ISSUE13 [Dancing in the Dark] 第1次作业 by fingshang

fingshangUID: 2469559

1 稀有语言的灭绝是趋势
    A目前的稀有语种在迅速灭绝
    B将来说的人会更少
    C 这是趋势

转折

2 稀有语言的重要性
    A 对使用群体（可能比较小）
    B 对其他群体（强调对其他群体的作用更大，所以后面才需要政府出面）

递进 （因为重要所以需要保护）

3 保护稀有语言的范围和行为主体

    基于2的分析，指出
    A应该保护哪些
    B由谁去保护

总结

4 conclusion： Governments should act to prevent the extinction.


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ISSUE 13
"Many of the world's lesser-known languages are being lost as fewer and fewer people speak them. The governments of countries in which these languages are spoken should act to prevent such languages from becoming extinct."




It’s an irresistible trend that many of the world's lesser-known languages are being lost as fewer and fewer people speak them. From Alaska to Australia, according to a new study, hundreds of languages around the world are teetering on the brink of extinction—some being spoken only by a single person. What’s worse, there is no evidence showing cease or declination of this trend. Linguistics expert warn that nearly all of the languages, up to almost 6000 kinds, could be extinct in the next two centuries. Affected by globalization and preparing for international competition, it’s reasonable and necessary for the young generations to abandon their indigenous languages and turn to main languages. Thus, a decrease in the population among the speakers of these languages is predicable.

The extinction means a lot not only to the local speakers but others. To the speakers of these languages, one of the most significant attributes of their unique ethics evaporates with the extinction. The most important label which distinguishing themselves with others fades away. As well as their unique knowledge, including philosophy, empirical experiences, special customs, and understanding of the nature and so on, embodied by this language, will encode after the extinction of their languages. To others who seem unrelated with this extinction, one thing should keep in mind is that:
every time we lose a language, we lose that much also of our adaptability and our diversity that gives us our strength and our ability to survive. From an ethical standpoint, all languages are of equal value. But the value of a language goes far beyond academic discourse. It contains the intellectual wisdom of populations of people and their observations of and adaptations to the world around them. Generation by generation, these elites tested by time and practices and finally accumulated in their ethnic’s treasury. Language is the very key to open the door of that treasury. There is no difference between finding our losing keys and preventing the extinction of lesser-known languages.

However, priorities should be given at first before preventing the extinction. Not all of the lesser-know languages are of equal value. Just like we classify our keys in pockets according to the importance of the property locked in the door which it can open, relevant research should be done to evaluate the “mineral deposit” hidden behind specific languages.


As mentioned before that lesser-known languages both important for their speakers and others. Especially, the communication and collision of different cultures based on various languages gestate great innovations. Historical events proved many times that these kinds of culture hybrid not only affect the language speaker but the whole society. Such as Buddhism, characterized by ancient Indic language, influence Chinese greatly. So the government, not individuals、NGOs or other organization, should take the responsibility of preventing such languages from being extinct.

In conclusion, extinctions of languages are the natural consequences of social development. Although obviously disadvantages of it can be seen, the government should not try to revive those endangered languages. Just like plants, languages also have their own well adapted climate. More evidences need to be collected to answer whether this lesser-known language can revive again. What should be done now is just preventing such languages from being extinct. Thus, as mentioned in the argument, keep the “keys”.

mobius.x64UID: 2628671

It’s an irresistible trend that many of the world's lesser-known languages are being lost as fewer and fewer people speak them. From Alaska to Australia, according to a new study, hundreds of languages around the world are teetering on the brink of extinction—some being spoken only by a single person. What’s worse, there is no evidence showing cease or declination of this trend. Linguistics expert warn that nearly all of the languages, up to almost 6000 kinds, could be extinct in the next two centuries. Affected by globalization and preparing for international competition, it’s reasonable and necessary for the young generations to abandon their indigenous languages and turn to main languages. Thus, a decrease in the population among the speakers of these languages is predicable.

The extinction means a lot not only to the local speakers but (also to?) others. To the speakers of these languages, one of the most significant attributes of their unique ethics(此处应该是指民族吧? 但ethics好像更多是指道德和伦理学…) evaporates with the extinction. The most important label which distinguishing(distinguishes?) themselves with others fades away. As well as their unique knowledge, including philosophy, empirical experiences, special customs, and understanding of the nature and so on, embodied by this language, will encode(be encoded?) after the extinction of their languages. To others who seem unrelated with this extinction, one thing should keep in mind is that:
Every time we lose a language, we lose that much also of our adaptability and our diversity that gives us our strength and our ability to survive. From an ethical standpoint, all languages are of equal value. But the value of a language goes far beyond academic discourse. It contains the intellectual wisdom of populations of people and their observations of and adaptations to the world around them. Generation by generation, these elites (were?) tested by time and practices and finally accumulated in their ethnic’s(ethnic ?) treasury. Language is the very key to open the door of that treasury. There is no difference between finding our losing keys and preventing the extinction of lesser-known languages.

