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Test6 - Integrated Writing 6
The lecture refutes all three reasons that bolster the reading material's theme. The professor argues that the reasons the reading give for the transition from cottage industry to the factory industry is not convincing.

First, the professor points out that at the early stage of factory industry, the advanced technology, such as stream engine, is still in experimental state and the major force of factory industry is hiring more workers. So the validity of the reading's reason is in doubt.

Second, contradicting what is stated in the reading that establishment of a stronger legal protection for private property promotes this transition, the professor gives a example of holland, where the legal protection also established but cottage industry was not replaced.

Finally, the professor states that replace cottage industry to factory industry might not reduce the costs which is mentioned in the reading passage. She argues that, although the cost of materials' distribution can be saved, there are extra costs, such as land, building, hiring supervisors. This directly contradicts the reading passage.

As mentioned above, it's easy to make a summary that what states in the reading is in doubt.
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发表于 2009-9-2 19:18:45 |只看该作者
Test6 - Topic 25

It is always enjoyable to watch a wonderful performance. Some people prefer to attend a live one where he may feel more realistic and have more mutual communication with the actor or actress while other people enjoy watching the event on television by which he could save the cost for the tickets. With all aspects carefully considered, I would prefer the former.

Although watching performance on TV can save the cost of tickets, a really good performance definitely worths it.
I still remember in 2001, when Chinese football team were taking part in the qualification of 2002 Koreanjapan worldcup. Tens of thousands of fans rushed for limited tickets, they believed that those competition were really special because Chinese team got the best chance to enter the Final Stage which should not be missed, although they could just stayed at home and watch TV.

In a live performance, I can enjoy the performance more freely. You may have the experience that while you're watching a exciting performance but the angle that the TV gives is really limited, where you can not see the whole. However, while you are in a live auditorium or concert, you can see every aspects of the performance. This can not be achieved if you were sitting before the TV.

Finally, attending a live performance, I would be able to make do many mutual communication with the actor or even make friends with the people who share the same love for this show. It is an amazing moment that all the audience sing together with the actor, which leads me cry. However, if I were watching that from TV, I probably can not have the same emotion.

To sum up, it's really worthy to spend some money to attend a live performance. You can realse your emotion, have communications with the actor, audience and enjoy the performace more.

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发表于 2009-9-2 22:36:12 |只看该作者
9.12作文??什么意思嘞...?

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发表于 2009-9-3 11:07:06 |只看该作者
The lecture refutes all three reasons that bolster the reading material's theme. The professor argues that the reasons the reading give-->gives for the transition from cottage industry to the factory industry is not convincing.

First, the professor points out that at the early stage of factory industry, the advanced technology, such as stream engine, is still in experimental state and the major force of factory industry is hiring more workers. So the validity of the reading's reason is in doubt. 干净利落的

cond, contradicting what is stated in the reading that establishment of a stronger legal protection for private property promotes this transition, the professor gives a example of holland, where the legal protection also established but cottage industry was not replaced. 这点我听的不对, 丢人啊..

ally, the professor states that replace cottage industry to factory industry might not reduce the costs which is mentioned in the reading passage. She argues that, although the cost of materials' distribution can be saved, there are extra costs, such as land, building, hiring supervisors. This directly contradicts the reading passage.

As mentioned above, it's easy to make a summary that what states in the reading is in doubt.很好的, 点都说到位, 句子也很紧密的. 没什么语法问题

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发表于 2009-9-4 10:45:25 |只看该作者
抱歉这么晚才评阿,昨天忙了一堆事,晚上10点半又要赶班车回去...现在补上。老实讲没什么可改的,你的作文写得很棒!

The lecture refutes all three reasons that bolster the reading material's theme. The professor argues that the reasons the reading gives for the transition from cottage industry to the factory industry is(are) not convincing.
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First, the professor points out that at the early stage of factory industry, the advanced technology, such as stream engine, is still in experimental state and the major force of factory industry is hiring more workers. So the validity of the reading's reason is in doubt.(Reasoning简洁有力,学习!)



Second, contradicting what is stated in the reading that establishment of a stronger legal protection for private property promotes this transition, the professor gives a example of holland, where the legal protection also established but cottage industry was not replaced. (让我无比怨念的Holland~,你们的听力太牛了)



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Finally, the professor states that replace cottage industry to factory industry might not reduce the costs which is mentioned in the reading passage. She argues that, although the cost of materials' distribution can be saved, there are extra costs, such as cost of land, building, hiring supervisors. This directly contradicts the reading passage.

As mentioned above, it's easy to make a summary that what stated in the reading are in doubt.
你的句子结构很不错,看着很舒服,学习学习!

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