arguemnt45 = so what =第二次作业 by gabyw

gabywUID: 2633725

45.The following appeared as an editorial in a wildlife journal.

"Arctic deer live on islands in Canada's arctic region. They search for food by moving over ice from island to island during the course of a year. Their habitat is limited to areas warm enough to sustain the plants on which they feed, and cold enough, at least some of the year, for the ice to cover the sea separating the islands, allowing the deer to travel over it. Unfortunately, according to reports from local hunters, the deer populations are declining. Since these reports coincide with recent global warming trends that have caused the sea ice to melt, we can conclude that the decline in arctic deer populations is the result of deer being unable to follow their age-old migration patterns across the frozen sea."

北极鹿生活在加拿大极地区域的岛屿上。它们全年都通过冰块在岛屿间移动来寻找食物。它们的栖居地局限在那些温暖得足以维持它们所需的植物生长，并且在一年的至少某些时候冷到足以让岛屿间的海面结冰以使它们能够在岛屿间旅行的地方。然而，根据当地猎人的报告，鹿的数量正在下降。由于这一报告正好与最近导致海洋冰面融化的全球变暖趋势同时发生，我们可以得出结论：北极鹿数量的下降是它们无法按它们原有的迁移习惯穿越结冰海面的结果。


提纲：

1.
通过猎人了解的事实不一定有科学依据，猎人之说鹿的数量在减少，并没有具体指出路的减少是因为不不能按照原有的迁徙习惯来生存。或许，近年来由于猎人大量捕猎导致鹿的数量减少。
2.
全球变暖并不一定就会使加拿大北极地区的冰层融化到北极鹿无法生存的地步。
3.
北极鹿数量下降不一定是他们无法穿越结冰的海面，而导致无法生存。

gabywUID: 2633725

This editorial argues that a recent reduction in the numbers of Arctic deer that lives on islands in Canada's arctic region, as was originated from local hunters. Based on this evidence the author concludes that the reason resulted in the reduction of Arctic deer is change of environment, which make Arctic deer can not across through icy surface for looking for food according their original way. Also, the argument points out that global warming are more increasingly evident when the phenomenon occurred. The editorial suffers from several problems, which render it unconvincing as it stands.

First of all, in recent years, Arctic deer is generally decreasing in Canada's arctic region, which is derived from local hunters. Perhaps, over hunting, which leads to reduction of Arctic deer, which might be the main reason, however, is not referred in this editorial. Additionally, the editorial refers only the result of reduction, while the number of reduction and reduction rate is unclear, which is unscientific at some extent. If the reduction is not very high, it may be normal in the evolution.

Secondly, this editorial also overlooks a very important data that is increased centigrade, which can indicate that whether the icy surface could melt or not, whether Arctic deer could search for food by virtue of
moving
over ice or not. Perhaps, although the temperature has decreased because of global warming, the icy surface did not melt so much. Arctic deer can arrive in such kind of surroundings.

Even if the temperature is increasing in Arctic region, the editorial can not infer that Arctic deer will died because they can not adapt new surroundings. It is obvious fact that there is a explanation for this. When the temperature increases, the cold season will be shorter and the warm season will be longer. In that case, Arctic deer could live in warm season for longer and they will not be died of lacking food. On the country, Arctic can storage some food for relatively short cold season instead of moving over ice from island to island.

In conclusion, the editorial fails to convince me that there are some relationship between the reduction of Arctic deer and global warming. To strengthen the argument the author must account for all other factors that might influence the reduction of Arctic deer in Canada's arctic region. To better analyze the reason of reduction of Arctic deer, we would need more statistic data about the reduction rate and number, decreased centigrade.

XOXLOLUID: 2309408

This editorial argues that a recent reduction in the of Arctic deer that lives on islands in Canada's arctic region, as was originated from local hunters. Based on this evidence the author concludes that the reason resulted in the reduction of Arctic deer is change of environment, which make Arctic deer can not across through icy surface for looking for food according their original way. Also, the argument points out that global warming are more increasingly evident when the phenomenon occurred. The editorial suffers from several problems, which render(s) it unconvincing as it stands.

