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Argument167 =so what=小组第五次作业 by xwlove:)

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题目：ARGUMENT167 - A folk remedy* for insomnia, the scent in lavender flowers, has now been proved effective. In a recent study, 30 volunteers with chronic insomnia slept each night for three weeks on lavender-scented pillows in a controlled room where their sleep was monitored. During the first week, volunteers continued to take their usual sleeping medication. They slept soundly but wakened feeling tired. During the second week, the volunteers discontinued their medication. As a result, they slept less soundly than the previous week and felt even more tired. During the third week, the volunteers slept longer and more soundly than in the previous two weeks. This shows that over a short period of time lavender cures insomnia.

*A folk remedy is usually a plant-based form of treatment common to traditional forms of medicine, ones that developed before the advent of modern medical services and technology.

一种治疗失眠的偏方--薰衣草花香，现在被证明是有效的。在一次最近的调查中，30名患有慢性失眠的志愿者在三周之内每晚都在一个受监视的控制室内睡在带薰衣草花香的枕头上。在第一周，志愿者继续服用他们常用的安眠药。他们睡得很沉但醒来时很累。在第二周，他们不服用药物。结果与前一周相比他们睡得不那么沉并且感觉更累。在第三周，他们睡得比前两周时间长而且更深。这表明薰衣草在短时间内治愈了失眠。

*偏方通常是一种在传统医药中常见的植物治疗形式，这些传统医药是在现代医药服务和科技出现之前发展起来的。

提纲：
TS：研究方法及其概念框架存在问题
1 实验设计问题导致实验得不到有效的结论。第一周与第二周对比说明安眠药的作用，第一周与第三周的对比说明薰衣草的作用。但是，我们不知道第三周安眠药是否依然能发挥作用。
2  概念混淆问题；即便实验有效，薰衣草在短时间内治愈了失眠这一结论是荒谬的。第一，失眠不等于睡眠时间及程度；第二，睡眠是否正真改善不得而知，尚需进一步实验观察。


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The author claims that the scent in lavender flowers proves to be an effective remedy for insomnia based on a recent study, a control experiment in which one control group took sleeping medication and the other didn't take. With thorough scrutiny, we are astonished to find that the study is not calculated to be convincing, for it not only fails to adopt a scientific methodology but also confuse the conceptual framework.  

The suspicion, first of all, stems from the validity of the control experiment. The study referred to the volunteers taking sleeping medication in the first week as the control group, from the comparison between the first week and the third week, concluding that sleeping was improved due to the effects of the scent of lavender flowers. Nevertheless, theoretically, the control experiment is designed to make all other variable factors controlled so as to observe the effects of the scent of lavender. Chances are that the effectiveness of sleeping medication made the volunteers sleep longer and more soundly rather than lavender. Hence, without the information whether the sleeping medication still worked in the third week, the author's conclusion is invalid at all.

Another flaw lies in the interpretation of the conception of insomnia and cure. Firstly, common sense tells us insomnia is a kind of disease which makes people not easy to fall asleep, rather than the quality of sleep like length and soundness. Secondly, cure means the disease will normally not relapse again, while the study, without regard to its validity, observed the effects for merely the third week, leaving the effects for the time later on unknown. It is likely that the effects of lavender last for only one week. Therefore, even if the study was substantive, the conclusion that lavender cures insomnia is absurd.

To draw a conclusion, the argument suffers from fallacies both in methodology and conception, his maintenance unwarranted. Were the control experiment scientifically designed and further observations concerning the effectiveness of the lavender made, the author's assertion would be more reasonable.

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写完才发现没有对第二周进行攻击 ⊙﹏⊙b汗

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The author claims that the scent in lavender flowers proves to be an effective remedy for insomnia based on a recent study, a control experiment in which one control group took sleeping medication and the other didn't take (删去). With thorough scrutiny, we are astonished to find that the study is not calculated to be convincing, for it not only fails to adopt a scientific methodology but also confuse the conceptual framework.  这个句子好啊

The suspicion, first of all, stems from the validity of the control experiment. The study referred to the volunteers taking sleeping medication in the first week as the control group, from the comparison between the first week and the third week（总觉得不顺 by comparising the first week to the third week）, concluding that sleeping quality was improved(要提高也是睡眠质量) due to the effects of the scent of lavender flowers.
Nevertheless, theoretically (on paper), the control experiment is designed to make all other variable factors controlled so as to observe the effects of the scent of lavender. Chances are that the effectiveness of sleeping medication made the volunteers sleep longer and more soundly rather than lavender. Hence, without the information on whether the sleeping medication still worked (好词)in the third week, the author's conclusion is invalid at all.我觉得这段几乎没有语法错误，就是有点累赘。可以考虑精炼一下表达，不要绕。就一个意思，效果好可能是安眠药的后续作用。

Another flaw lies in the interpretation of the conception of insomnia and cure. Firstly, common sense tells us insomnia is a kind of disease which makes people not easy to fall asleep, rather than the quality of sleep like length（这个词用得不好，睡眠时间不是长度） and soundness. 没有定义好失眠对实验结果产生什么影响？说完整Secondly, the word “cure” means the disease will normally not relapse（复发这个用得好） again(去掉，重复了), while the study, without regard to its validity, observed the effects for merely the third week, leaving the effects for the time later on（去掉） unknown. It is likely that the effects of lavender last for only one week. 恩好，说得完整Therefore, even if the study was substantive, the conclusion that lavender cures insomnia is absurd.

To draw a conclusion, the argument suffers from fallacies both in methodology and conception, his maintenance unwarranted（不知道什么意思）. Were the control experiment scientifically designed and further observations concerning the effectiveness of the lavender made,（倒装不错） the author's assertion would be more reasonable.
Xw进步神速，某米自愧。