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Issue13  "Many of the world's lesser-known languages are being lost as fewer and fewer people speak them. The governments of countries in which these languages are spoken should act to prevent such languages from becoming extinct."

In modern times, with the development of the economics and the progress of technology, the tendency of culture invasion and globalization is serious than ever before. The result is that, a great array of minority languages endangered and faced the danger of assimilation. The protection of such languages should be taken action immediately, and the government is regarded as the primary operator, but when the futility and excessive prices paid by governments in protecting such languages involved, is it necessary for the government to take responsibility of preventing them? Do we have other effective methods to achieve this goal?


Basically, many of the world’s lesser-known languages sever to enhance the cognizance of culture, distinction of ethics, and to restore historical heritage. After all, we human inherent have tendency of psychological distinction from other ethics. Such distinctions often tender us various customs, ethos, mores, or beliefs. However, the most remarkable trait that distinct one coterie from others might be the exclusively native language. By virtue of language people within the same ethics could communicate interests and ideas, which preconditions the formations of ethics. Consider, for instance, the continental Europeans who tenaciously cling to their native languages, though actually these languages have little practical usefulness. Consider next American Indian, who intransigently fight for the invasion of European to reject the assimilation even extinction of customs, mores, beliefs, and also languages. Evidence came from European and American continents lend credence that lesser-known languages that pertain to native ethics exclusively indeed sever to distinct themselves from other ethics, and to maintain their traditional cultures.


Another compelling argument that lends credence to the emphasis of government’s responsibility in protecting lesser-known languages has to do with the lesser-known languages’ significant role in restoring and maintaining innumerable historic heritages. As is well known to us, historic heritages benefits us a lot in many aspects. For instance, those relics render historians delicate and precious vivid proof to facilitate experts and students appreciate the history. Moreover, many historical relics left us with mysterious languages, such as ancient Egypt hieroglyph, some of which could deciphered by certain experienced man in certain ethics. Accordingly, lesser-known languages contribute to the restoration of historic heritages, thus facilitate historians to appreciate and research the history.

While lesser-known languages benefit themselves as a distinction of culture and sever to help modern people decipher and recognize the history, the government’s endeavors to protect such languages to the extent amount to deploying and fighting for a losing war. After all, historically, a myriad of lesser-known languages have become extinguished; even in today many such languages are extinguishing. Preventing the extinction of such languages seems to be futile, considering the fact that our world are moving on toward the tendency of globalization, which indicates that no matter our customs, ethos, ways of thinking, even languages are inclined to be homogenized. For supporting example, one need look no further see the worldwide internet which has adopted English as its official language. In short, so-called governments’ efforts in preventing lesser-known languages amount to futility.

In sum, lesser-known languages have considerable merits in maintaining their unique traditional cultures and in helping to restore historical invaluable heritages. Extinctions of many such languages nevertheless have become an unchangeable tendency so that government need not did extraordinary effort to protect such languages. In the final analysis, it is entirely appropriate to allocate a low priority to protecting lesser-known languages than to soling exorbitant amounts of pressing social problems when it comes to the use of public resources.

其实觉得有点跑啊写得。。。先放上来,再慢慢改~~~
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In modern times, with the development of the economics and the progress of technology, the tendency of culture invasion and globalization is serious than ever before. The result is that, a great array of minority languages endangered and faced the danger of assimilation. The protection of such languages should be taken action immediately, and the government is regarded as the primary operator, but when the futility and excessive prices (are) paid by governments in protecting such languages involved, is it necessary for the government to take responsibility of preventing them(这句话意思没有理解,jessi想说什么)? Do we have other effective methods to achieve this goal?

