8.27. Narashy 作文

NarashyUID: 2602795

Friends mean a lot to us in our daily life. They share the joy of your success, they stand by
your side when you're upset, they spare no effort to help you when you're caught into trubles. All of these makes friends vital as well as the way you treat them. We often face the dilemma that whether we should tell a friend that he or she is making a mistake. Some hold the view that we should just let them make it and not take the risk of destroying the friendship while the others believe that we should tell them to prevent further mistakes. With all aspects carefully considered, I would rather take the latter one.

Some people think that avoid telling friends the truth is quite reasonable. They insist that we should show care and concern about our friends' feeling and never try to hurt or upset them. Telling the truth may enrage their friend and even lost the friendship. This seems applausible, however, what they do acctually further advance the mistake their friend are making. Their friend will never know that he or she is just making a mistake and continue to make it probably. This can certainly do harm to the friendship. Telling our friends the truth is a kind of responsiblity that we should take, we should not just let it be, just like the doctor should not let the patient be sick.

We should not hide the fact to our friend, but this is only part of the reality. More attention should be paid on the way we express it. Many ways exist when we want to convey the same thing, some of which may lead a agreement while others can cause hazard on friendship. Usually, we should avoid telling the truth directly but try to express it explicitly and let our friend know. For instance, a little cough reminds to stop smoking in dormitory. With your feelings expressed, I think a true friend is willing to take your advice and make some changes.
In conclusion, I agree with the point that we should let our friends know they're making a mistake and we should try to express it gently, trying not to hurt them.

gy0510150556UID: 2546647

Friends mean a lot to us in our daily life. They share the joy of your success, they stand by your side when you're upset, they spare no effort to help you when you're caught into troubles. All of these makes friends vital as well as the way you treat them. We often face the dilemma that whether we should tell a friend that he or she is making a mistake. Some hold the view that we should just let them make it and not take the risk of destroying the friendship while others believe that we should tell them to prevent further mistakes（后面加上即使友情破裂）. With all aspects carefully considered, I would rather take the latter one. （缺个主题句）Some people think that avoid telling friends the truth is quite reasonable. They insist that we should show care and concern about our friends' feeling and never try to hurt or upset them. Telling the truth may enrage their friend and even lost（lose） the friendship. This seems applausible, however, what they do acctually further advance（advance有使发展进步的意思，不妥，用accelerate） the mistakes their friend are making. Their friend will never know that he or she is just making a mistake and continue to make it probably. (加:他们一旦发现，并被错误伤害时，会怨恨我们不早说)This can certainly do harm to the friendship. Telling our friends the truth is a kind of responsiblity that we should take, we should not just let it be, just like the doctor should not let the patient be sick.没说：我们指出朋友的错误会破坏友情这一方面，应指出即使是这样的代价也是值得的 . V4 t3 ^6 y2 G2 _* v3 e) h7  j$ E 3 b# y+ y  q$ Y: l0 {: s% [5 c. G We should not hide the fact to our friend, but this is only part of the reality（？现实，换成process怎么样）. More attention should be paid on the way we express it. Many ways exist when we want to convey the same thing, some of which may lead to an agreement while others can cause hazard on friendship. Usually, we should avoid telling the truth directly but try to express it explicitly（反了，implicitly） and let our friend know. For instance, a little cough reminds to stop smoking in dormitory. With your feelings expressed, I think a true friend is willing to take your advice and make some changes(change中性词，用improvements).% ~( s9 x% G0 R9 f0 x+ i In conclusion, I agree with the point that we should let our friends know they're making a mistake and we should try to express it gently, trying not to hurt them. 文章很不错，显示了楼主的功底，赫赫，文笔很流畅，限时作文已经很不错了，注意主题句以及举例。

liuxiaoyinUID: 2631993

Friends mean a lot to us in our daily life. They share the joy of your success, they stand by your side when you're upset, they spare no effort to help you when you're caught into trubles. All of these makes(make) friends vital as well as the way you treat them. We often face the dilemma that whether we should tell a friend that he or she is making a mistake. Some hold the view that we should just let them make it and not take the risk of destroying the friendship while the others believe that we should tell them to prevent further mistakes. With all aspects carefully considered, I would rather take the latter one.
感觉首段有点长，你看要不要删减一下。
句首加一句论点，最好有逻辑词。Some people think that avoiding telling friends the truth is quite reasonable. They insist that we should show care and concern about our friends' feeling and never try to hurt or upset them. Telling the truth may enrage their friend and even lost the friendship. This seems applausible, however, what they do acctually further advance the mistake their friend are making. Their friend will never know that he or she is just making a mistake and continue to make it probably. This can certainly do harm to the friendship. Telling our friends the truth is a kind of responsiblity that we should take, we should not just let it be, just like the doctor should not let the patient be sick.

We should not hide the fact to our friend, but this is only part of the reality. More attention should be paid on the way we express it. Many ways exist when we want to convey the same thing, some of which may lead to an agreement while others can cause hazard on friendship. Usually, we should avoid telling the truth directly but try to express it explicitly and let our friend know. For instance, a little cough reminds to stop smoking in dormitory. With your feelings expressed, I think a true friend is willing to take your advice and make some better changes.
In conclusion, I agree with the point that we should let our friends know they're making a mistake and we should try to express it gently, trying not to hurt them.
有点虎头蛇尾的感觉，结尾太短了，而且中间的论证也不是很充分。加点例子啥的都好，最重要的是感觉你的文章有点欠缺逻辑和分论点。文章很流畅，写作功底不错~~~~~

ly8768UID: 2452066

Friends mean a lot to us in our daily life. They share the joy of your success, they stand by your side when you're upset, they spare no effort to help you when you're caught into trubles(trouble). All of these makes(make) friends vital as well as the way you treat them. We often face the dilemma that whether we should tell a friend that he or she is making a mistake. Some hold the view that we should just let them make it and not take the risk of destroying the friendship while the others believe that we should tell them to prevent further mistakes. With all aspects carefully considered, I would rather take the latter one.

Some people think that avoid telling friends the truth is quite reasonable. They insist that we should show care and concern about our friends' feeling and never try to hurt or upset them. Telling the truth may enrage their friend and even lost the friendship. This seems applausible, however, what they do acctually further advance the mistake their friend are making. Their friend will never know that he or she is just making a mistake and continue to make it probably. This can certainly do harm to the friendship. Telling our friends the truth is a kind of responsiblity that we should take, we should not just let it be, just like the doctor should not let the patient be sick.

We should not hide the fact to our friend, but this is only part of the reality. More attention should be paid on the way we express it. Many ways exist when we want to convey the same thing, some of which may lead a agreement while others can cause hazard on friendship. Usually, we should avoid telling the truth directly but try to express it explicitly and let our friend know. For instance, a little cough reminds to stop smoking in dormitory. With your feelings expressed, I think a true friend is willing to take your advice and make some changes.

In conclusion, I agree with the point that we should let our friends know they're making a mistake and we should try to express it gently, trying not to hurt them.

1 第二段的中心句不明确，一上来讲了太多的反面观点
2 第二段有they，
又有we显得太混乱了
3 第三段，你的意思可以讲真话却不伤害友情，但是这个和题目意思想违背了。
4 注意错别字