9-11 作文-LUke_003

luke_003UID: 2660230

The professor in the leture of course donot believe that stripes of zebras play a specially roal in protecting then from predators.She provided us with her opinions in three aspects which are contrary to the points illustrated in the reading passage.
  First of all,it is doutful that the vertical stripes on zebras create optical illusion,according to the professor,for it is not so difficulty for lions catching zebras,no matter if they are smaller that they really are,which will make the zebras easy targets.
Also,predators will not be confused easilly by  zebra's stripes blended together,scince predators are not eye-depended animals, and there are also other clues ,for intances the smell relased by the zebras, which can be detected by the predators.
Finally,merging with the environment isn't the main factor for zebras escapiing from the predators.Zebras will run as fast as possible in order to flee away,totally ignoring the environment which may be helpful for hiding.
To sum up,the professor managed to agrue that stripes of zebras do no good for the protection of themselves by proving the three points made in the reading passage unblieveable.

goback211UID: 2419259

The professor in the leture of course donotbelieve that stripes of zebras play a specially(special就可以) roalin protecting then from predators. She provided(一般用现在时) us with her opinions in three aspects which are contrary to thepoints illustrated in the reading passage.
First of all, it is doutful that the vertical stripes on zebras create opticalillusion, according to the professor(passage吧), for it is not so difficulty for lions catching zebras, no matterif they are smaller that they really are, which will make the zebras easytargets.（理由没说清，看看听了原文吧）
Also, predators will not be confused easilly by  zebra's stripes blendedtogether, scince predators are not eye-dependedanimals, and there are also other clues ,for intancesthe smell relased by the zebras, which can bedetected by the predators.
Finally, merging with the environment isn'tthe main factor for zebras escapiing from thepredators. Zebras will run as fast as possible in order to flee away, totallyignoring the environment which may be helpful for hiding.
To sum up, the professor managed to agrue that stripes of zebras do no good for theprotection of themselves by proving the three points made in the readingpassage unblieveable.
注意单词拼写，还有标点前的空格，写完之后放到word里看看吧，感觉细节太少了，能再多点就好了

luke_003UID: 2660230

9月15日作业
Although the perspectives of people toward the value of life in china have changed a lot, yet different people may come up with various altitudes about the topic. In my point of view, whether a person sticks to his or her career only in one apartment denpens  on his or her personality and opportunity.
For the first thing, I assert that personality plays a significant role in one’s decision of changing a new job.Take my uncle for example, he processed an perfect job in the administration of my hometown which provided him with affluent salary and comfortable working atmosphere.However, he chose to abandon it in order to pursue his dream of being a manager of his own company,for he is a adventurous person and refuses to do the boring work day and night,which is why he made a big change to his career. Fortunately,he succeeded and became a real manager of soft ware company.So I quite believe that one can make a difference easily in the dynamic of his personality.But for those who are satisfactory with the status he is processing will feel better to live unchangeable.
For another, opportunity is also an important factor when one is thinking of hunting a new job. Not everyone can grasp the perfect opportunity even if there is one. Yanglan,a famous TV hoster in CCTV once had a chance to further her education in America when her career was in the best stage. She took the precise opportunity seriously and made a best use of it ,even if giving up her job,and finally she became a one of the most successful women in Chinese TV talk show program, which is due to the choose she made when she was young. In contrary,some people failed in their futher just because they missed the most significant opportunity in their lives. So chance is usually paid more attention when talking about if one should make a change to his or her career, and if there is one,it is better to fight for,in my opinion.
T sum up, personali and opportunity are two elements which account for the final decision one can make to change his career or stick to it, which is also one of the reasons why different people process different ,but colorful lives.

ly8768UID: 2452066

3# luke_003

Although the perspectives of people toward the value of life(应该是work吧) in china have changed a lot, yet different people may come up with various altitudes about the topic(什么topic要说清楚). In my point of view, whether a person sticks to his or her career only in one apartment(apartment没有公司的意思吧) denpens(depends)  on his or her personality and opportunity.

