麦托的作文练习

麦托UID: 2816626

每天一篇。

麦托UID: 2816626

You have enough money to purchase either a house or a business. Which would you choose to buy? Give specific reasons to explain your choice.

Someone would like to spend their money on buying a house, and others prefer to purchase a business. As for me, to buy a house is preferable for following reasons.

In the first place, I am yearning for an own house. Owning a house means that I never need rent a small room, or share a dorm with others. Now I am living in a dorm in campus, which is noisy and messy. In order to concentrate myself on my study task, I always go to library or cafe, which is relatively quiet and neat, however, far away from my dorm. What’s worse, on account of roommates, it is unbecoming to read my favorite prose loudly and listen rock ‘roll with a great volume in dorm. In a nut, it is so terrible to be disturbed and restricted by roommates. However, within my own house, I can do anything I want and needn’t care about others.  Additionally, the house should be decorated on my own. Nothing can be more fantastic than living in a house with my own style.

The second reason is that to purchase and run a business would be tough for me. As we know, specialized knowledge on humanity, organization, and business, as well as rich experience is prerequisite for managing a business successfully. As a twenty-year-old student, I am short of related experience and competency so that it will take risk to own a business. What I should do ahead is to widen my horizon and earn more experience to make myself qualified for a prospective job.

In addition, I don’t think it is desirable for me to spend most of time on managing a business. Above all, there are a lot of wonderful things in life that are more interesting and previous than business, like music, books, friends and families. Immersing myself in business, hardly would I have time to enjoy excellent music and profound books, not mention to stay together with families. It would be such a big pity if I lose those things that I cherish that I would rather give up the business.

With reasoning above, buying a house is more suitable for me.

hyacinthUID: 2184492

可能是我落伍了吧。。。 我觉得这种题目现在好像不经常考了。。。

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语法问题太多。。。

另外 貌似是in a nutshell 不是in a nut

最后一段很confusing 到底是结尾啊 还是第三个理由啊。。。


做为第一篇练习已经很好了。。。比我当年写的第一篇作文好多了  哈哈
but still has a long way to go...

加油

麦托UID: 2816626

谢谢楼上的批改！
额，不是第一篇啊 ==！
麦托会努力的。

麦托UID: 2816626

倒数第二段是第三个理由啊~~

NO.xiaoyuyuUID: 2842596

5# 麦托
你好 我只是说下我的看法
1 我认为每段在开头表达观点时要表达清晰的抽象的理由 在陈述具体的理由 我为什么同意buy a house
像第一理由 买房子可以给我稳定的依靠等等 （这只是我的看法）另两个理由还可以
2 我想交流下 你现在每次的作文有固定的模板吗 还是随心所写

麦托UID: 2816626

没有固定的模板呢~~只是大概都按照这样的结构来写哦
不知道作文怎么提高，惆怅中 6# NO.xiaoyuyu

hyacinthUID: 2184492

7# 麦托


可以先写个提纲  然后往里填东西

提纲有助于提高文章的逻辑性和连贯性   

版上有很多教写作的帖子  搜搜吧

麦托UID: 2816626

It is more important to reserve land for human beings or endangered animals.

Many people believe that it is more important to reserve land for human beings than for endangered animals. However, I disagree with the statement. Firstly, it is more urgent for endangered animals to find some habitats than to expand for human beings. Moreover, it is humans who finally will be threatened if we don’t pay enough weight to the endangered animals and just keep land for humans.

First, those endangered animals are in an urgent need of land to inhabit. Due to the development of industry, a substantial amount of species are in danger of extinction. For instance, humans cut down trees and replaced forest with factory and moll, which lead to the loss of habitat for birds and other animals. If we don’t make measures timely, they would vanish forever. Nonetheless, other people stand on a very different ground, and they think human beings should utilize land for their own expansion. From the point of urgency of view, however, undoubtedly, we should put the endangered animals into sight first. Without the expansion, we still could go on by building higher skyscrapers and improving the efficiency of factory. Compared to humans, endangered animals are facing the threat of dying away.

What’s more, from a long run view, to keep land for endangered animals will benefit human beings eventually. Some endangered animals play a most important role in the biology chain and environment. Hardly can other species, human beings included, live well on earth without the extinguish animals. Thus emphasizing the importance of reserving land for humans too much means the whole earth would be undermined. At last, human beings, as lord of world, would be threatened one day which is not in distant future. Things would be different if we attach more importance to keep land for animals. A harmonious and complete biology chain is beneficial for the whole creatures on earth. Only with rich species and an efficient biology chain human beings could exist in an environmental friendly way.

