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8月15日 20100918NA Do you agree or disagree with the following statement: The effective leader tries to make others feel they have been part of a decision.

In this competitive society,the team work has become more important gradually. The leader is the soul of a team, some of them claim that everyone in the same team should all make contribution to making decisions, while the opposite opinion is still held by some others. However , I consider that a leader won’t be proved predominant and efficient without letting everyone who participates in making decisions realize that they are all a part of it.

It’s a good way for conductors to be proved efficient that they lead a team to make splendid progress on a project. And obviously ensuring teammates being responsible for the course of making resolution and the final result. For instance, there was an art troupe that was going to attend a competition in my school. But the leader was only an eight-grade-girl and didn't know what to perform. So she devided girls into 4 groups and let them to come up with 4 differnet ideas and make a final decision according to their performance. And then the members all agreed on a show and soon began to rehearse. The girls all knew that they are the decisive part of that result so they prepared for the shows very carefully. At last, they reached a great success and the leader of the art troupe who made wise decisions was considered as a effecitve student with great art of guidance. So it is no doubt that making teammates realize the importance of themselves of a decision can help to make the result easier to be received, which can prove the ability of the leader clearly.

And sometimes if the leaders act in an arbitrary fashion, don't even consider about the
thoughts of other people who also pariticipate in making decision, their result which is decided finally can’ t be widely received and carried out. And the leaders’ ability would be doubt and they would also get a shaking status meanwhile. Let’s suppose a situation that a leader claims that he is the decisive point in the decision,maybe he sometimes takes in others’ suggestion but seldom put himself with others equally. So his men don't even consider that they are a member of the team which is meant to make an important decision and find out it seems that it’s none of their business. Then nobody would put his heart into it and make contribution to this whole team.if that happens, who will think the leader is a predominant and effective one? I claim the answer would be absolutely no.


In sum,letting members feel they were playing an important role in the course of making a decision can make it easier to carry out policies. A successful leader should be not only wise but also knowing how to make full use of the artistry of leadership which can make him or her more effective.
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发表于 2011-8-15 22:01:42 |只看该作者
多说几句 升级发附件~~~

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发表于 2011-8-16 01:39:57 |只看该作者
2# xu8431

hey我是今天给你改独立的
加油!
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发表于 2011-8-16 08:51:00 |只看该作者
谢谢啊

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发表于 2011-8-16 09:00:01 |只看该作者
改的很认真,水平也高。:lol

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发表于 2011-8-16 20:36:10 |只看该作者
8月16日  独立

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发表于 2011-8-16 22:47:12 |只看该作者
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发表于 2011-8-17 17:34:39 |只看该作者
8-16的独立已修改
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发表于 2011-8-17 20:50:19 |只看该作者
8月17日 独立

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发表于 2011-8-17 21:53:45 |只看该作者
8月15日的
不好意思改晚了
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发表于 2011-8-17 23:14:29 |只看该作者
10# 愤怒公爵


我很弱啊,花了我90分钟啊.但我特认真,谢谢你啊.

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发表于 2011-8-18 01:06:38 |只看该作者
昨天有点事没来的及改。。。今天上午应该可以然后中午给你传吧 见谅了

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发表于 2011-8-18 11:14:36 |只看该作者
8月16日20101017NA Do you agree or disagree, it is better to relax by watching amovie or reading a book than by doing physical exercise.

In this competitive society,people get much pressure from all directions and more easily become tired sometimes(are more easily tired some imes). The ideas on how to relax vary from person to person. Some would claim that watching movies and reading books are both good ways, while some others may suggest the way that doing sports has more benefits and I consider that doing exercise does help us reduce pressure as the below reasons show.

First of all, taking some physical activities is wholesome to our health while watching films and reading books can’t(与前面对应) . People can take in fresh air and breathe out the waste in their bodies by doing aerobics such as weightlifting and yoga. However,a person who is relaxing by watching a film or reading a novel,no matter where he or she sit,is kind of static somewhere and doesn't move very much. Most of doctors agree on that doing proper exercise can not only help handle stress but also leads to a healthier heart. While(while是介词 这里用but 或者 however或者 by contrast好些) people can’t get good blood circulation when reading with a mostly still pose which incumbers them reducing pressure. Therefore, doing physical exercise could benefit our health in order to relax ourselves better.

Second, exercise is proper and convenient for children and adults ,poor or rich,male or famale, to relax themselves because of it’s sundry and very easy to be done. (of后面接从句有问题)You need to buy a ticket, stand the horrible net speed or spend several hours downloading a movie if you want to see one. Nobody would consider that as a way to help relax or decompress. While if you would like to do some physical acitivities,you can start almost everywhere that you want without any stupid tickets or special equipment. For instance, if it’s a sunny day,you could go out for a walk or playing ballgames with golden sunshine,which would release your stress in a moment,spread on your body. And also you could stay at home do some yoga if it’s raining outside. So when you are doing exercise to reduce pressure, you can be in happiness and relaxation without any worry.

Last but not least, sometimes people can’t get absolute relaxation by movie or book. Take my friend Betty as an example, she is a excellent student with wise thoughts. And she told me she wanted to decompress before the final exam so she decided to watch a horror film called Hotel
that night. But unfortunately, after seeing that she got very nervous and worried about everything around her in the bedroom and even couldn't sleep well the whole night. As a result, she got bad marks in this final exam. It’s pretty a shame and we should all realize that some movies and books are the carriers of emotional stuff sometimes with various stories which could prevent us from reducing pressure and getting relaxed. However,doing exercise is actually a good way to relax ourselves because there is almost no side effect.


Stress is a huge byproduct of our busy daily life and it takes a tremendous toll on our health. We should take the proper measures to deal with that. And in my opinion, doing exercise , whether outdoor or indoor,is really the best and most helpful way to get fantastic relaxation. As the saying goes , “keep moving and you will gain every sweet fruit in the garden.”

写的不错 用了很多高级词语
小的地方有些语法和单词错误

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本帖最后由 xu8431 于 2011-8-18 23:25 编辑

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发表于 2011-8-18 21:46:17 |只看该作者
额 while 有四种词性好吧 - -

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