For the first thing, I assert that personality plays a significant role in one’s decision of changing a new job. Take my uncle for example, he processed an perfect job in the administration of my hometown which provided him with affluent salary and comfortable working atmosphere. However, he chose to abandon it in order to pursue his dream of being a manager of his own company, for he is a adventurous person and refuses to do the boring work day and night, which is why he made a big change to his career. Fortunately(用幸运的不合适吧), he succeeded and became a real manager of soft ware company. So I quite believe that one can make a difference easily in the dynamic of his personality(in，可以这样用?). But for those who are satisfactory with the status he is processing will feel better to live unchangeable(在这里说这句话没什么用吧，后面连个解释都没给).

For another, opportunity is also an important factor when one is thinking of(think of 是想起的意思) hunting a new job. Not everyone can grasp the perfect opportunity even if there is one(和是否在一家公司长期工作没关系). Yanglan, a famous TV hoster(host) in CCTV once had a chance to further her education in America when her career was in the best stage. She took the precise opportunity seriously and made a best use of it, even if giving up her job, and finally she became a one of the most successful women in Chinese TV talk show program, which is due to the choose she made when she was young. In contrary(有in contrary to), some people failed in their futher(further是形容词) just because they missed the most significant opportunity in their lives. So chance is usually paid more attention when talking about if one should make a change to his or her career, and if there is one, it is better to fight for, in my opinion.

感觉你写跑题了，和论点是否坚持在一家公司工作，你主要在写，把握机会是否会成功

T sum up, personali(personality) and opportunity are two elements which account for the final decision one can make to change his career or stick to it, which is also one of the reasons why different people process different ,but colorful lives.

错别字和错误的语法较多，需要改正

gy0510150556UID: 2546647

Although the perspectives of people toward the value of life in china have changed a lot, yet different people may come up with (提出态度不妥吧)various altitudes about the topic. In my point of view, whether a person sticks to his or her career only in one apartment（apartment很中式） denpends  on his or her personality and opportunity.. Y  g

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For the first thing, I assert that personality plays a significant role in one’s decision of changing a new job.Take my uncle for example, he processed an perfect job in the administration of my hometown which provided him with affluent salary and comfortable working atmosphere.However, he chose to abandon it in order to pursue his dream of being a manager of his own company,for he is a adventurous person and refuses to do the boring work day and night,which（你跟我学到坏毛病了，哈哈，长句啊，太长了，断一下，如that is why） is why he made a big change to his career. Fortunately,he succeeded and became a real manager of soft ware company.So I quite believe that one can make a difference easily in the dynamic of his personality.But for those who are satisfactory with the status he is processing will feel better to live unchangeable.

For another, opportunity is also an important factor when one is thinking of hunting a new job.(感觉是要批判不可能呆一个工作上，你已经假设people不干老工作了，这点跑偏了) Not everyone can grasp the perfect opportunity even if there is one. Yanglan,a famous TV hoster in CCTV once had a chance to further her education in America when her career was in the best stage. She took the precise（precious） opportunity seriously and made a best use of it ,even if giving up her job,and finally she became a one of the most successful women in Chinese TV talk show program, which is due to the choose(choice) she made when she was young. In contrary,some people failed in their futher just because they missed the most significant opportunity in their lives. So chance is usually paid more attention when talking about if one should make a change to his or her career, and if there is one,it is better to fight for,in my opinion.你的文字功底很牛，写的是越来越流畅了
T sum up, personali and opportunity are two elements which account for the final decision one can make to change his career or stick to it, which is also one of the reasons why different people process different ,but colorful lives.
旸旸说咱俩都写跑了，都太主观了，我的准备改成新时代，在大环境下，由于人们主观意识的改变，导致了这事不可能，只能这么写了
你的是假设能改，然后两个因素可以促进这改变，好像不行，赫赫，可以发站内短信，讨论下

