美利坚作文小组9.22

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9.22
工作为钱还是为了乐趣

People in the world work for different aims. Some work for money while some work for happiness. However, what should people work for? This question is so controversial that different people will hold different answers due to their different background experience. In my opinion, people should work for happiness rather than money.

Like everyone, I have to admit that money is an important factor while people choose their job. The most important thing for a human in the world is survival. All of us need money to pay the bills, and buy food and clothes. Without money, no one can survive. Additionally, the more money, the better life. Work is the commonest way for people to earn money. It is easy and common for people to regard money as the aim of work.

However, the fact that people need money does not necessarily indicate that people should work for money. Although it is obvious that people with more money can have better life, it does not mean that they will be happier. There is an old saying that "Money can not buy everything". Many people working for money eventually find that they have nothing but money eventually. Otherwise, there are many people choose to be volunteers to work in some poor countries. They make their decision because they know that they work for happiness.

Moreover, seldom have people who work only for money succeeded. Most successful people love their work. They love their work not because their work can bring them a lot of money but because they are happy while working. For instance, Michael Jordan, the best basketball player in the world, chose to retire when he was still in the peak because he was tired and could not find any fond from the game. I can not imagine how a person who does not love his job can  succeed.

To sum up, it is possible that people will never arrive at an agreement in such a controversial issue. Nevertheless, based on the analysis above, it is not difficult for people to conclude that we should not work for money but work for happiness.

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不好意思，我才发现我把作文贴错到你的帖子下面了。。。

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9.24
The best way to travel is in a group led by the guide.

Many people in the world like traveling. By traveling, people can know different cultures and landscape all over the world. But which one is the best way to travel, in a group led by the guide or completely by the travelers themselves. This question is so controversial that different people will have different answers due to their different background experience and conflicting values. Some might prefer to travel in a group led by the guide while others might prefer to travel by themselves. In my opinion, I agree with the statement that the best way to travel is in a group led by the guide.

Firstly, I have to admit that it is more free for people to travel by themselves. They can decide all by theirselves. For example, they can decide their own itenery  without considering about others. They do not have to consider whether their action will influence other travellers in the same group. They can do everything they like.

However, there are some obvious disadvantages if people travel all by themselves. Absolute freedom is not always good. They have to pick up the route by themselves while others in a group never have to worry about that because the experienced guides have already pick a typical route for them. Moreover, the guides always give the group a lot of information about the places they are visiting while those who travel by themselves have to find those information all by themselves.

Additionally, people traveling in a group can enjoy some advantages that individual travelers can never enjoy. For instance, travelers in a group can enjoy a sizable discount in many items which will not be enjoyed by individual travelers. When faced with problems, individual travelers will found them more helpless than travelers in a group.

To sum up, different people have different preference. It is possible that people will never arrive at an agreement in such a controversial issue. Nevertheless, based on the analysis above, people do not have to go too far to see that the best way to travel is in a group led by a guide.

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Many people in the world like traveling. By traveling, people can know different cultures and landscape all over the world. But which one is the best way to travel, in a group led by the guide or completely by the travelers themselves. This question is so controversial that different people will have different answers due to their different background experience and conflicting values. Some might prefer to travel in a group led by the guide while others might prefer to travel by themselves(这句重复了). In my opinion, I agree with the statement that the best way to travel is in a group led by the guide.


Firstly, I have to admit that it is more free for people to travel by themselves(一开始还是说自己的论点比较好，后面让步太多了). They can decide all by theirselves. For example, they can decide their own itenery  without considering about others. They do not have to consider whether their action will influence other travellers in the same group. They can do everything they like. However, there are some obvious disadvantages if people travel all by themselves. Absolute freedom is not always good. They have to pick up the route by themselves while others in a group never have to worry about that because the experienced guides have already pick a typical route for them. Moreover, the guides always give the group a lot of information about the places they are visiting while those who travel by themselves have to find those information all by themselves.


应该把自己的观点多写点

Additionally, people traveling in a group can enjoy some advantages that individual travelers can never enjoy. For instance, travelers in a group can enjoy a sizable discount in many items which will not be enjoyed by individual travelers. When faced with problems, individual travelers will found them more helpless than travelers in a group.;

To sum up, different people have different preference. It is possible that people will never arrive at an agreement in such a controversial issue. Nevertheless, based on the analysis above, people do not have to go too far to see that the best way to travel is in a group led by a guide.

