TASK 2作文一篇 请多指教

kimomoUID: 2377530

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TASK 2
Popular event like the football World Cup and other international sporting ocasions are essential in easing international tensions and releasing patrotic emotions in a safe way. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
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To some extent, international sporting occasions receives world-wide attention by most countries of people because of their popularity and accessibility. Some people hold the opinion that these events could certainly ease the tensions among countries and appease people's patriotic feelings, while others thought they effect little towards political issues and people's mind. As far as I'm concerned, I'd like to side with the former one.

From the 24th Bangkok Universiade in Thailand to the forthcoming Beijing Olympics in 2008, increasing sporting events emerged in recent years. People from various countries with diversified cultures combined with the local ones, which strengthened mutual understandings towards each country and enriched people's spiritual life. Therefore, "sino-France year" and "sino-Rissia year" occured. In addition, merchants from other countries would deeply investigate the markets of the host countries and target at the demanded products to enforce the mutual benefits' increasing.

Besides, the main stream of the world trend is peace, no matter for the government administratives or the folk people. The current situation is a mixture of development of international globalization and integration. Though twists and waves hold back the rapid forwarding processing, the 9.11 Terrorism Attack in America and Iraq War, for instance, which indeed aroused a section of people's anger and exultation for a certain period, people would turn back to be rational and objective after the frequent sports events and higher offical visits between countries with the correct and sagacious decision and temperate attitude. In 1971, a hand-shaking melted the 30-year-long iceberg between China and U.S. And prosperous business trades carried out since then, which also worked on alleviating people's hositile attitude of both countries. Till now, America has been one of the major import and export trading partners of China.

To sum up, international sporting events play a significant role in world peace as well as the economic development. Inernational intensions easing could be treated well by frequent communications folkly and officially, and patrotic spirits thus can be expressed in an acceptable way.

[ 本帖最后由 kimomo 于 2007-8-14 11:33 编辑 ]

kimomoUID: 2377530

会不会写的有点多
字数375了:rolleyes:

夜空的彼方UID: 159120

哈！刚看完一篇同样题目的~
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To some extent, international sporting occasions receives（receive） world-wide attention by most countries of people（似改为most people of different countries比较妥当） because of their popularity and accessibility. Some people hold the opinion that these events could certainly ease the tensions among countries and appease people's patriotic feelings, while others thought they effect little towards political issues and people's mind. As far as I'm concerned, I'd like to side with the former one.

From the 24th Bangkok Universiade in Thailand to the forthcoming Beijing Olympics in 2008, increasing sporting events emerged in recent years. People from various countries with diversified cultures combined with the local ones, which strengthened mutual understandings towards each country and enriched people's spiritual life. Therefore, "sino-France year" and "sino-Russsia year" occured.（好像和前边的陈述关系不大？） In addition, merchants from other countries would deeply investigate the markets of the host countries and target at the demanded products to enforce the mutual benefits' increasing.

Besides, the main stream of the world trend is peace, no matter for the government administratives or the folk people. The current situation is a mixture of development of international globalization and integration. （这句似可去掉，因为你后边所举的例子是逆peace之潮流，而非globalization）Though twists and waves hold back the rapid forwarding processing, the 9.11 Terrorism Attack in America and Iraq War, for instance, which indeed aroused a section of people's anger and exultation for a certain period, people would turn back to be rational and objective after the frequent sports events and higher offical visits between countries with the correct and sagacious decision and temperate attitude. In 1971, a hand-shaking melted the 30-year-long iceberg between China and U.S（这句写的很好，但是似乎应该点明其与sport之间的关系，所以后边可加上一句： this is so called "ping-pong diplomacy". ）And prosperous business trades carried out since then, which also worked on alleviating people's hositile attitude of both countries. Till now, America has been one of the major import and export trading partners of China.

To sum up, international sporting events play a significant role in world peace as well as the economic development. Inernational intensions easing could be treated well by frequent communications folkly and officially, and patrotic spirits thus can be expressed in an acceptable way.

总的来说，看的出来你是花功夫了，写的不错，赞一个！

H-KevinUID: 2182070

能保证两个task都写完的话字数就不多

前提是语法错误少，结构完整，意思清楚 :)

capricUID: 2331822

maple_86UID: 2190786

写得不错哦

kimomoUID: 2377530

谢谢夜空:loveliness:
给我指出的错误的确值得改进


上午花了点时间写的,模拟考场来着
有点蹩脚

capricUID: 2331822

哎，很难对你的作文评判，因为我水平有限。
我觉得词汇丰富，表达也很准确（本人的缺陷所在），思路比较宽
虽有一些拗口的地方，但瑕不掩瑜。夜空已经陈述的我就不再赘述了
感觉这篇文章更象一篇书面文。向你学习:)

[ 本帖最后由 capric 于 2007-8-15 12:48 编辑 ]