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发表于 2011-8-16 14:45:16 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览

本帖最后由 alohasally 于 2011-8-17 23:31 编辑

谢谢所有战友们:)

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本帖最后由玻璃梨于 2011-8-16 16:28 编辑

什么回事呢

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发表于 2011-8-17 10:26:50 |只看该作者

2# 玻璃梨 有一个作文批改的活动如果想参加详情请见 https://bbs.gter.net/thread-1285161-1-1.html

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本帖最后由 alohasally 于 2011-8-27 00:21 编辑

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本帖最后由 alohasally 于 2011-8-27 00:21 编辑

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发表于 2011-8-17 15:42:56 |只看该作者

by zhengxiao0312

帮忙看下我的https://bbs.gter.net/thread-1294410-1-1.html

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发表于 2011-8-17 18:43:35 |只看该作者

8月16日独立改好了

最少300字剩下随便你发挥就是了

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发表于 2011-8-17 23:11:38 |只看该作者

8-17 独立综合两篇谢谢

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发表于 2011-8-18 11:24:24 |只看该作者

Do you agree ordisagree, it is better to relax by watching a movie or reading a book than bydoing physical exercise.

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What kind of activities would you prefer to relax yourself,sitting down to watch something or doing some sports? Both of them hold theirbenefits. As far as I am concerned, watching a movie or reading a book comfortsus more than doing exercises for （the reason that） we can both having a rest and getting someknowledge during the whole process.
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Firstly, sitting down quietly and concentrating on the storiesin movies or books can eliminate the worry in one’s mind which is the nature ofrelax. After knowing this, some humorous or harmonyharmonious movies and novels are recommendable. For illustration, several days ago, I watched the movie named TheSmurfs after the quarreling with a friend. The lovely actions, intelligentideas and kind hearts of smurfs touched me so much that I forgot theunhappiness between me and my friend. Furthermore, the smurfs’ unity of familyalso imparted me that friends need to understand and help each other去掉 ratherthan blame.
Secondly, since the essential aim is to relax ourselves, it is fundamentalto notice that we need to let not only the physical but the psychologicalcondition to rest in pleasant atmosphere. If we going to do some exercise, no matterhow hard it is, there will be some energy from bodies consumed. Each of us hasthe experiences that we become more tiered on the physical aspect after sports activities.Also, we may keep considering the issues that bother us while we are running,which will put a harder pressure on the shoulder of our minds.6 u, O! Q& G. R' Y5 n# ~! y a
All in all, as for the benefits for both physical and spiritualrelax I agree with the speaker that watching a movie or reading a book isbetter. To relax, we should choose something that is easy to accomplish and hasnot a bit disadvantages for bodies.
句式和思路都不错但建议每段都扩充一些，或者在增加点理由

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