theflyfish的作文帖

theflyfishUID：2101420

第一篇文章。
I partly agree withthis assertion. It is true that some empirical evidence can prove thisstatement. For example, a survey conducted in the United States shows that theratio of American college students who can read and understand complicatedarticles is 40% in 1994, and this number reduces to 31% in 2003. In themeanwhile, some kinds of literate ability, such as the capacity of composingand appreciating poems which is treated as the essence of education in classicworld, have failed to draw attention from the public any more.
However, the factthat writing and reading is less important is only true when it relates totraditional culture and literature. Besides these narrow areas, especially whenit comes to the field of applied writing and reading, people actually placemore importance on these abilities.
First of all, theability of writing and reading is fundamental skills in academic fields. Thelevel of critical thinking and information searching is vital during the courseof research. Whether a scholar can find and absorb useful information amonglarge quantities of materials quickly and effectively determines whether he canconduct his project smoothly and successfully. Moreover, according to asociology study, well-expressed dissertations are more likely to be acceptedand become popular and it is equally true in science disciplines, which issupposed to be more rational than others.
Another reason toexplain the significance of writing and reading ability is that these abilitiesare key to one’s career success. First, people who can read and write proficientlyhave larger possibility to pass admission examinations which is prerequisite tohigher education.
Second, peoplewith high levels of writing and reading abilities are easier to obtainpromotion during large organizations, like companies and government. Onecharacter of modern society is that people need to deal with large amounts of complicatedfiles and documents within a short time. This is impossible to complete forpeople who lack the ability of writing and reading. If one is acquainted withthis situation, he might not be surprised with the fact that 80% of Americancompanies engaged in service industry require language tests for theirapplicants and the money they paid for their employers’ writing classes reaches3.1 billion per year.
In sum, it isdeniable that writing and reading abilities related to traditional cultures areless important than before, however, it is unfair to enlarge this conclusion tothe whole field.

theflyfishUID：2101420

第二篇
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is better to spend money on travelling and vocation than to save money for future?

    It is deniable that savings is necessary because we cannot predict the risk of future. However, compared to saving money to eliminate the unknown threat, I prefer to spend it on travelling and vocation.
    The chief reason is that travelling and vocation can relieve people from stress and tiredness of daily work and study. People need to have rests at regular intervals and they can utilize this leisure time to refresh themselves in nature, to pursue enjoys through travels, to draw inspiration from heterogeneous cultures. They can escape from the boring routine life for a while, and reload themselves to continue the tough and arduous expedition of life.
    Additionally, some resorts will no longer exist for varieties of reasons, and if we do not seize times to visit them now, we will regret to have no chance to see them ever again. The Yangtse Gorges are a good example to illustrate this point. A beautiful place was destroyed and many species are devastated for the sake of economic growth and human safety. It may be an envisioned policy, however, next generations can only appreciate the beauty of the Yangtse Gorges through videos.
    Moreover, travelling can help people to widen their visuals, deepen their thoughts and enhance their understandings about people, nature, and culture. To visit the wildness, people obtain opportunities to reconsider the relationship between human and animals. To visit foreign countries, people can not only get knowledge about unknown arts, buildings, rituals and ceremonies, they can also recognize the culture behind them. Furthermore, they will compare different cultures by instinct and during this course people can understand their own culture deeply. They will struggle to relocate their specific positions in society and form their unique identities eventually.
    The last reason relies on the anticipation of the inflation of RMB. According to the statistics of Chinese government, the rate of inflation increases swiftly recently. In the meanwhile, CPI has reached the new high level of these years. It recalls people the situation of 1980s when the salary of a newly graduated college student was 56 yuan, however, it is merely the price of a film ticket in some big cities, like Beijing and Shanghai nowadays. Saving moneys now might means saving nothing for future.
    In sum, I agree on spending money on travelling and vocation because it can relief people from intense life, increase knowledge and it is also a wise investment in terms of the possibility of inflation.