luke_003UID: 2660230

9月17日，写了近一个小时，~~~
As we all know, people in different ages share different outlooks toward life. Hardly could we deny that the young nowadays live a colorful and a kind adventurous life, and we should also admit that the old have their own lifestyles. So it is hard for me to conclude that the young enjoy life more better than the old, and no the contrary,I prefer to the perspective that both young and old people can enjoy their favorite life,and It is nonsense to argue which one is better.
Life for young people is full of dreams and curiosity, which has both advantages and disadvantages. First of all,the young who are more energetic than the old usually process more opportunities in their life. For example, they can plan their future careers ,pursue the true love and try something fashionable and adventurous in their following life. To that extent, comparing to the old generation, they could be considered to holding more materials to success. However,everything has two sides.Lacking in affluent experiences and mature thoughts,young people hardly avoid making mistake and inevitable failure in their life time,which sometimes even destroy their life, not mention the chance to enjoy it.
With the development of the society, life of old people has changed a lot.When I recall my grandfather, an image that an old man sitting in front of the gate of my home didn’t even utter a word for one day just appears in my mind,which inform me of the word,loneiless.So no one can deny that old people who is experiencing such a lonely life enjoy a better life than the young.However, you can never tell this in the changeable world now. Look at our old generation in urban and even rural areas in China, they really enjoy their life when go walking with their grandsons, dancing together in the park near their home,participanting in some physical exercises, and even managing some valuable clubs for the old. So how dare I believe that young people enjoy life more better old people.
To sum up, hardly can we decide what kind of way is the best, when facing the problem of lifestyle-choosing,for people’s altitudes vary in different generations. In spite of the vast gap between them on outlooks, both the young and the old can live a wonderful life in this world.

我是chineseladyUID: 2662783

As we all know, people in different ages share different outlooks toward life. Hardly could we deny that the young nowadays live a colorful and a kind of adventurous life, and we should also admit that the old have their own lifestyles. So it is hard for me to conclude that the young enjoy life more better than the old, and no the contrary,I prefer to the perspective that both young and old people can enjoy their favorite life,and It is nonsense-->unreasonable to argue which one is better

Life for young people is full of dreams and curiosity, which has both advantages and disadvantages. First of all,the young who are more energetic than the old usually process more opportunities in their life. For example, they can plan their future careers ,pursue the true love-->老人有黄昏恋嘿嘿 and try something fashionable and adventurous in their following life. To that extent, comparing to the old generation, they could be considered to holding more materials to success-->怎么个意思. However,everything has two sides.Lacking in affluent experiences and mature thoughts,young people hardly avoid making mistake and inevitable failure in their life time,which sometimes even destroy their life, not mention the chance to enjoy it. With the development of the society, life of old people has changed a lot.When I recall-->过去式好吧 my grandfather, an image that an old man sitting in front of the gate of my home didn’t even utter a word for one day just appears in my mind--->>an image appears into my mind that...,which inform-->informs me of the word,loneiless.So no one can deny that old people who is experiencing such a lonely life enjoy a better life than the young.However, you can never tell this in the changeable world now. Look at our old generation in urban and even rural areas in China, they really enjoy their life when go walking with their grandsons, dancing together in the park near their home,participanting in some physical exercises, and even managing some valuable clubs for the old-->even there are some clubs, designed for the old. So how dare I believe that young people enjoy life more better old people.

To sum up, hardly can we decide what kind of way is the best, when facing the problem of lifestyle-choosing,for people’s altitudes vary in different generations. In spite of the vast gap between them on outlooks, both the young and the old can live a wonderful life in this world.中性观点很新颖的. 写的时候都超时,别急慢慢就习惯了..

ppbboUID: 2537437

不错 学习了
As we all know, people in different ages share different outlooks toward life. Hardly could we deny that the young nowadays live a colorful and a kind adventurous life, and we should also admit that the old have their own lifestyles. So it is hard for me to conclude that the young enjoy life more （？）better than the old, and no the contrary,I prefer to the perspective that both young and old people can enjoy their favorite life,and It is nonsense to argue which one is better.0 t' @# d/ Q. m7 x6 W1 n
Life for young people is full of dreams and curiosity, which has both advantages and disadvantages. First of all,the young who are more energetic than the old usually process more opportunities in their life. For example, they can plan their future careers ,pursue the true love and try something fashionable and adventurous in their following life. To that extent, comparing to the old generation（？）, they could be considered to holding more materials to success. However,everything has two sides.Lacking in affluent experiences and mature thoughts,young people hardly avoid making mistake and inevitable failure in their life time,which sometimes even destroy their life, not mention the chance to enjoy it.4 t0 a/ T) r+ W' ]
With the development of the society, life of old people has changed a lot.When I recall my grandfather, an image that an old man sitting in front of the gate of my home didn’t even utter a word for one day just appears in my mind,which inform me of the word,loneiless.So no one can deny that old people who is experiencing such a lonely life enjoy a better life than the young.However, you can never tell this in the changeable world now. Look at our old generation in urban and even rural areas in China, they really enjoy their life when go walking with their grandsons, dancing together in the park near their home,participanting in some physical exercises, and even managing some valuable clubs for the old. So how dare I believe that young people enjoy life more better old people.  y/ Z/ r: `& T
To sum up, hardly can we decide what kind of way is the best, when facing the problem of lifestyle-choosing,for people’s altitudes vary in different generations. In spite of the vast gap between them on outlooks, both the young and the old can live a wonderful life in this world.
我怎么觉得是反面观点呢？
写得不错，特别是有了很多插入语，很灵活。有些语法的小毛病，相信读一遍就改出来了
有一点觉得不好，第二部分的论证有些无力，怎么能体现没有更enjoy呢？

