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Do you agree or disagree
Students should not take part-time jobs while they are studying in universities.
Nowadays, some students take part-time jobs inside or outside our university, will it influence our study or has a bad effect on the future career. As we all admit that the main duty of students is learning the knowledge, while it is also necessary for students to take some amount of part-time jobs, but not too much.

It is knowledge and technology we learn from university that can help us find a decent and promising job. And the company will also prefer students with high scores and profound understanding about the major, because it is easy to train these students to really compete the jobs. If a student can not even understand the theorys and proceduresof the project, how can he finish the complex project successfully, sometimes even leave much trouble the company. Learning and reading much will also help to design our career, with knowing our majors clearly and profoundly, we know how to choose our ways for a better future and how to take the next step. Therefore, we'd better pay much of attention and energy to the learning in university.

However, it also do a help when we take a part-time job. But we must guarantee that we have finished our tasks in our school before taking the job. We will not only make some money to support our study and life, but also learn some skills to communicate with people and how to deal with some society stuffs which is always a big trouble for a new man just form the university. In this way, we can evolve ourselves into the society easily and rapidly after graduating. It will be better if the part-time job is relevant to our major, we can apply what we learned from classes to the real work, in return, we will understand the knowledge more profoundly. So doing the work sometimes is also a kind of learning.

We should arrange our time between the university and part-time job properly. After completing the tasks, homework and experiments, we should try to find a part-time job to perfect ourselves for a better understanding of what we learn, a better job and future.

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To binghuoshenlong
抱歉我还不能发附件，这样看不是很清楚，我直接发到你的邮件里头了，请查收。。。

Students should not take part-time jobs while they are studying in universities.
Nowadays, some students take part-time jobs inside or outside our university, will it influence our study or has have a bad effect on the future career. As we all admit that the main duty of students is learning the knowledge, while it is also necessary for students to take some amount of(amount 后接不可数名词) part-time jobs, but not too much.

It is knowledge and technology we learn from university that can help us find a decent and promising job. And the company will also prefer students with high scores and profound understanding about the major, because it is easy to train these students to really compete the jobs. If a student can not even understand the theorys theories and procedures of the project, how can he finish the complex project successfully, sometimes even leave leaving much trouble to the company. Learning and reading much will also help to design our career, with knowing our majors clearly and profoundly, and we know how to choose our ways for a better future and how to take the next step. Therefore, we'd better pay much of attention and energy to the learning in the university.$ g6 `; ^# h* F, b. B* @3 h

However, it also does a help(米有见过这种表达) when we take a part-time job. But we must guarantee that we have finished our tasks in our school before taking the job. We will not only make some money to support our study and life, but also learn some skills to communicate with people and how to deal with some society stuffs which is always a big trouble for a new man just form from the university. In this way, we can evolve ourselves into the society easily and rapidly after graduating. It will be better if the part-time job is relevant to our major, we can apply what we learned from classes to the real work, in return(这个不能做连词吧), and we will understand the knowledge more profoundly. So doing the work sometimes is also a kind of learning.
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We should arrange our time between the university and part-time job properly. After completing the tasks, homework and experiments, we should try to find a part-time job to perfect ourselves for a better understanding of what we learn, a better job and future.

总体感觉这篇比较条例还是比较清楚，但是论证不够充分，例证较少。然后就是注意一些比较低级的语言错误，这个应该尽量减少。

binghuoshenlongUID: 2670882

8.10
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Movies and TV programs made in one’s own country are more interesting than those made in other countries.
It is always too fastidious to have a permanent an answer, which are more interesting, the movies and TV programs in our own country or in the other countries.

In general, the local movies and TV seem to more interesting. Because the editors of own countries can know about the fashions of the countries more clearly and precisely. They can design the movies or programs based on the appetite of the youth or other specific group. While another reason is about the history, when the movies and programs are related to the history, maybe it is difficult for the foreign friends to understand, a moving story that happens thousands of years may seem to nothing to an American friend when they do not the background.

However, sometimes an excellent movie can spread all over the world, such as the Chinese movie Kongfu and American movie Forrest Gump. Kongfu is mysterious for not only some foreign friends but also ourselves, there are a lot of  kongfu, it is more like a kind of art than the skills of fighting. And every kind of kongfu has its long and complex process of forming and history. Kongfu can help us know about our physical body and metal spirit, which is the reason making kongfu famous. So the movie of Kongfu becomes famous worldwide. Then why the Forest Gump is so famous in so many countries, is it really so interesting to see an man with limited intelligence to tell his history. You will understand why only if you watch the movie, which tell us how a person achieve the success through so many tough experiences. He never gives up, he is loyal to his friend, he loves his mother and family..., life is like a box of chocolate, you never know what you gonna get,  which activates and moves so many people.