JJohnnyyUID：2991341

I partly agree with this assertion. It is true that some empirical evidence can prove this statement. For example, a survey conducted in the United States shows that the ratio of American college students who can read and understand complicated articles is 40% in 1994, and this number reduces to 31% in 2003. In the meanwhile, some kinds of literate ability, such as the capacity of composing and appreciating poems which is treated as the essence of education in classic world, have failed to draw attention from the public any more
However, the fact that writing and reading is less important is only true when it relates to traditional culture and literature. Besides these narrow areas, especially when it comes to the field of applied writing and reading, people actually place more importance on these abilities.
First of all, the ability of writing and reading is fundamental skills in academic fields. The level of critical thinking and information searching is vital during the course of research. Whether a scholar can find and absorb useful information among large quantities of materials quickly and effectively determines whether he can conduct his project smoothly and successfully. Moreover, according to sociology study, well-expressed dissertations are more likely to be accepted and become popular and it is equally true in science disciplines, which is supposed to be more rational than others.
Another reason to explain the significance of writing and reading ability is that these abilities are keys to one’s career success. First, people who can read and write proficiently have larger possibility to pass admission examinations which is prerequisite to higher education.
Second, people with high levels of writing and reading abilities are easier to obtain promotion during large organizations, like companies and government. One character of modern society is that people need to deal with large amounts of complicated files（似乎amount 能修饰不可数） and documents within a short time. This（It） is impossible to complete for people who lack the ability of writing and reading. If one is acquainted with this situation, he might not be surprised with the fact that 80% of American companies engaged in service industry require language tests for their applicants and the money they paid for their employers’ writing classes reaches3.1 billion per year.
Sum, it is deniable（undeniable） that writing and reading abilities related to traditional cultures are less important than before, however, it is unfair to enlarge this conclusion tithe whole field.

语言文字方面都很好。。
开头最好能开门见山的把观点具体说明一下。个人觉得你写的有点绕。
最好能把反例写在最后，因为是要略写的。。
其实写的很好了，，学习~

charlieqcUID：2990355

2# theflyfish
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is better to spend money on travelling and vocation than to save money for future?





It is deniable (undeniable) that savings is necessary because we cannot predict the risk of future. However, compared to saving money to eliminate the unknown threat, I prefer to spend it on travelling and vocation. (最好能说明下原因或者写上Thesis statement，不然感觉这个However和上面连接的有些牵强)

The chief reason is that travelling and vocation can relieve people from stress and tiredness of daily work and study. People need to have rests (have a rest/relax) at regular intervals and they can utilize this leisure time to refresh themselves in nature, to pursue enjoys through travels, to draw inspiration from heterogeneous cultures. They can escape from the boring routine life for a while, and reload themselves to continue the tough and arduous expedition of life.

Additionally, some resorts will no longer exist for varieties of reasons, and if we do not seize times to visit them now, we will regret to have no chance to see them ever again. The Yangtse Gorges are a good example to illustrate this point. A beautiful place was destroyed and many species are devastated for the sake of economic growth and human safety. It may be an envisioned policy, however, next generations can only appreciate the beauty of the Yangtse Gorges through videos.

Moreover, travelling can help people to widen their visuals, deepen their thoughts and enhance their understandings about people, nature, and culture. To visit the wildness, people obtain opportunities to reconsider the relationship between human and animals. To visit foreign countries, people can not only get knowledge about unknown arts, buildings, rituals and ceremonies, they can also recognize the culture behind them. Furthermore, they will compare different cultures by instinct and during this course people can understand their own culture deeply. They will struggle to relocate their specific positions in society and form their unique identities eventually.

The last reason relies on the anticipation of the inflation of RMB. According to the statistics of Chinese government, the rate of inflation increases swiftly recently. In the meanwhile, CPI has reached the new high level of these years. It recalls people the situation of 1980s when the salary of a newly graduated college student was 56 yuan, however, it is merely the price of a film ticket in some big cities, like Beijing and Shanghai nowadays. Saving moneys now might means saving nothing for future.

In sum, I agree on spending money on travelling and vocation because it can relief people from intense life, increase knowledge and it is also a wise investment in terms of the possibility of inflation.