今天传不了附件，也编辑不了颜色  改的一些问题粘不上去

luke_003UID: 2660230

9月22作文
When facing with the decision of our working aim for happiness or money, quite a few would deem that they work just for money, but others, in contrast, believe happiness means more value when working. From my point of view, it is more advisable to chose happiness rather than money.My arguments for this point are listed as follows.
The main reason for my propensity for happiness while working is that one cann’t work well without feeling fun.It is not wise to compromise to choose a job one dislikes, which not only decreases one’s spirit when working, but makes one fell depression towards his or her future.For instance, one of my classmates chose to work in a big company after graduation just for its high salary without any positive attitude,then he didn’t make any progress after 3 years working, since the job was not in his familiar filed ,and he just refused to take serious of what he was doing. Finally he was faired because of a stupid mistake .Whereas some of my friends,although working in an ordinary company, are enjoying their jobs and benefit a lot from their work, for they choose the appropriate careers.

The second reason can be seen by every person that money cann’t provide happiness and health with us. People nowadays attach more importance to money, totally ignoring the initial aim of our life which is happiness. Although different people in this world have various jobs, we share something in common,that is pursuing a happy and healthy life not only for ourselves,but for our parents and children. Hardly can we deem that a person lives a happy life without the loves from his or her family, even though he is a millionaire. In contrary, those who don’t have much money deserve the most admirable affluence in this world when receiving the loves and protection form his or her family.
It has to be admitted that money is important for one owning a affluent life, whereas money cannot guarantee everything to us. Comparing to a positive and optimistic attitude toward life, happiness is the first requirement for us rather money.
To sum up, happiness and money are two significant factors involving our life standard, and we work for both of them. But I will still stick to happiness, if there is only one choice for me to decide.

dusk1112UID: 2510484

luke 兄，写的很不错，果然是写的多了，一定会进步的，咱们的立意和例子都想似，但是我的就比较欠缺，你的词汇和结构比我好，例如我摘抄的From my point of view, it is more advisable to chose happiness rather than money.My arguments for this point are listed as follows.8The main reason for my propensity for happiness while working is that one cann’t work well without feeling fun
decreases one’s spirit when working For instance he just refused to take serious of what he was doing
People nowadays attach more importance to money  Hardly can we deem that a person lives a happy life without the loves from his or her family, even though he is a millionaire
To sum up, happiness and money are two significant factors involving our life standard, and we work for both of them. But I will still stick to happiness, if there is only one choice for me to decide.
有一点我想请教，倒数第二段为什么还要让步呢？这一段不要我觉得也没有什么不可以，语法错误基本上没有，有我其实也很难看出来，你看了我的作文就知道了，呵呵