Sometimes a local movie or TV program is not popular in our own counties, but become a hit in another country, which is not a rare phenomenon. As a Chinese saying goes, the flower growing inside the wall blooms outside the wall. Maybe an author or the director describe an phenomenon or talking about the inward intuition which is not regarded valuable in the country, fortunately, the movie just interests the people in other countries, maybe it just go along with these foreign friends' appetite and this countries' fashion.

In conclusion, whether movies and TV programs is interesting or not, is based on the movies and programs themselves, the cultures, the fashions and some necessary commercial factors and so forth, it is a case by case question. What we should do is putting our hearts on it, respect the history when making the movies, while following the fashion and looking for a good company to perform it will also helps.

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不知道要多少分才能粘贴附件。。。
凑合着看吧

It is always too fastidious to have a permanent an answer (answer), which are more interesting, the movies and TV programs in our own country or in the other countries.

In general, the local movies and TV seem to more interesting (这句话用法仿佛没错，但总觉得读起来有点拗口，”to”是不是可以不要啊？). Because the editors of own countries can know about the fashions of the countries more clearly and precisely (同理，可否改成because the local editors are more familiar with the traditions and fashions of the country). They can design the movies or programs based on the appetite of the youth or other specific group. While another reason is about the history, when the movies and programs are related to the history, maybe it is difficult for the foreign friends to understand, a moving story that happens thousands of years (这句话想表达的意思是：一个持续了千年的故事？) may seem to (might mean) nothing to an American friend when they do (since he/she does) not know the background.

However, sometimes an excellent movie can spread all over the world, such as the Chinese movie Kongfu and American movie Forrest Gump. Kongfu is mysterious for not only some foreign friends but also for ourselves, there are a lot of kongfu, it is more like a kind of art than the skills of fighting. (. It is more likely that Kongfu is a kind of art rather than a skill of fighting) And every kind of kongfu has its long and complex process of forming and history. Kongfu can help us know about our physical body and metal spirit, which is the reason making kongfu famous. So the movie of Kongfu becomes famous worldwide. Then why the Forest Gump is so famous in so many countries is it really so interesting to see a man with limited intelligence to tell his history. You will understand why only if you watch the movie, which tell us how a person achieves the success through so many tough experiences. He never gives up,
he is loyal to his friend, he loves his mother and family..., (这句话语法有误，要么加连词，要么直接改成He persevere unremittingly, loyal to his friend, loves his mother and family...). Life is like (不要like更好) a box of chocolate, (加连词比如thus等，但我不明白一盒子巧克力和你后面这句话有什么逻辑上的联系么？) you never know what you gonna get, which activates and moves so many people.

Sometimes a local movie or TV program is not popular in our own counties, but become a hit in another country, which is not a rare phenomenon. As a Chinese saying goes, the flower growing inside the wall while blooms outside the wall. Maybe an author or the director describes an phenomenon or talking about the inward intuition which is not regarded valuable in the country, fortunately, the movie just interests the people in other countries, maybe it just go along with these foreign friends' appetite and this countries' fashion.

In conclusion, whether movies and TV programs is interesting or not, is based on the movies and programs themselves, the cultures, the fashions and some necessary commercial factors and so forth, it is a case by case question. What we should do is putting our hearts on it, respect the history when making the movies, while following the fashion and looking for a good company to perform it will also helps.

注意语法，特别是句型结构。

layla1989UID: 2832481

改好了~~~改的晚了点~~~不好意思

binghuoshenlongUID: 2670882

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? If you do not make sure other people (especially influential people or your employers) know about your strengths and accomplishments, you will never get successful in life5 L)
Getting successful mainly depends on your ability, technology and how you treat things and people, rather than just depends on getting people to kown about your strengths and accomplishments which can do a minor help. The most important is what you can accomplish now and in the future, the past is past.

First, I admit that if people know about your strengths and accomplishments , of course you must be really a competent people, they wil respect you for your success and ability. And maybe the boss gives you higher position immediately, where you can show your talents totally. If the colleages believe you, they will cooperate with you happily. In this way, it is very easy for you to make another masterpiece. It can not be better for a perpon getting admitted by others.