However, priorities should be given at first before preventing the extinction. Not all of the lesser-know languages are of equal value(前述已有ethical standpoint的” all languages are of equal value”, 本句中加些限定语是否更好?). Just like we classify our keys in pockets according to the importance of the property locked in the door which it can open, relevant research should be done to evaluate the “mineral deposit” hidden behind specific languages.

As mentioned before that lesser-known languages (are) both important for their speakers and others. Especially, the communication and collision of different cultures based on various languages gestate great innovations. Historical events proved many times that these kinds of culture hybrid not only affect the language speaker but (also) the whole society. Such as Buddhism, characterized by ancient Indic language, influence(influences) Chinese greatly.

So the government, not individuals, NGOs or other organization, should take the responsibility of preventing such languages from being extinct.

In conclusion, extinctions of languages are the natural consequences of social development. Although obviously disadvantages of it can be seen, the government should not try to revive those endangered languages. Just like plants, languages also have their own well adapted climate. More evidences need to be collected to answer whether this lesser-known language can revive again. What should be done now is just preventing such languages from being extinct. Thus, as mentioned in the argument, keep the “keys”.

分析全面, 论证充分, 学习了~~
不知lz是否也能请我喝酸奶;P

Camellia1aUID: 2646115

It’s an irresistible trend that many of the world's lesser-known languages are being lost as fewer and fewer people speak them. From Alaska to Australia, according to a new study, hundreds of languages around the world are teetering on the brink of extinction—some (+of them are) being spoken only by(by only比较好吧) a single person(只有一个人讲这种语言?). What’s worse, there is no evidence showing cease or declination of this trend(这句感觉有点问题 there is no evidence show the cease or dedination of this trend 或者 no evidence showing ... trend can be cited. ). Linguistics expert(s) warn that nearly all of the languages, up to almost 6000 kinds, could be extinct in the next two centuries. Affected by globalization and preparing for international competition, it’s reasonable and necessary for the young generations to abandon their indigenous languages and turn to main languages. Thus, a decrease in the population among the speakers of these languages is predicable.

The extinction means a lot not only to the local speakers but others(mean在这里是想表达'意味着很多'的意思么?感觉有点中国化,直接写出有negative effects多好呀). To the speakers of these languages, one of the most significant attributes of their unique ethics evaporates with the extinction. The most important label which distinguishing themselves with others fades away. As well as their unique knowledge, including philosophy, empirical experiences, special customs, and understanding of the nature and so on, embodied by this language, will encode after the extinction of their languages. To others who seem unrelated with this extinction, one thing should keep in mind is that:
every time we lose a language, we lose that much also (??also放句末好一点吧?)of our adaptability and our diversity that gives us our strength and our ability to survive. From an ethical standpoint, all languages are of equal value. But the value of a language goes far beyond academic discourse. It contains the intellectual wisdom of populations of people and their observations of and adaptations to the world around them. Generation by generation, these elites tested by time and practices and finally accumulated in their ethnic’s treasury(这个指国库,我觉得作者要表达的是文化宝藏之类的意思吧). Language is the very key to open the door of that treasury. There is no difference between finding our losing keys and preventing the extinction of lesser-known languages.

However, priorities should be given at first before preventing the extinction. Not all of the lesser-know languages are of equal value. Just like we classify our keys in pockets according to the importance of the property locked in the door which it can open, relevant research should be done to evaluate the “mineral deposit” hidden behind specific languages.(能想到用比喻,很不错~)


As mentioned before that lesser-known languages both important for their speakers and others(is important for both their speakers and others). Especially, the communication and collision of different cultures based on various languages gestate great innovations. Historical events proved many times that these kinds of culture hybrid(杂交植物... diversity可以表示文化多样性) not only affect the language speaker but the whole society. Such as Buddhism, characterized by ancient Indic language, influence Chinese greatly. So the government, not individuals、NGOs or other organization, should take the responsibility of preventing such languages from being extinct.

In conclusion, extinctions of languages are the natural consequences of social development. Although obviously disadvantages of it can be seen, the government should not try to revive those endangered languages. Just like plants, languages also have their own well adapted climate. More evidences need to be collected to answer whether this lesser-known language can revive again. What should be done now is just preventing such languages from being extinct. Thus, as mentioned in the argument, keep the “keys”.

1.看提纲我以为是完全同意,看了正文however那一段又感觉是有保留的赞同,到了结尾又有点完全赞同的意思...最好再把思路明确一下.如果确定要however那段最好再在结尾提一句
2.有些词用的不恰当,如果不了解一个词的用法还是尽量不要用吧
3.有的句子有点小瑕疵,写的时候稍微注意下~

fingshangUID: 2469559

没问题 我们学校自己做的酸奶还是蛮好喝的 2# mobius.x64

virgo_zhang0910UID: 2380285

The most important label which distinguishing themselves with others fades away。是不是改成distinguished 好一点？~感觉你第一次就写得很好啊~钥匙的例子举得很好！值得学习~