TOEFL 2009上半年-Dark_Tournament写作组网兜妮妮第十二次作业

网兜妮妮UID: 2612538

Many teachers assign homework to students every day. Do you think that daily homework is necessary for students? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.  

As a student,homework is a burden in our daily life,it means kiil the time to play,to watch a movie or a delay of sleeping time.But these are not convining reasons to the queastion which homework is not a necessary.Actually, I hold the opinion that homework is a must to a student,but the necessary of daily homework depends on the study level a student was in.
When children in pramiary school,daily homework assigned by teacher is a great help for the little children to remember the fundenmental knowledge.For example, the basic vocabularies.As we all know,play is human nature, especially to a under 10-year-old child.But it is not mean that we can advocate no daily homework in the name of following the origial nature.Actually,everyday homework is a force to help the children foster a good study habit which can benefit a life time.
Middle school and high school provide more courses for students to enlarge their horisen.So at this time,if teacher of each course have a daily homework,students will bear overweight.Of coures, it will have a negtive impact on their health.From my personal perspective,at this level,some subject can have a daily homework like Math,for the reason"practise makes perfect";but other subjects, like art,more creative homework can instead of the daily homework,like discuss in group,which can not be finished exactly in one day and have a result.
Daily homework in college or university is not necessary,because self-study abilty is the basic ability for a student,you do the work for yourselve,not the homework hand in to your teachers.Tutors often give some related resoreses and mertiarals after class instead of daily homework for students, which must be done in one day.Students can range their time properly by themselves and make their own schdual.Here,teacher plays a role like assitent,who's work is to help the student to reach their goals.
As what I have mentioned above,I reckon that daily homeworks is not a necessary for all levels of students,it depends on which stage the students were in.

dengqinboUID: 2596994

As(to) a student,homework is a burden in our daily life,it means kiil the time(我好像记得kill time是打发时间，你可以说sacrifice the time of) to play,to watch a movie or a delay of sleeping time.But these are not convining reasons to the queastion which(whether 后面跟肯定句） homework is not a（删掉a） necessary.Actually, I hold the opinion（我曾听一个老外讲，第一人称后面很少说hold the opinion的，给人感觉很做作，你可以说In my onipion,这样感情色彩更好。另外还有类似I strongly suggest... 都不能或至少是不适宜引出你的论点的，一般情况下人们会这样用，比如I strongly suggest you make the right decision.来代替you do wrong and stupid.) that homework is a must to a student,but the necessary(necessicity) of daily homework depends on the study level a student was in.（我总觉得这句话不通，很少有necessity depends on这么用的，我帮你查了一下，没有发现任何一本字典，网络例句上出现这种说法的，但是necessity可以说搭配arise，在when you need to时）
  [) B' _: p: E' KWhen children in pramiary school,daily homework assigned by teacher is a great help for the little children to remember the fundenmental knowledge.For example, the basic vocabularies.As we all know,play(ing) is (a) human nature(说小孩的天性更好，因为本段是在提preschool kids）, especially to a under 10-year-old child.But it is（doesn't） not mean that we can advocate no daily homework in the name of following the origial nature.Actually,everyday homework is a force to help the children foster a good study habit which can benefit a life time【这一段说理明显不够，展开不充分，到底是怎样的help呢？怎么养成good study habit 的呢？不具体】

Middle school and high school provide more courses for students to enlarge their horisen.So at this time,if teacher of each course have a daily homework,students will bear overweight(超重？？）.Of coures, it will have a negtive impact on their health（what negtive impact？).From my personal perspective,at this level,some subject(s) can have a daily homework like Math,for the reason"practise makes perfect";but other subjects, like art,more creative homework can instead of the daily homework,like discuss in group,which can not be finished exactly in one day and have a result（have a result不好，你可以说 but can encourage students to think and learn more on art) 【首句提论点的方式要改。不过后面写的挺好的，尤其是art后面的句子，很具体，也围绕中心,但是语言应用的不好，这方面应该注意】

Daily homework in college or university is not necessary,because self-study abilty is the basic ability for a student,you do the work for yourselve,not the homework hand in to your teachers(not for accomplishing a task which teachers assign us).Tutors often give some related resoreses and mertiarals after class instead of daily homework for students, which must be done in one day.Students can range their time properly by themselves and make their own schdual.Here,teacher plays a role like assitent,who's work is to help the student to reach their goals.【这段的首句就很好了。后面的举例也相当好，我很欣赏。当然有些minor flaws on synx.如果修改一下语言组织和遣词，就很好了】

As what I have mentioned above,I reckon(我不知道这样说的，也许是我不懂吧） that daily homeworks is not a necessary for all levels of students,it depends on which stage the students were in.

我的评语：你应用英语语言的能力还比较欠缺，句式结构有时显得不够好。比如说你试着多写非限定性定语从句，但总给我一种很蹩脚的感觉（也可能是我自己水平还不够），插入的位置不够好。你应该在语言组织方面多下功夫。这是我的个人感觉，最多只能当做参考，你不要太介意我的话，我没有冒犯的意思。大家互相进步吧，加油。

网兜妮妮UID: 2612538

谢谢楼上的点评，很具体，上次考托作文成绩不好，总结一下也是自己语言组织能力不太好，所以楼上的意见很有帮助，互相进步~

babffUID: 2539532

As a student,homework is a burden in our daily life,it means kiil the time to play,to watch a movie or a delay of sleeping time（这句话好像是有问题。。。我的语感是FOR PLAYING….或者就没这样的表达）.But these are not convining reasons to the queastion which homework is not a necessary.Actually, I hold the opinion that homework is a must to a student,but（感觉应该是and） the necessary （用necessity会正常点，虽然你的用法也对，呵呵）of daily homework depends on the study level a student was in.(这句话是要说作业的重要性是取决于什么阶段的学生吗？？on…..was in这句话能不能就用the level of student)+ ^, P7 i/ U1 U; \
When children in pramiary school,daily homework assigned by teacher is a great help for the little children to remember the fundenmental knowledge.For example, the basic vocabularies.As we all know,play is human nature(这句话好像是直译吧，呵呵，不知道老外看得懂不？), especially to a under 10-year-old child.But it（换成that是不是好点） is not mean that（do not mean） we can advocate no daily homework in the name of following the origial nature.Actually,everyday homework is a force to help the children foster a good study habit which can benefit a life time.& @5 `3 p6 i9 h$ O3 Y$ S) y
Middle school and high school provide more courses for students to enlarge their horisen.So at this time,if (the)teacher of each course have a daily homework,students will bear overweight.Of coures, it will have a negtive impact on their health.From my personal perspective,at this level,some subject(s) can have a daily homework like Math,for the reason"practise makes perfect";but other subjects, like art,more creative homework can instead of the daily homework,like discuss(ing) in group(in a group或in groups),which can not be finished exactly in one day and have a result.
Daily homework in college or university is not necessary,(逗号要省去)because self-study abilty is the basic ability for a student,you do the work for yourselve,not the homework hand in to your teachers.Tutors often give some related resoreses and mertiarals after class instead of daily homework for students, which must be done in one day.Students can range their time properly by themselves and make their own schdual.Here,teacher plays a role like assitent,who's work is to help the student to reach their goals. （感觉这还需要进一步阐述或举一例才完整比如你如果不做，可能最后你不能掌握知识从而考试挂科。。。）
As what I have mentioned above,I reckon that daily homework（s） is not a necessary for all levels of students,it depends on which stage the students were in.（感觉前面和后面有点重复，不如前面就说FOR ALL STUDENTS）


由于最近比较忙。。。评晚了。。。请见谅哈