However, depending on the accoplishments in the past to convince other people is not so wise a option. Even some companies hire  you and treats you well with high salary and perfect fareware, that is because they beliveve and hope you can make more profits for the company, while if you do not try to work heartly, the companies may fire you. Letting people know your wonderful past will give you a key to a door, and what should you do after you get in the door, you should try to show your strengths now and make another accomplishments just like you did in the past.

Even people do not know your strengths and accomplishments, do not be disappointed, remember that you can always be shining if you are really a brilliant person. They will belive you finally and regard you as a modest man who never show off his success. This kind of people are popular and welcome in the companies.

When you want to be successful, make sure first you are really experienced, talented and can put your heart on your work and projects. If so, you can always accomplish  successes no matter where and when. The past of you can do a little assitance, but do not rely on it.

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7# binghuoshenlong

我改完了，说的不对的地方， 还请见谅

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感谢楼主用心点评。水平有限，不足之处请见谅

binghuoshenlongUID: 2670882

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09.08.07NA
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents should allow children to make their own choices rather than determine their children’s future for them.

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817作文

jilinlinUID: 2396929

不好意思，最近比较忙，没来得及修改，现在补上8.14的

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817 by binghuoshenlong
8月24日交
+ F7 B  r/ c/ Z( |（09.01.23 NA） Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Young people should try several different jobs before they take a long term career.

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14# binghuoshenlong （09.01.23 NA）Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Young people should try several different jobs before they take a long term career.

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I totally agree with the idea that it is very necessary to try several different jobs before taking a long term career. In this way, our long career(S) can be more suitable to us and more wonderful than the
long career(S)
without trying other kinds of jobs before.

(I totally agree with the idea that it is crucially necessary to try several different jobs before finally set up mind to take a position as a long-term career. In this way, this carefully chosen life-long career must suit one’s characteristics better when compared with devoting whole life working on a field without experiencing any other kind of jobs.)


Firstly, in our university(ies), we study the knowledge in the class and do some easy experiments with the help of our teachers. It is difficult to realize whether our interest is on the major we are studying now. Maybe we choose the major of doctor just because our parents want us to cure the patients(,to be a dotor,)which is a glory job in the view of our parents. Or some vocational(vocational) factors (which) force us to choose the major, just for finding a job easily to cover our consumption. Besides, there are lots of
many(这里Lots of 和Many意思重复了，去掉任意一个) other reasons for us to choose our major（s）. Well, trying several different jobs can help us to analyze ourself（ourselves）in sight, which gives us a chance to know which kind of job is our type and our interest lies on.(江湖传言，美国人不大喜欢文章用第一人称写，仅供参考)

(Firstly, in universities, students master skills and learn knowledge in classes or lectures as well as handle some basic experiments along with professors’ help. As a result of this phenomenon, it seems to identify whether these students are truly interested in the specified majors they worked on. Taking the next situation for example, sometimes, some youngsters choose their majors, like surgeon, simply because their parents hold the opinion that being a doctor and cure the deadly ill patient is a decently glory job. Still other reasons, here can be these employment factors, which undeniably influences folks when choosing majors, for the sake of some majors leading to easy access to ideal jobs with decent pay after graduation. Therefore, having working in various positions will give people the opportunity to look into their inner mind, and find out one’s perfectly matching job and real interest in.)

Besides, the several jobs let us learn some communication skills which could not be learned（两个learn在一个句子里感觉怪怪的，可以换一个词，比如gained） in the class. The most important benefit is that we can know about the developing condition of there areas and whether they are promising, it really help a lot when we choose the long career which suits us.

In addition, we would make plenty of friends in several areas. Every area and career can not(cannot) exist by itself, it must cooperate with other areas, so there are very interdependent relationships among different fields. When we can manage the complex stuff in several areas, it won't be difficult for us the handle the problems in the long term
(long-term) career. Even our ability is not enough for solving the problems (to conquer one particular problem), our friends from vast vacations(vocations) can try their best to help us deal with the hardness.

To sum up, I highly recommend that everyone should set foot in several areas before they really confirm the long term
(long-term) career they will pursue as milestone。


嘿嘿，手比较贱，不自量力的修改了前面两段，多包涵。请指正。蛮喜欢你的思路的，继续加油。