First of all, in recent years, Arctic deer is generally decreasing in Canada's arctic region, which is derived from local hunters. Perhaps, over hunting, which leads to reduction of Arctic deer, which might be the main reason, however, is not referred in this editorial. (这个句子意思理解了，但是语法上难理解）Additionally, the editorial refers only the result of reduction, while the number of reduction and reduction rate is unclear, which is unscientific at some extent. If the reduction is not very high, it may be normal in the evolution.

Secondly, this editorial also overlooks a very important data that is increased centigrade, which can indicate that whether the icy surface could melt or not, whether Arctic deer could search for food by virtue of
moving
over ice or not. Perhaps, although the temperature has decreased because of global warming, the icy surface did not melt so much.（时态好像有问题） Arctic deer can arrive in such kind of surroundings.

Even if the temperature is increasing in Arctic region, the editorial can not infer that Arctic deer will died because they can not adapt new surroundings. It is obvious fact that there is a explanation for this. When the temperature increases, the cold season will be shorter and the warm season will be longer. In that case, Arctic deer could live in warm season for longer and they will not be died of lacking food. On the country, Arctic can storage some food for relatively short cold season instead of moving over ice from island to island.［这段论据找得很好！赞！］

In conclusion, the editorial fails to convince me that there are some relationship between the reduction of Arctic deer and global warming. To strengthen the argument the author must account for all other factors that might influence the reduction of Arctic deer in Canada's arctic region. To better analyze the reason of reduction of Arctic deer, we would need more statistic data about the reduction rate and number, decreased centigrade.
逻辑很强，语言也没什么大问题，学习ing！

ZhouPYFUID: 2633778

This editorial argues that a recent reduction in the numbers of Arctic deer that lives on islands in Canada's arctic region, as was originated from local hunters. Based on this evidence the author concludes that the reason resulted in the reduction of Arctic deer is change of environment, which make（makes?） Arctic deer can not across through icy surface for looking for food according their original way. (这句话好长……)Also, the argument points out that global warming are(is?) more increasingly evident when the phenomenon occurred. The editorial suffers from several problems, which render it unconvincing as it stands.
First of all, in recent years, Arctic deer is generally decreasing in Canada's arctic region, which is derived from local hunters. (ts没有表明该段主题 ，是不是直接写出猎人的报告不值得完全相信比较好)Perhaps, over hunting, which leads to reduction of Arctic deer, which might be the main reason, however, is not referred in this editorial. Additionally, the editorial refers only the result of reduction, while the number of reduction and reduction rate is unclear, which is unscientific at some extent. If the reduction is not very high, it may be normal in the evolution.
Secondly, this editorial also overlooks a very important data that is increased centigrade, which can indicate that whether the icy surface could melt or not, whether Arctic deer could search for food by virtue of moving over ice or not. Perhaps, although the temperature has decreased （increased?）because of global warming, the icy surface did not melt so much. Arctic deer can arrive in such kind of surroundings.
Even if the temperature is increasing in Arctic region, the editorial can not infer that Arctic deer will died because they can not adapt new surroundings. It is obvious fact that there is a explanation for this. When the temperature increases, the cold season will be shorter and the warm season will be longer. In that case, Arctic deer could live in warm season for longer and they will not be died(they will not die of ? or they will not be dead of?) of lacking food. On the country, Arctic can storage some food for relatively short cold season instead of moving over ice from island to island.
In conclusion, the editorial fails to convince me that there are some relationship (relationships) between the reduction of Arctic deer and global warming. To strengthen the argument the author must account for all other factors that might influence the reduction of Arctic deer in Canada's arctic region. To better analyze the reason of reduction of Arctic deer, we would need more statistic data about the reduction rate and number, decreased centigrade.(最后用了三句模板句，单独看感觉都不错，但是三句连在一起有点不是很流畅的感觉，供参考，我对如何改写模板句也不是很在行，一起研究下……)