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发表于 2009-9-5 21:54:18 |显示全部楼层
Angeral, one of the most influential column writers says that The primary purpose of education is not to teach you to earn bread, but to make every mouthful sweet. I totally agree with her words. Thus I am very worried about the opinion that teachers only need to have good professional knowledge since there are many factors are much more important than professional knowledge such as a good relationship with students. My reasons are as followed.

To begin with, a good relationship can help teachers improve their teaching efficiency. We all know that if students have good impression on their teachers, they tend to be work harder, concentrate their attention more and finish their homework in advance. On the other hand, if students heat their professors both of the two sides will get hurt. For example, my teacher English teacher in my senior high school is very unpopular in my class even if he is graduated in the Peking which is the most famous university in China and has a large number of papers published in famous magazine. He can't take good advantage of his academic ability in his teaching result from no one listening to him. As a result, our whole class encounters a terrible failure.

What's more, only teachers get alone well with students can they guide students in their growth and help them build the healthy character. Nowadays, students spend more time in school with their teacher instead of their parents, so their teachers have a tremendous influence on them. We Chinese people even respect teachers as our parents. A good teacher may help us avoid making some mistakes and lay the foundation of our future. For example, my sister who was so shy that she can't talk with other students beyond two minutes often felt very lonely and her academic perform was also poor. Fortunately her tutor who was a very kind and patient person became her first friend and brought her brave to step out her isolate world.

In a word, I claim that a good relationship between teachers and students has tremendous advantages in respect that it not only contributes to a more effective teaching but also help students in their growth and character building.

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发表于 2009-9-7 00:33:23 |显示全部楼层
本帖最后由 wondersmiths2 于 2009-9-7 00:34 编辑

Angeral, one of the most influential column writers says that” The primary purpose of education is not to teach you to earn bread, but to make every mouthful sweet.” I totally agree with her words. Thus I am very worried about the opinion that teachers only need to have good professional knowledge since there are many factors are much more important than professional knowledge such as a good relationship with students. My reasons are as followed(follow).

To begin with, a good relationship can help teachers improve their teaching efficiency. We all know that if students have good impression on their teachers, they tend to be work harder, concentrate their attention more and finish their homework in advance. On the other hand, if students heat their professors both of the two sides will get hurt. For example, my teacher English teacher in my senior high school is very unpopular in my class even if he is graduated in the Peking (University) which is the most famous university in China and has(这里可能在语法上有点问题因为前面没有用标点) a large number of papers published in famous magazine. He can't take good advantage of his academic ability in his teaching result (results) from no one listening to him. As a result,(这个感觉与上面的result有点重,可以改为eventually, 或者,Not surprisingly ) our whole class encounters a terrible failure.

What's more,(感觉这个多用于口语) only teachers get alone(along) well with students can they guide students in their growth and help them build the healthy character. Nowadays, students spend more time in school with their teacher instead of their parents, so their teachers have a tremendous influence on them. We Chinese people even respect teachers as our parents. A good teacher may help us avoid making some mistakes and lay the foundation of our future. For example, my sister who was so shy that she can't talk with other students beyond two minutes often felt very lonely and her academic perform (performance) was also poor. Fortunately her tutor who was a very kind and patient person became her first friend and brought her brave ( courage and guts是不是好一些) to step out her isolate world.

In a word, I claim that a good relationship between teachers and students has tremendous advantages in respect that it not only contributes to a more effective teaching but also help (
helps) students in their growth and character (
personality 比较好吧) building.

总体很好,思路很清晰,例子也很充分,注意一些小细节。

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发表于 2009-9-7 14:24:54 |显示全部楼层
Angeral, one of the most influential column writers says that The primary purpose of education is not to teach you to earn bread, but to make every mouthful sweet. I totally agree with her words. Thus I am very worried about the opinion that teachers only need to have good professional knowledge since there are many factors are much more important than professional knowledge such as a good relationship with students. My reasons are as followed.  w! `8 F2 v* N+ p( G( K* U

To begin with, a good relationship can help teachers improve their teaching efficiency. We all know that if students have good impression on their teachers, they tend to be(\) work harder, concentrate their attention more and finish their homework in advance. On the other hand, if students heat their professors both of the two sides will get hurt(看不懂). For example, my teacher English teacher in my senior high school is very unpopular in my class even if he is graduated in the Peking which is the most famous university in China and has a large number of papers published in famous magazine. He can't take good advantage of his academic ability in his teaching result from(语意模糊) no one listening to him. As a result(怎么又结果了), our whole class encounters a terrible failure.

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What's more, only teachers get alone well with students can they guide students in their growth and help them build the healthy character. Nowadays, students spend more time in school with their teacher instead of their parents, so their teachers have a tremendous influence on them. We Chinese people even respect teachers as our parents. A good teacher may help us avoid making some mistakes and lay the foundation of our future. For example, my sister who was so shy that she can't talk with other students beyond two minutes often felt very lonely and her academic perform was also poor. Fortunately her tutor who was a very kind and patient person became her first friend and brought her brave(courage) to step out her isolate world.

In a word, I claim that a good relationship between teachers and students has tremendous advantages in respect that it not only contributes to a more effective teaching but also help students in their growth and character building.

最好能避免words重复;写完后再检查一遍语法和通顺感。
9.12 上帝保佑~~

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发表于 2009-9-8 13:23:09 |显示全部楼层
O(∩_∩)O谢谢,我也9.12考,一起加油 3# arimidy

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O(∩_∩)O谢谢,受益匪浅~~~~ 2# wondersmiths2

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