luke_003UID: 2660230

9月23日作业
When facing with the question of whether offering more lands to human being is more important than to animals at the margin of extinction,quite a few would claim that they prefer to the former decision, whereas others,in contrary, deem the latter choice as the premier one and that is also my point.There are numerous reasons why I prefer to the decision of providing more areas with  animals, and I will explore only a few of the most important ones here.
To begin with,protecting animals, especially those that are going to extinct,is the responsibility of all the humanbeing. Human and animals are two members of our world family,and it is known to all that we cann’t live without other species existing on the earth, for it Is all the species,not only human being,but animals,plants that create our beautiful world.However,more and more animals face with the danger of vanishing because of the environmental pollution and endless killing caused by human beings nowadays. For example, the south Chinese tiger has already gone to extinction and the panda, such a lovely specie of our country, are still on the margin of extinction.So hardly can we imagine that panda can survive without some necessary suitable lands for them.
Futhermore,it is beneficial for us creating a harmonious and comfortable atmosphere by helping animals find a warm home. It will hinder the development of the ecosystem if more animals extinct in the future, for animals are important for the imbalance of the world ecosystem, so we cann’t have a healthy world without them. Therefore, only providing with the animals a natural and beautiful living environment, can a wonderful and harmonious world be created. Animals willnot survive without our human,and also,we human being cann’t live a happy and splendid life in the absence of these lovely animals.
Finally,although the dangers we face now are no less serious than the animals do, we can resort to various measurements, and using more lands is only one of them. In my point view, it is more significant for us to enhance the efficiency of the land-using than just invade more rare land materials.
To sum up, I prefer to protecting animals that will die out in the near future by offering them more lands,because we share the same world,and animals have the right to survive when facing with the danger of extinction.

linda_zhao2009UID: 2701071

看了Luke的作文，觉得我写的太差了：（
1，请luke抽空帮我指导一下作业
https://bbs.gter.net/viewthre ... xtra=#pid1773174290
2，我还想问问，写作刚开始入门的时候，应该看什么书，或者背诵一些什么文章吗？

非常感谢！

dusk1112UID: 2510484

luke兄，不好意思现在才来，看了你的文章，我实在是想说：咱们的观点太相似了！或者难道大家都是这么想的？我的gre作文去年练得应该说不错了，考完就忘了，因为东西跟人家的一样，才得了3分，现在都不敢用模版，但是没有模版又写不出很多东西来，你的这篇很好，又学习了，只是有些句子像是在重复
好的部分摘抄如下at the margin of extinction deem the latter choice as the premier one and that is also my point华南虎 熊猫 .There are numerous reasons why I prefer to the decision of providing more areas with  animals, and I will explore only a few of the most important ones here. Futhermore  because we share the same world,and animals have the right to survive when facing with the danger of extinction

sharamandeUID: 2597186

9月23日作业
When facing with the question of whether offering more lands to human being is more important than to animals at the margin of extinction(这个表述真不错),quite a few would claim that they prefer to the former decision, whereas others,in contrary, deem the latter choice as the premier one and that is also my point.(觉得这一句有些太长了，句子结构有些不妥，最好再改改，我水平有限也说不太清)There are numerous reasons why I prefer to(不必有to) the decision of providing more areas with  animals, and I will explore only a few of the most important ones here.

To begin with,protecting animals, especially those that are going to extinct,is the responsibility of all the humanbeing(用个复数吧，human beings). Human and animals are two members of our world family,and it is known to all that we cann’t live without other species existing(这个词不要也好) on the earth, for it Is all the species,not only human being,but animals,plants that create our beautiful world(这一句中的几个连词用的不妥，太Chinglish了).However,more and more animals face with(不要with) the danger of vanishing because of the environmental pollution and endless killing caused by human beings nowadays. For example, the south Chinese tiger has already gone to extinction and the panda, such a lovely specie of(species in) our country, are still on the margin of extinction.So hardly can we imagine that panda can survive without some necessary suitable lands for them.
Futhermore,it is beneficial for us creating(to create) a harmonious and comfortable atmosphere by helping animals find a warm home. It will hinder the development(不如改为destroy the balance) of the ecosystem if more animals extinct in the future, for animals are important for the imbalance(应该是balance吧？) of the world ecosystem, so we cann’t have a healthy world without them(这一句中先说了一个后果又说了一个原因又一个so加一个后果，有点乱). Therefore, only (少个by)providing with the animals(应该是provide sb. with sth.) a natural and beautiful living environment, can a wonderful and harmonious world be created. Animals will not survive without our human(我觉得这可不一定，人类出现之前人家动物都活的挺好的),and also,we human being cann’t live a happy and splendid life in the absence of these lovely animals.

Finally,although the dangers we face now are no(not) less serious than the animals do, we can resort to(resort to用的好！) various measurements, and using more lands is only one of them. In my point view, it is more significant for us to enhance the efficiency of the land-using than just invade more rare land materials.

To sum up, I prefer to protecting animals that will die out in the near future by offering them more lands,because we share the same world,and animals have the right to survive when facing with(不要with) the danger of extinction.