Powerful evidentiary sentence, clearly thesis~~~
The only drawback is the first paragraph’s structure…..
你的语句很优美的说啊。。。向你学习~~

theflyfishUID：2101420

感谢楼上两位。
竟然把deniable和undeniable弄混了。。。

theflyfishUID：2101420

1月21日
这篇写的太纠结了
Government should focus more on environment preservation rather than economic development.

    I concede that government has some limited responsibility to preserve environment, such as legislation and education. Even so, I believe that promoting economic development should invariably be the paramount accountability of government, especially those of developing countries.
    The chief reason relies on the assumption that the fundamental aim of government is to enhance its people’s standard of life. Excluding some extreme examples, citizens abandon some instinct rights and constitute government to make sure that they and their descendants can live in a more abundant and justice society. Thus government should do its best to eliminate poverty and famine and make sure its entire people can live a respected and affluent life. As a result, government should place importance on economic development.
    Additionally, the function and system of government determines that it acts effectively in short-term projects; on contrary, when it concerns such as environment preservation and academic research, government behaviors arbitrarily and irrationally. The merit of government is that it has the power to allocate limited resources and thus it is possible to concentrate resources swiftly and complete some extraordinary difficult missions in a short time. On the contrary, if the task is supposed to run in a long term and meanwhile fails to provide direct motivations, government officials seldom perform it well. It can explain why Chinese government builds railways connected to Tibet successfully, in the meanwhile, fails to protect Tibet unique animals from hunting.
    Moreover, it is the whole society’s duty to preserve nature. It might lead to a negative result, if we insist that government should focus more on environment preservation, which ordinary people acquit their responsibilities in this complicated movement. Actually, besides government, there are many ways to fulfill this goal more effectively. Large international NGOs are best leaders to provoke common people’s concern about natural protection. For example, a famous non-profit NGO called TNC, collecting money from all over the world, has already constructed 1600 animal preservation areas in America and the total acreage reaches 6 million square meters.
    It is undeniable that government should not sacrifice everything to develop economy, and to some extent it has responsible to restrict people to destroy environment. However, considering its fundamental aim and defects of its functional system, one can conclude that government should focus more on economic growth rather than economic development.

JJohnnyyUID：2991341

I concede that government has some limited responsibility to preserve environment, such as legislation and education. Even so, I believe that promoting economic development should invariably be the paramount accountability of government, especially those of developing countries
    The chief reason relies on the assumption that the fundamental aim of government is to enhance its people’s standard of life. Excluding some extreme examples, citizens abandon some instinct rights and constitute government to make sure that they and their descendants can live in a more abundant and justice society. Thus government should do its best to eliminate poverty and famine and make sure its entire people can live a respected and affluent life. As a result, government should place importance on economic development.
  Additionally, the function and system of government determines that it acts effectively in short-term projects; on contrary, when it concerns such as environment preservation and academic research, government behaviors（conduct） arbitrarily and irrationally. The merit of government is that it has the power to allocate limited resources and thus it is possible to concentrate resources swiftly and complete some extraordinary difficult missions in a short time. On the contrary, if the task is supposed to run in a long term and meanwhile fails to provide direct motivations, government officials seldom perform it well. It can explain why Chinese government builds railways connected to Tibet successfully, in the meanwhile, fails to protect Tibet unique animals from hunting.
    Moreover, it is the whole society’s duty to preserve nature. It might lead to a negative result, if we insist that government should focus more on environment preservation, which ordinary（比较习惯用common people） people acquit their responsibilities in this complicated movement. Actually, besides government, there are many ways to fulfill this goal more effectively. Large international NGOs are best leaders to provoke common people’s concern about natural protection. For example, a famous non-profit NGO called TNC, collecting money from all over the world, has already constructed 1600 animal preservation areas in America and the total acreage reaches 6 million square meters.
It is undeniable that government should not sacrifice everything（这样表达似乎有点别扭，不如sacrifice nothing） to develop economy, and to some extent it has responsible to restrict people to destroy environment. However, considering its fundamental aim and defects of its functional system, one can conclude that government should focus more on economic growth rather than economic development.

