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枕头和书UID: 2578813

提纲；1，发明多了，好多科学家的创造力是在小时候被培养的。
2，现在技术有利于培养孩子的创造力。
3， 技术进步是社会发展的保证，社会的发展有利于激发孩子的创造力。
Agree or disagree, technology cause children show less creative than they were in past.周三22：00交
Some people believe that the modern technology slush the children’ creativity, and there are so many the models that have shaped the mind of our children. I inclined to disagree with this view. If we look around, we will find that the new productions derived form modern technology have cramped our surrounding. Besides, there are lots and lots of new inventions come out nowadays. All of these mean that the creativity of our society, including the children’, is prompted significantly rather than suppressed.

To begin with, we have a lot of new inventions here, all of this inventions is based on the creativity of the inventors. A survey about the scientists technologists and inventors have indicated that the excellent ideas of these people usually due to the education in their childhood. For the inventions of modern society are increasing intensely, we have a good reason to support that the technology cause children show more and more creative than before. We even have a lot of teenager genies in our primarily school.

What’s more, the technology can directly contribute to stimulate the children’ creativity. For example, the computer can give the children a platform to mimic the real situation, as a result, provide a opportunity to many children to design their own trails. Those would be unbelievable at 50 years ago, however, the home based computer is enough to process that experiment. Anyway, the modern technology enabled the children to communicate with some talent ideas easily.

Finally, I want to take the Bill Gates as an example, who is one of the most
creative inventor in the world and founded the Microsoft. He have shown a incredible talents on the computer programming when was in middle school. But, now, with the prevalent use of computer, the computer talented children have be found all over the world. Even some terrible hacker is just a primarily school children. Also this phenomenon is not limited in one or two field, we can easily find some evidences in other field.

In conclusion, children of the modern society do not lose the creativity they should have. By contrary, they have obtain more opportunity to show their creative and stimulate it as the development of technology. That’s why I think that the children’s creativity is not less than before.
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DriftKingUID: 2664045

提纲；1，发明多了，好多科学家的创造力是在小时候被培养的。
2，现在技术有利于培养孩子的创造力。
3， 技术进步是社会发展的保证，社会的发展有利于激发孩子的创造力。% n2 C0 ^7 s: l4 M( w! n
Agree or disagree, technology cause children show less creative than they were in past.周三22：00

蓝色是感觉写的好的地方
红色是感觉有问题的地方
紫色是个人看法

Some people believe that the modern technology slush(我查了查词典没有跟题目有关的解释哦) the children’ creativity, and there are so many the models that have shaped the mind of our children. I inclined to disagree with this view. If we look around, we will find that the new productions derived form modern technology have cramped our surrounding. Besides, there are lots and lots of new inventions come out nowadays. All of these mean that the creativity of our society, including the children’, is prompted significantly rather than suppressed.. }0 J. c0 N7 i: I) f

To begin with, we have a lot of new inventions here, all of this(these) inventions is based on the creativity of the inventors. A survey about the scientists technologists(不太明白) and inventors have indicated that the excellent ideas of these people usually due to the education in their childhood. For the inventions of modern society are increasing intensely, we have a good reason to support that the technology cause children show more and more creative than before. We even have a lot of teenager genies in our primarily school.不错的想法来自童龄的教育。感觉这个观点不太好，任何时候都有创造性的任务，古有张衡祖冲之，今天也很多，感觉不太有说服力。! p& W; f+ S4 S- |8 S

What’s more, the technology can directly contribute to stimulate the children’ creativity. For example, the computer can give the children a platform to mimic the real situation, as a result, provide a opportunity to many children to design their own trails（路？还是想表达特点）. Those would be unbelievable（感觉换成不可实现更好） at 50 years ago, however, the home based computer（personal computer） is enough to process that experiment. Anyway, the modern technology enabled the children to communicate with some talent ideas easily. 激发孩子创造力，首段中心句，末段总结，这种结构很好，值得学习，赞一个！

Finally, I want to take the Bill Gates as an example, who is one of the most' |2 P3 c5 A5 z
creative inventor in the world and founded the Microsoft. He have shown a incredible talents on the computer programming when was in middle school. But, now, with the prevalent use of computer, the computer talented children have be found all over the world. Even some（要注意后边的单复数） terrible hacker is just a primarily school children. Also this phenomenon is not limited in one or two field, we can easily find some evidences in other field.这不算是个观点，可以用到上边的段落中，作为论据。虽然写文章可以追求个性，但是毕竟是考试，还是稳妥的好，感觉还是让我们一起压压做作家的冲动吧！

In conclusion, children of the modern society do not lose the creativity they should have. By contrary, they have obtain more opportunity（复数） to show their creative and stimulate it as the development of technology. That’s why I think that the children’s creativity is not less than before.

枕头兄是个很有想法的同学，文章不拘一格，有创新精神；
但是在语法方面要注意下单复数一致问题；
结构方面，从了大流吧，不要另辟蹊径了，万一ETS的文盲不懂欣赏了，咱不就完了；
观点方面第一个建议换换，感觉不太有说服力；第二个观点好好论述下；
以上都仅仅是一己之见，有不妥的地方欢迎一起讨论，加油哈！

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Some people believe that the modern technology slushes the children’ creativity, and there are so many the去掉 models that have shaped the mind of our children. I inclined to disagree with this view. If we look around, we will find that the new productions derived form modern technology have cramped our surrounding. Besides, there are lots and lots of new inventions come out nowadays. All of these mean that the creativity of our society, including the children’感觉你说的并没有包括children这个结论得不出吧？, is prompted significantly rather than suppressed.
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To begin with, we have a lot of new inventions here, all of this inventions is based on the creativity of the inventors. A survey about the scientists technologists and inventors have indicated that the excellent ideas of these people usually due to the education in their childhood. For the inventions of modern society are increasing intensely, we have a good reason to support that the technology cause children show more and more creative than before文章题目说现在现象你越来越show less creative，你这个貌似矛盾吧？. We even have a lot of teenager genies in our primarilyprimary school.# d, {  v$ x$ S9 y  J/ x5 j7 ^- i7 W2 E
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What’s more, the technology can directly contribute to stimulate the children’ creativity. For example, the computer can give the children a platform to mimic the real situation, as a result, provide a opportunity to many children to design their own trails. Those would be unbelievable at 50 years ago, however, the home based computer is enough to process that experiment. Anyway, the modern technology enabled the children to communicate with some talent ideas easily. 这段结构不错
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Finally, I want to take the Bill Gates as an example, who is one of the most creative inventor in the world and founded the Microsoft. He have shown a incredible talents on the computer programming when was in middle school. But, now, with the prevalent use of computer, the computer talented children have be found all over the world. Even some terrible hacker is just a primarily primary school children. Also this phenomenon is not limited in one or two field很地道的中文表达要注意哦, we can easily find some evidences in other field.

In conclusion, children of the modern society do not lose the creativity they should have. By contrary, they have obtain more opportunity to show their creative and stimulate it as the development of technology. That’s why I think that the children’s creativity is not less than before.


一些单复数问题和词性的问题要注意哦 例子不错的