Basically, many of the world’s lesser-known languages sever to enhance the cognizance of culture, distinction of ethics, and to restore historical heritage(语言的作用,说得很好). After all, we human inherent(inherently) have tendency of psychological distinction from other ethics. Such distinctions often tender us various customs, ethos, mores, or beliefs. However, the most remarkable trait that distinct one coterie from others might be the exclusively native language. By virtue of language people within the same ethics could communicate interests and ideas, which preconditions the formations of ethics. Consider, for instance, the continental Europeans who tenaciously cling to their native languages, though actually these languages have little practical usefulness. Consider next American Indian, who intransigently fight for the invasion of European to reject the assimilation even extinction of customs, mores, beliefs, and also languages. Evidence came from European and American continents lend credence that lesser-known languages that pertain to native ethics exclusively indeed sever to distinct themselves from other ethics, and to maintain their traditional cultures.(个人感觉欧洲人的例子没有很好地论证结论。例子:欧洲人保护濒临灭绝的语言,尽管这些语言没多少实际用处。结论:这些语言能使欧洲人与其他民族不同。觉得没有因果关系。后面印第安人的例子行,因为点明了保护语言是为了(红字标出)防止被同化甚至自己民族一些风俗习惯的丢失,这样就能说明语言确实是使他们与众不同。)


Another compelling argument that lends credence to the emphasis of government’s responsibility in protecting lesser-known languages has to do with the lesser-known languages’ significant role in restoring and maintaining innumerable historic heritages. As is well known to us, historic heritages benefits us a lot in many aspects. For instance, those relics render historians delicate and precious vivid proof to facilitate experts and students appreciate the history. Moreover, many historical relics left us with mysterious languages, such as ancient Egypt hieroglyph, some of which could deciphered by certain experienced man in certain ethics. Accordingly, lesser-known languages contribute to the restoration of historic heritages, thus facilitate historians to appreciate and research the history.

While lesser-known languages benefit themselves as a distinction of culture and sever to help modern people decipher and recognize the history, the government’s endeavors to protect such languages to the extent amount to deploying and fighting for a losing war(这里的意思不理解,求解). After all, historically, a myriad of lesser-known languages have become extinguished; even in today many such languages are extinguishing. Preventing the extinction of such languages seems to be futile, considering the fact that our world are moving on toward the tendency of globalization, which indicates that no matter our customs, ethos, ways of thinking, even languages are inclined to be homogenized. For supporting example, one need look no further see the worldwide internet which has adopted English as its official language. In short, so-called governments’ efforts in preventing lesser-known languages amount to futility.

In sum, lesser-known languages have considerable merits in maintaining their unique traditional cultures and in helping to restore historical invaluable heritages. Extinctions of many such languages nevertheless (个人感觉放在句首读起来顺畅一些)have become an unchangeable tendency so that government need not did extraordinary effort to protect such languages. In the final analysis, it is entirely appropriate to allocate a low priority to protecting lesser-known languages than to soling exorbitant amounts of pressing social problems when it comes to the use of public resources.

jessi这篇文章给我最深的印象就是用词丰富,可以说是相当丰富,而且语法错误少,结构清晰,学习。

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preventing them(这句话意思没有理解,jessi想说什么)
嘿嘿,我确实没说清楚哈,这句话~

个人感觉欧洲人的例子没有很好地论证结论
这个点你写得也好,其实我开始还想深入一下来着,写着写着搞忘了~

amount to deploying and fighting for a losing war(这里的意思不理解,求解).
其实就是想说,政府保护濒临语言的行为,好像是在部署并进行一场注定失败的战役

我的用词,是写了以后,反复查了字典以后修正的,不代表本人真实词汇水平。。。吼吼~
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恩,a losing war 的意思是:一场注定要失败的战争(还没打,但肯定要败)?还是一场失败的战争?(已经打了,而且败了)  我感觉是后面的意思。 咬文嚼字了哈!   还有nevertheless的位置刚才没用颜色标出,现在标出来了。

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题外话 头像很漂亮,是谁啊?

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恩,a losing war 的意思是:一场注定要失败的战争(还没打,但肯定要败)?还是一场失败的战争?(已经打了,而且败了)  我感觉是后面的意思。 咬文嚼字了哈!   还有nevertheless的位置刚才没用颜色标出,现在标出来 ...
archaeology 发表于 2009-5-28 01:19

a losing game,意为无胜利希望的比赛(见金山词霸),推而广之,a losing war就是一场无胜利希望的战争,那不就是注定要失败么,呵呵~
a lost war 意为一场失败的战争~

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题外话 头像很漂亮,是谁啊?
archaeology 发表于 2009-5-28 01:22


呃,学术帖子,咱不水昂~下来聊~(*^__^*) 嘻嘻……
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既然查字典了,就没问题了。

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这个是我修改的作文,在附件里,请查收
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呃,我怎么打不开你发的附件。。。
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