From the point of urgency and providence of view, we could safely say it is more important to reserve land for endangered animals, rather than human beings.

hyacinthUID: 2184492

没有听说过pay enough weight to sth的说话。。。一般用pay attention to 多。。。

有可能是我孤陋寡闻了。。。

你的开头和结尾都很成问题。开头第一句不要复述题目。一个句子作为结尾也太短了。。。

NO.xiaoyuyuUID: 2842596

Many people do believe that it is more important to reserve land for human beings than for endangered animals. However, I disagree with the statement. Firstly, it is more urgent for endangered animals to find some habitats than to expand land for human beings. Moreover, it is humans who finally will be threatened if we don’t pay enough attention (weight) to the endangered animals and just keep land for humans.

First, those endangered animals are in an emergent(替换urgent，前面出现过) need of land to inhabit. Due to the development of industry, a substantial amount of species are in danger of extinction. For instance, humans cut down trees and replaced forest with factories (factory) and moll (??), which lead to the loss of habitats for birds and other animals. If we don’t take/adopt (make) measures instantly (timely), they would vanish (我觉得用disappear) forever. Nonetheless, other people stand on a very different ground, and they think human beings should utilize land for their own expansion. From the point of urgency of view, however, undoubtedly, we should put the endangered animals into sight first. Without the expansion, we still could go on by building higher skyscrapers and improving the efficiency of factories (factory). Compared to humans, endangered animals are facing the threat of dying out (away). ' s' P2 R3 r3 Q# ?' p: Z/ b, {
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What’s more, from a long run view, to keep land for endangered animals will benefit human beings eventually. Some endangered animals play a most important role in the biology chain and environment. Hardly can other species, human beings included, live well on earth without the extinguish animals. Thus emphasizing the importance of reserving land for humans too much means the whole earth would be undermined. At last, human beings, as lord of the world, would be threatened one day which is not in distant future. Things would be different if we attach more importance to keep land for animals. A harmonious and complete biology chain is beneficial for the whole creatures on earth. Only with rich species and an efficient biology chain human beings could exist in an environmental friendly way.
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From the point of urgency and providence of view, we could safely say it is more important to reserve land for endangered animals, rather than human beings.
我要转组了 这是链接 这个组好像没人了呢
https://bbs.gter.net/thread-1109907-20-1.html

麦托UID: 2816626

10# hyacinth    额，第一句我是把题目说一下哦~~谢谢批改！

hyacinthUID: 2184492

12# 麦托


try to paraphrase it instead of copying the topic

麦托UID: 2816626

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Television has destroyed communication among friends and family. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

For decades the time people spent in watching television has soared along with prevalence of television. However, it is unreasonable to merely owe the deficiency of communication among friends and family to the television, which on the contrary exerts vital impact in communication among people.

In the first place, it is miscellaneous reasons that destroyed communication among people. Ranking as among the most primary ones were the hectic life style and many other media, rather than television. Owing to the quick pace of life, modern people have little time to date and talk frequently. They are always busy in working, tackling tasks, doing business and so on so forth. Besides, internet bring side effect on communication as well. Besides, internet also undermines the communication. With email and chatting on line, which are both provided by internet, people are inclined to send messages as their main way of contact, rather than make a date or talk face to face. While internet makes life more convenient, messages that one sends or receives through emails or chatting online looks mechanical and cold. From this point of view such a switch really contributes detriments to communication. As for television, it is just among innumerous reasons; the negative influence of television which compared to that mentioned the above facts is really slight.

What’s more, as a good way of entertainment and getting information, television provides a prodigious amount of topics for audiences. Television has various programs, including news, talk show, and drama. News and current affairs, towards which we always share our attitudes and opinion, provided by news, public figures or idols we learned from talk show and the plot and characters in drama are all excellent topics for chatting. For instance, my mum is quite excited when talking with other women about their favorite characters in a given drama.

Additionally, watching television together with families is beneficial for communication among families. It becomes a common habit to seat ourselves together on sofa, watching television after dinner. Take my personal experience as an instance; I really enjoy watching television together with my families. We laugh at the funny things in comics, give our opinion about affairs in news, and sometimes just talk about trifles of our daily lives. How warm and harmonious it is! In this way, television offers a good chance to stay together, share opinion and talk to each other, especially for families.

To conclude, as far as the communication among people was concerned, the benefits broungt by television, including we get abundant topics and more chance to communicate, outweigh the disadvantage that watching television potentially is a waste of time.