其实语言挺好的，缺点就是自己的观点太少了

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Many people in the world like traveling. By traveling, people can know different cultures and landscape all over the world. But which one is the best way to travel, in a group led by the guide or completely by the travelers themselves. This question is so controversial that different people will have different answers due to their different background experience用一个就好吧 and conflicting values. Some might prefer to travel in a group led by the guide while others might prefer to travel by themselves. In my opinion, I agree with the statement that the best way to travel is in a group led by the guide.

Firstly, I have to admit that it is more free--people will feel free to travel... for people to travel by themselves. They can decide all by theirselves你看. For example, they can decide their own itenery  without considering about others. They do not have to consider--think about whether their action will influence other travellers in the same group. They can do everything they like.

However, there are some obvious disadvantages if people travel all by themselves. Absolute freedom is not always good. They have to pick up--choose the route by themselves while others in a group never have to worry about that because the experienced guides have already pick a typical route for them. Moreover, the guides always give the group a lot of information about the places they are visiting while those who travel by themselves have to find those information all不用就好 by themselves

ionally, people traveling in a group can enjoy some advantages that individual travelers can never enjoy. For instance, travelers in a group can enjoy a sizable打折就表示了便宜,这个词好像没见过这用的 discount in many items which will not be enjoyed by individual travelers. When faced with problems, individual travelers will found them more helpless than travelers in a group.

different people have different preference. It is possible that people will never arrive at an agreement in such a controversial issue. Nevertheless, based on the analysis above, people do not have to go too far to see that the best way to travel is in a group led by a guide.最后一句有点迷惑. 语言不很复杂, 多数是简单句. 还是很容易理解. 我想主张跟导游, 2段写的就长了, 点一下就好.

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9.26 It is better to broad knowledge of many academic subjects than specialize on one specific subject.

There is kinds of knowledge in the world. Impossiblly can a single person learn it all. Facing with this dilemma, people usually have two options. One is to learn knowledge of as many academic subjects as they can. The other one is to specialize on one specific subject. But what option is better? This question is so controversial that different people will hold different answers due to their different experience and conflicting value. From my point of view, in such a world with firece competition, it is better for people to broad knowledge of many academic subjects than specialize on one specific subject.

The most important reason is that it is helpful for people to hold knowledge of many academic subjects to succeed. The problems people face everyday are becoming more and more complicated. For instance, not only should people who want to design a financial software know the knowledge of finance, but they also should have the knowledge of information technology. People who hold knowledge of many academic subjects are good at solving such problems.

Moerover, people who have knowledge of many acedemic subjects will have more chance than those who specialize on one specific subject. The former can deal with problems coming from different fields while the latter can only handle problems of a narrow field. For instance, if people broad knowledge of many academic subjects, they will be capable to work in different areas, and thus have more chance than those who specialize on one specific subject do.

Nevertheless, in some degree, people specializing on one specific subject have their own advantages. Because they specialize on one specific subject, they will know that subject more thorough than those who only dip on it. They are more preferable if the problem only concerns about that subject. They are much more likely to succeed in those area on which need people to concentrate.  

To sum up, there are both advantages and disadvantages for both type of people. People might not be able to arrive at an agreement on such a controversial issue. However, based on the analysis above, people do not need to go so far to see that it is better to broad knowledge of many academic subjects than specialize on one specific subject.

