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In this morden (modern) society, money plays an important role. You won't be able to achieve everything with money, but you will achieve nothing without money. Since I realize the importance of money, I don't agree with the statement that a job with more vacation time but a low salary is better than a job with a high salary but less vacation time. Most people in the society are ordinary. Well, as an ordinary person let me show you some reasons.(ps.个人感觉ordinary people 和reason 关系不是很密切)# L()3 R; Z- D( Q) e4 s
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First of all, nowadays(这个词在正式场合最好不要用)if you want to do something, you have to save enough money. To cite an example, if you want to go on a vacation, you need to pay for your airplane, train, or bus tickets .You, besides, have to spend an amount of money on your hotel, meals, resorts, souvenirs and so on. So how could this happen and how can you enjoy your vacation more? You need to have enough money. On the contrary, if you don (do not) have enough money, maybe during the vacation you can only stay at home ,watching DVDs, playing computers and doing something which don't cost much. In a long term, that kind of vacation means no fun and no passion. So there comes the question how can you know the money is enough? It's quite difficult. We only can conclude that the more, the better.
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Second, less vacation doesn't mean no vacation. As you have already get more salary, so there will be more to spend on [url=]unit([/url][TD1]
vacation time, which almost means you can have more fun or enjoy more advanced things meanwhile. For instance, in one week, if you work three days earning 300RMBs, the rest four days of the week will share what you have earned in the early three days, which means you can only spend 75RMBs each days. Maybe watching a movie in cinema or having a bigger meal than usual is what you can do to add more highlights in your life. And when you go shopping, you have to think more about whether the money is enough. That may not [url=]satisfy[/url][TD2]
your needs. if, however, you work five days a week with 500RMBs incomes, at the weekend you can spend 250RMBs each day. You can purchase more things at the same prices in the former situation, or you can also have a nice trip in the nearby city. I believe that would probably give you more sense of gratification.4 X& [9 m0 x7 {0 @3 H
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In addition, more salary not only means living more comfortable, having better choices for eating, but also means giving a hand to who needs your donations. You know, when you can just support you own life, you don't have spare time to care about others' lives. Nevertheless, as you have more money, you can live a enjoyable life, as well as make a contribution to a charity. [url=]And once you do you favour to who need help,[/url][TD3] the immaterial rewards, such as the reputation from the society and the appreciation from the person who accepts your help, will surely give a rise to your self-realization.
I am sorry I could not use Chinese to comment your writing, because I had to change to use a computer without Chinese input.
In my opinion, you should change the order of paragraph 3 and 4. Because paragraph 2 and 4 all talk about money. However, during the two paragraphs, there is another paragraph referring to the weakness of less time for vocation. In this way, I think your writing will be more smooth.
[TD1]do not know what are you going to express with this word
[TD2](probably you can use a more suitable word here)
[TD3]maybe you can ask someone else to check with this sentence |
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