2009 进军美利坚作文组 wondersmiths2第十六次作业 9.3

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9.3 是否同意，年長的朋友的建議比同年紀小的 advice 要valuable
What kind of friends do you like to ask for advice when you are in trouble, elder ones or young ones? Some people may hold the view that elder friends can give us more valuable advice than young ones, while others may differ. In my opinion, however, it is wiser to obtain young friends' advice in modern life.

To begin with, it is widely accepted that young friends' advice mostly are more creative and effective than elder friends'. For instance, suppose that you ask people whose age are between forty and fifty that in which way do they learn English, the answer mostly should be to buy textbook and rote the words. However, if you ask the same question to young people, they will tell you tons of ways to learn English, including online courses, chat room or other sources which old people never think about. Besides, the ways given by young people can enable you to absorb knowledge more easily then before.

Moreover, no one can deny that it can keep you up to date if you keep a good relationship with young friends and taking advice from them is a excellent way to interact with them. In this rapidly developing society, elder people sometimes like to keep doing things in old ways and never want to have some changes so that to some degree they cannot catch up with the progress of society. On the other hand, young adults or children often prefer to take advantage of any chance to use new things such as iphone, twitter or something interesting. Hence, if you keep in touch with those people and often ask them advice for your issues, you will never lag behind the society.

Of course, it should be admitted that sometimes young people's advice are more risky and elder people are more experienced than young people. However, it is better for us to have some different experience or adventures because time is brief and people should make a difference in their life.

In conclusion, although elder people maybe have abundant experience which young people do not have, young people possess more valuable things such as creative and updated. Therefore, I am convinced that young people's advices are more valuable.

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It is no doubt that elder friends have more experience and young friends have more creative ideas. So whose advice do you prefer to take? It is a thorny issue for someone because usually you cannot predict what will happen after you make an important decision. In my opinion, however, the answer of the question is that it should depend on different circumstances.

If the problems people are confronted with are mostly related to experience or conventional, then it is better to take elder friends' advice. For instance, suppose that you will hold a traditional wedding ceremony, you definitely ask suggestions from your elder friends because of the experience possessed by them. In contrast, if you take advice from young people, maybe that will destroy the atmosphere of the traditional wedding for the cause of the lack of related experience. Hence, for those issues such as traditional culture, marriage and life experience, elder friends' advices are more valuable.

On the other hand, when people turn to friends for help about the problems on the topic of modern technology or lifestyle, they mostly should be aware of the opinions from young friends because old methods usually do not work well at this situation. For example, you want to build up a personal business website to sale your products. It is not surprising that elder people know less about the information technology for that cause of rapidly development of technology and the old ways they prefer. Mostly young people can provide some brilliant ideas for you to grab more attentions from customers. So, for the cases which need more creative and new suggestions, young friends' advice should be attached more significance.

In conclusion, under most circumstances, young friends' advices are more fresh and risky and elder friends' advices are more conventional and thoughtful. Therefore, facing different issues, people should put more value on the advice which can really help them out depending on different conditions.

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In conclusion, under most circumstances, young friends' advices are more fresh and risky and elder friends' advices are more conventional and thoughtful. Therefore, facing different issues, people should put more value on the advice which can really help them out depending on different conditions.

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