【Daily Writing Camp】alohasally 的作文贴 谢谢各位

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我的综合在这里~https://bbs.gter.net/viewthre ... age=4#pid1775448348

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8.19 Annie's 修改稿

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8.19 独立 已修改~

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综合 修改稿

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8-20  综合

wendychuengUID：2811319

你19号的综合没有给我改...

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对不起啊，同学，17号的作业我现在才给你改。。。不好意思，忙忘记这事了。。额额。。
哦，对了，我这样把文章放这里没问题吧。。貌似我添加附件总是添不上。。


The lecture discussed the phenomenon of less readers of literatures than before. Some causes and effects are taken into account. However it is in the opposite direction of the passages' claims in（from） three aspects as showed below.（第二句HOWEVER后句子太长了，主谓宾有点混乱）

First, the professor in the lecture claims that not only the literatures can provide the intellectual stimulations (+but aslo..).not only but also 最好连用，否则觉得句子说了一半） According to some vivid examples, books like the scientific, political ones and so forth are also in high quality. They can enhance the intellective levels of people as well. However, this is different from the ideas in the passage which indicates that reading less literature will lower the intellectual benefits.（这一段再看看，我咋觉得文章里是说BOOK销量降低了就说是文学作品销量少了，但是听力里说，其实还有很多其他形式的文学作品的。。我再回头看看）

Second, the professor in the lecture dose（does） not agree with the position in the reading that the level of culture in general is lowered. The speaker concerned the culture is just changed into a station（situation?） that it can be revealed in many other forms except for （beside, except for应该是不包含后面那个名词了吧）literatures. Fantastic music, wonderful movies can also be precious part of the culture and they are even more beneficial to the general. There is no evidence to show the level is lowered. (我觉得是不是用lower就好了)。

Third, the lecture holds the point that the tendency of less readers than before may resulted from the authors’ writing ability. （应该不是写作能力，而是说写出来的东西读者读不懂）This is another part that is not in consistence with the reading that(which)
it （it多余）believes (it is the删除) （that）less audience leads the difficulties to（of）( the writers to删除)(literatures’ publication) 最后一句句子太长了而且穿插了很多定语从句和强调句，让人看了有点CONFUSED,最好断个句）

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8-22  两篇作业 感谢您的意见

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by zhengxiao0312

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独立已修改好。

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8.22 独立 已修改

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两篇都在个、附件里啦

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那个附件怎么附上去的，研究半个多小时都不知道呢~!~教教

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新手不能传附件的