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Will modern technology ,such as the internet ever replace the book or written word as the main source of information ?




The 21th century is well known as an era of information explosion. With the development of science and hig-tech ,computers and internet are unbelievably increasingly more popular in our daily life .At this point ,some people hold the view that internet will replace the books .I am an opponent of this point of view. Basically, as far as I concern ,books have vital status than can hardly be substituted by internet .

Someone consider that books are so expensive whilst the cost of internet is low. Internet is able to give us vivid and colorful information that we can download from some website with free of charge .This may be true . However, when we see a second time about this view ,we may find they are oversimplifying the situation. As we all know, it is illegal to download and copy large amounts of information from internet which offends other’s right. The electrical resources are easly to photocopy, thus ,it is harmful to the transmission of knowledge .

While books are convenient to take away. You can read a book at anywhere you would like to read, whether on the bus or in the subway ,even if you sitting on the grassland. By contrast, you have to stay in front of the computer if you choose the internet as the main information resources.

On the other hand ,you can make a note at the margin of the book while you are reading when some ideas suddenly strike your brain. The combination of vision and writing is a positive method to study. On the contrary, it is not convenient to do this with a computer .

We can not ignore the popularity of computer it cause amounts of benefit and provide convenience to us. However, to a large extent ,it would be impossible that the internet will supersede books in the coming future.

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The 21th century is well known as an era of information explosion. With the development of science and hig-tech ,computers and internet are unbelievably increasingly more popular in our daily life .At this point ,some people hold the view that internet will replace the books .I am an opponent of this point of view. Basically（这个basically显得有些多余，有点中式英语的味道~）, as far as I concern ,books have vital status than（that？） can hardly be substituted by internet .

Someone considers that books are so expensive whilst the cost of internet is low. Internet is able to give us vivid and colorful information that we can download from some website with free of charge .This may be true . However, when we see a second time about this view ,we may find they are oversimplifying the situation. As we all know, it is illegal to download and copy large amounts of information from internet which offends other’s right. The electrical resources are easly to photocopy, thus ,it is harmful to the transmission of knowledge .

While books are convenient to take away. You can read a book at anywhere you would like to read, whether on the bus or in the subway ,even if you（有点多余了，去掉吧~） sitting on the grassland. By contrast, you have to stay in front of the computer if you choose the internet as the main information resources.

On the other hand ,you can make a note at the margin of the book while you are reading when some ideas suddenly strike your brain. The combination of vision and writing is a positive method to study. On the contrary, it is not convenient to do this with a computer .

We can not ignore the popularity of computer since it cause amounts of benefit and provide convenience to us. However, to a large extent ,it would be impossible that the internet will supersede books in the coming future.

写的挺好，基本的语法错误和拼写错误控制的比较好，论证思路上也很清晰！
建议加强一下句式的变化和词汇，还是那句老话，多看看优秀范文，多用些地道的表达，尽量避免中式英语的出现。

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我觉得这篇很不错。不知道这样的是几分？