main airport doubled. However, did these visitors come to Bellegea for traveling? Without such evidence, it is likely that these people came to Bellegea just because the main airport of Bellegea is an international flight hub, they came here just for changing another planes to their destinations. Besides, the author also points out that per capita income in Bellegea increased by ten percent. But, the author fails to tell us why it increased. Perhaps, as the government provided low-interest loans to the investors and firms, the business developed dramatically in that year. 很好很好，两个例子都很有想象力，王博你的想象力终于毛尖了 Even assuming the method is applicable in Bellegea, the author also assumes that Paraterra government should adopt the same policy to promote the economy and preserve the natural environment. Obviously, the author fails to take into account the differences between the two countries. Perhaps, Bellegea is a seaside country and has beautiful scenery that can attract a large number of travelers. Yet, Paraterra is a poor and backward inland country and the climate of it is very bad, thus, it cannot lure any travelers to come to the country. Another problem of the argument is the author recommends that Paraterra government should adopt hire the current director of Bellegea National Tourism Office as a consultant for the policy.The precondition of the recommendation is that the director was responsible for the improvement economy of Bellegea. 着个说的好，说不定就不是他的功劳Without such evidence, it is entirely possible that he protested the policy but failed. If so, he or she had no bearing on the development of Bellegea. Or perhaps, other person instead of him took charge in the advertising campaign, if this is the case, the government of Paraterra should invite other people but not the director. 还可以在补充一个即使是他导致的成功，他来了也不行，当地根本没有他成功的条件 In sum, the argument, although it seems logical at first, has several fallacies as discussed above.
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就这篇我觉得就是6分，字数他因都没得说了。你的想象力开始毛尖了，continue… | 
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