0910AW 同主题写作第三期 ARGUMENT242 by xiaoxiaoW

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TOPIC: ARGUMENT242 - The following appearedas an editorial in the student newspaper of Groveton College.

"To combat the recently reported dramatic rise in cheating among college and university students, theseinstitutions should adopt honor codes similar to Groveton's, which calls forstudents to agree not to cheat in their academic endeavors and to notify a facultymember if they suspect that others have cheated. Groveton's honor code replacedan old-fashioned system in which students were closely monitored by teachersand an average of thirty cases of cheating per year were reported. The honorcode has proven far more successful: in the first year it was in place,students reported twenty-one cases of cheating; five years later, this figurehad dropped to fourteen. Moreover, in a recent survey conducted by the Grovetonhonor council, a majority of students said that they would be less likely tocheat with an honor code in place than without."




In this editorial, the speaker's suggestion that colleges and universities should adopt honor codes similar to Groveton College(GC) sounds applicable. to support this suggestion, the speaker points out that in GC, the honor code has proven far more successful since the number of cheating cases declined from thirty to twenty-one in the first year and even dropped to fourteen in five years. The speaker also adduces a survey that a majority of students would not cheat with an honor code in place than old-fashioned system.While the argument contains some crucial flaws, which render it unpersuasive.



First and foremost, the argument relies on assumptions that all students take time to invigilate others whether they cheating in an examination, and every student would notify a faculty member whomever he or she suspects.However, without evidences to substantiate that every student pays attentionsin cheating cases and notify every case one cannot reasonably conclude that it is the honor code rather than the cronyism and overlook that in fact leads to the declination of cheating cases. Besides, as a student, one might cannot detect every case of cheating in examinations, there are some high-tech cheating which might hard for students to detect without concentrating, whichmake the reported number unreliable. So, it is too hasty to make a conclude supporting the honor code due to the unreliable number.



Secondly, comparing with the old-fashioned system, the honor code system which is based on the honesty and the integrity of students is so vulnerable and susceptible. Without considering those students who concentrate on their examination instead of taking time to invigilate, there is a great possibility that many students cheat together as a team without invigilation. It all depends on characters of students, and considering the diversity of student's characters in different colleges ,even the new system in fact ameliorate the rise in cheating,
adopting the honor code which is well worked does not forebode the same consequences of otherschools,it might even be the opposite. What's more, while adopting the honorcode in the college in which students are not honestly in cheating cases, the same survey number we might achieve, since few of them would concede they've cheated in examinations. So, saying the honor code is a superior one than the traditional method is irrational.



Last but not least, the survey the author adduces might be unreasonable  in any of
three aspects, First, the survey conducted by the GC honor council might not be responsible for all college students. In addition, the promise that few people will cheat depends on one's integrity and honesty. and no one tells the words like that he or she will cheat in the examination, so, it is hard to distinguish those who cheats from others. Finally, it is difficult to assure that one's behavior jibes with one's words. Saying that they would be less likely to cheat doesn't mean theywill attain it. All three points make the survey unreliable upon which thespeaker's hasty recommendation of the honor code is weak and unreasonable.


In sum. to strengthen the speaker's argument, the speaker must provide clear evidences that the number of cheating case in GC in fact declined after adopting the honor code, and it is the code that makes the number declined. Besides,a new survey is needed, of which the questions are more useful and specific.

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今天已经改过两篇argu242了，实在是有点不想改文章了，怕改得不好。
先占楼，明天再仔细帮你改吧。
另外感谢你的修改，长句子的时态确实是我的大问题，你看的很仔细，估计能帮我aw多拿0.5分，谢谢！

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