rainbowstarwqc的作文作业

rainbowstarwqcUID：2597917

来晚了，但是better late than never,
请大家猛拍！
第六次作业
综合写作
The lecturer made point that the private space travel will not make the space trip cheaper yet much more expensive, because of costs result from the building of the spaceshuttle , controlling system and safty checking, which will increase the sums needed for a space trip. However , the author claimed that privatization of space travel will defintely bring down the expenses of spacetrip and benefit the research of scientisits with the involvement of competition, which is the core element of making progress.

On the aspect of scientific field, the professor insisted that privatization of spaceflight will not stimulate the development of space science, but will detoriate it in forms of monetry things, he demonstrated that when the scientist become one members of
a commercial company, he can hardly concentrate on the researching with the luring of benefit, this point contradict with the writer, who believed that with the ascending funding , the tempo of researching will be accelerated at an amazing speed for there will be more people attending and more money to utilized.

Finally , the speaker pointed out that the privatization will not ease the burden of public taxing, but will strenthen it, because the cost of scientific research is extraordirnary high that private investors can not afford even just one percent of the whole, therefore, the public have to pay more to balance the funding. On the other end of spectrum, the composer of article thinks that it will lower the burden of government with the personal investment on the spaceflight industry.

Overall , the professor and the author hold the oppsite idea toward the privatization of space travel , they argued in the contradict way mainly in the cost of spacetravel, the effect on the scientific researching and taxing.

rainbowstarwqcUID：2597917

顶一下...

tammyppUID：2547015

在下不才没有看出任何问题。语言很好，听的也非常仔细。
建议是加个总起段。这样结构更清晰

lijr03UID：2522963

写得挺好。

roinyouUID：2447501

文章总体框架和条理比较清晰，不过建议把最后一段转到开头，使得做到观点明确。
development方面，比较详细，对比点答出要点。
语言上面有比较好的表达，用词也比较出彩，不过还是有较多词语在词性上面用法不对，希望能通过练习和积累获得更大的提高。鉴于以上三个方面应该是一个比较good的essay。
拍的不好，希望予以指正，祝愿取得更大的进步和提高！

The lecturer made a point that the private space travel will not make the space trip cheaper yet much more expensive, because of costs result from the building of the spaceshuttle , controlling system and safty checking, which will increase the sums needed for a space trip. However , the author claimed that privatization(privatizing) of space travel will defintely bring down the expenses of spacetrip and benefit the research of scientisits with the involvement of competition, which is the core element of making progress.

On the aspect of scientific field, the professor insisted that privatization of spaceflight will not stimulate the development of space science, but will detoriate(deteriorate) it in forms of monetry(monetary?) things, he demonstrated that when the scientist become one members of a commercial company, he/she can hardly concentrate on the researching with the luring of benefit, and this point contradicts with the writer, who believed that with the ascending funding , the tempo of researching will be accelerated at an amazing speed for/because there will be more people attending and more money to utilized.
Finally , the speaker pointed out that the privatization will not ease the burden of public taxing(taxation), but will strenthen it, because the cost of scientific research is extraordirnary high that private investors can not afford even just one percent of the whole, therefore, the public have to pay more to balance the funding. On the other end of spectrum(有这个短语？or "perspective"), the composer of article thinks that it will lower the burden of government with the personal investment on the spaceflight industry.
Overall , the professor and the author hold(held) the oppsite idea toward the privatization of space travel , they argued in the contradictary way mainly in/at the cost of spacetravel, the effect on the scientific researching and taxing.

rainbowstarwqcUID：2597917

4# lijr03
非常感谢！一定注意这些问题，
不知道我应该去批改谁的作文呢？新加入这个小组，不知道该怎么做，请指教！

lijr03UID：2522963

6#  rainbowstarwqc

不客气，呵呵。按照群里公布的顺序，这次作业互改的顺序是
3<-55<>82<>53<>8<>58<>80<>49<>9<>61<>79<>37<>11<>63<>77<>31<>24<>69<>29<>68<>3，
比如79楼要改61楼和37楼的。因为马上就要去考试了，我担心以后不写作文又不改作文，还留在群里不好，所以退群了，原来我在61楼的贴子也删了，所以就不用改我的了，你要改的是37楼的。

rainbowstarwqcUID：2597917

6# rainbowstarwqc 恩，明白了， 多谢拉，我是79楼是吧，不过怎么看都是78楼啊...

rainbowstarwqcUID：2597917

第七次作业

Follow by the leave of the 20th century,which is abundant with amazing advancements and bloody wars, the 21st century has arrived, In this brand new era, I think we human beings will creat much more wonders : peace, space immagration, better enviroment and medicine.

In the new century, we will live in peace, which means that every nation
inhabiting in harmony , no wars and conficts will occur because people have becoming more and more mature after sequential worldwide warfares in the past century, which took millions of lives and destoried billions of treasures , left painful memory that cannot be forgoten. Therefore, As intelligent creatures we will remmember these tragedies forever for we are all the sons and daughters of the God.

The space technology will have a breakthrough in the manufacture of the space shuttle ,
which will enable it carrying much more passengers and goods. More and more space stations will be built in the out space,
in order to maintain the activies of discovering the mysterious space. All of the above will eventually help us colonizing the moon, the Mars, even other planet outside the Glaxy.

Not only will we achieve accomplishment in space industry, but also in enviroment. Albeit our planet has been severely
polluted, we have awared of the dangerous situation , and
numerous programs have been started all around the world to reverse this fatal trend, including waste processing, tree planting and resrevation of exsit forest, just to name a few.
So I firmly believed that we will enjoy better settlement in this planet.

Besides, the health of human beings will be greatly improved With
advances in science and envrioment,
more
and more drugs and treatment will be invented, which will solve the problems exsiting presently, cancer,AIDS, let us say.
As a doctor, I contend that these diseases will no longer threat our health.

Overall , the coming century is extremingly
promising and desirable. More and more mature mind will help us creating harmonious relations among us , emerging new technologies in space industry and medicine will improve the qualities of our lives and enviroment... in a word, the future is brilliant!