看完之后觉得有点点混乱诶。。开头最好能把观点明确的写出来，或者写在每段的开头
中间写理由说理的太抽象了， 最好能有例子支撑就好了，毕竟让改卷人也能看的更明了一些。。。
不过词汇用的很准确啊。。 感觉是词汇量很丰富的   加油

theflyfishUID：2101420

这篇写的比较随意
The purpose of television should be all educative, not entertain?

  Television should provide educative and entertaining program simultaneously.
  First, it is not always feasible to judge whether a program is educative or not because of the diversity of audience. Any attempt to distinguish programs into classes will be arbitrary and it is easy to predict the potential dissent against the category.  For instance, some people might consider a history episode, like The Tudors as educative because it utilizes famous figures and events as background and those who lack recognition of this period will feel confused and they can learn something from it. However, people who are familiar with history will consider it as purely entertaining.
  Additionally, education and relax are equally important to people, so broadcast companies should try to enrich the types of their programs to satisfy audiences’ requests. People need to acquire knowledge to compete with others in schools, to compete with others in force market, to complete works and get promotion in companies. However, in the meanwhile, they also need rest and relax to relief themselves from stress and anxiety, to keep harmonious relations with their families and colleagues. It is tedious to watch educative program all the time, especially when one intends to have some fun or transmit his motions. Consequently, Television ought to offer various programs to need all these specific needs.
  Moreover, educative and entertain are not definitely incompatible, producers and edited should create programs include both. Entertainment does not equal to dirties of Hollywood, scandals of celebrities, superficial comedies, or pornography and violent dramas. People can easily attain entertainment from regular program as well. For example, The Daily Show introduces political events of America and the world; it also enjoys the audience through profound analysis and humorous comments.
  In sum, society consists of people with various interests and tendencies, thus television should provide different kinds of programs to suit their diverse tastes.

theflyfishUID：2101420

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theflyfishUID：2101420

终于能上传附件了

WoYaoChiJiTuiUID：2850295

1.24独立已修改

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In the process of a challenging or difficult work, people often feel frustrated and discouraged, and many people fail to finish it. However, those who are strong enough to complete the work will enjoy the fruit of hardworking and feel much happier, compared to an easy one.



First, people can get more psychological satisfactory after accomplishing a challenging work. It is common that human cherish things more, if they strived to get them. In contrary(此处疑为contrast) to an easy job, a tough one requires more energy, intelligence, and diligence, and is more likely to fail. It needs a strong spirit to endure all the difficulties and last to the end. After overcoming all the barriers, survivors obtain strong confidence and self-esteem; they begin to believe themselves and are confident to continue their risks.



Additionally, difficult work often means more reward and achievements. One reason that persons tend to challenge difficult missions is that it provides huge rewards for winners. They also have chance to become famous and attain incredible power as well. Chinese athletes, Yao Ming and Liu Xiang are good examples to illustrate this point. When Yao Ming became the first Chinese to play basketball in NBA, he acquired a contract of 80
million per year and was admired by his worshippers all over the country. When Liu Xiang broke the world record of the 110m hurdles, he was acclaimed hero of China.



Moreover, people can learn useful skills and obtain valuable experience when they do a challenge（ing） work. A complicated work needs people to master a variety of skills, some of which might be totally strange to them. Some significant competences, such as cooperation with colleagues, persuasion of assenters, are also needed. As a result, people who want the work performs smoothly have to study new techniques, and cultivate their social abilities, which will guarantee them a better life in future.



In sum, people can acquire psychological satisfactory, huge rewards and valuable experience after fulfilling a tough work, thus they might feel happier than they finish a simple one.


Good job! you've proven your position with good details and examples.
找了半天 实在问题不大。

theflyfishUID：2101420

1月26日独立
这篇文章没写完，只写了第一个观点（无法简单的判断是否是negative impact），但字数太多了，后面2个观点就没继续写。如果修改的同学感到文章思路混乱，那实在是不好意思。

wtl_wtl221912UID：2682919

1.25抱歉昨天不在，今天改完了不上
整体不错，逻辑再屡屡

charlieqcUID：2990355

13# theflyfish
大大的文章比TOFEL 某些 Reading 的逻辑清晰多了~~
O(∩_∩)O哈哈~改好啦~~