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It is better to broad knowledge of many academic subjects than specialize on one specific subject.
There is kinds of knowledge in the world.（这句好像简单了） Impossiblly can a single person learn it all.(倒装句啊~) Facing with this dilemma, people usually have two options. One is to learn knowledge of as many academic subjects as they can. The other one is to specialize on one specific subject. But what option is better? This question is so controversial that different people will hold different answers due to their different experience and conflicting value. From my point of view, in such a world with firece competition, it is better for people to broad knowledge of many academic subjects than specialize on one specific subject.; ?1 O' s6 Y% j* U: J
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The most important reason is that it is helpful for people to hold knowledge of many academic subjects to succeed. The problems people face everyday are becoming more and more complicated. For instance, not only should people who want to design a financial software know the knowledge of finance, but they also should have the knowledge of information technology. People who hold knowledge of many academic subjects are good at solving such problems.
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Moerover, people who have knowledge of many acedemic subjects will have more chance than those who specialize on one specific subject. The former can deal with problems coming from different fields while the latter can only handle problems of a narrow field. For instance, if people broad knowledge of many academic subjects, they will be capable to work in different areas, and thus have more chance than those who specialize on one specific subject do.7 Z! w: r. y: x7 s* D  C
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Nevertheless, in some degree, people specializing on one specific subject have their own advantages. Because they specialize on one specific subject, they will know that subject more thorough than those who only dip on it. They are more preferable（这个词用的不太好） if the problem only concerns about that subject. They are much more likely to succeed in those area on which need people to concentrate.  
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To sum up, there are both advantages and disadvantages for both type of people. People might not be able to arrive at an agreement on such a controversial issue. However, based on the analysis above, people do not need to go so far to see that it is better to broad knowledge of many academic subjects than specialize on one specific subject.

整体还ok。不过我水平现在不高，有些句子怕改错，不过我觉得还可以多说些你支持的观点的理由。反面的观点说一两句就好了。或者不说。

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There is kinds of knowledge in the world. Impossiblly can a single person learn it all. Facing with(face是vt吧) this dilemma, people usually have two options. One is to learn knowledge of as many academic subjects as they can. The other one is to specialize on one specific subject. But what option is better? This question is so controversial that different people will hold different answers due to their different experience and conflicting value. From my point of view, in such a world with firece competition, it is better for people to broad knowledge of many academic subjects than specialize on one specific subject.9 `$ X: [  e" o2 P' g, X+ \3 G

The most important reason is that it is helpful for people to hold knowledge of many academic subjects to succeed. The problems people face everyday are becoming more and more complicated. For instance, not only should people who want to design a financial software know the knowledge of finance, but they also should have the knowledge of information technology. People who hold knowledge of many academic subjects are good at solving such problems.


Moerover, people who have knowledge of many acedemic subjects will have more chance than those who specialize on one specific subject. The former can deal with problems coming from different fields while the latter can only handle problems of a narrow field. For instance, if people broad knowledge of many academic subjects, they will be capable to work in different areas, and thus have more chance than those who specialize on one specific subject do.2 j+ _, D& d+ F. h$ j

Nevertheless, in some degree, people specializing on one specific subject have their own advantages. Because they specialize on one specific subject, they will know that subject more thorough than those who only dip on it. They are more preferable if the problem only concerns about that subject. They are much more likely to succeed in those area on which need people to concentrate.  

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To sum up, there are both advantages and disadvantages for both type of people. People might not be able to arrive at an agreement on such a controversial issue. However, based on the analysis above, people do not need to go so far to see that it is better to broad knowledge of many academic subjects than specialize on one specific subject.

结构很好，G作文就是这个样子的，呵呵
其实没什么问题，可能加一些比较复杂的句子会提高整体质量，我作文也就那样，不敢提太多意见了。。。

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9.29

internet access and public transportation.

In some degree, internet seems like public transportation. Internet was once regarded as the high way of information. Internet and public transportation are both kind of media for people to contact with the outside world. It is also necessary for government to improve the internet access and public transportation. However, which should the government improve if its fund is limited? The question is so controversial that different people will have different answers due to their own experience. In my opinion, the government should improve the public transportation.

First of all, the public transportation is indispensable for nearly people's daily life and more important than internet. Not all people have their own cars. Additionally, terrible traffic condition usually forces people to choose public transportation such as subway or bus. Most people commute by public transportation. The public transportation of the best cities is also good. I can not image what will happen if the public transportation break down. Most people might not be able to go to their workplace.

Moreover, it is obivous that people who rely on public transportation are more than those who use internet. Nearly everyone use public transportation while only part of people use internet. For example, in the community I live, most 40's or older people know nothing about internet. But they have to use public transportation.

I have to admit that internet is also very important. Via it, people can achieve information all over world without stepping out their rooms. Some people even choose to work at home through internet. Nonetheless, public transportation is still more important. Without internet, we can still read newspaper, watch TV or use telephone. But without public transportation, we will lose the lives we are enjoying now.

To sum up, thought both public transportation and internet are very important to our life, the government should give the former more priority, because it is more important for our daily life.

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9.29
Entertainment movie and serious movie

Since the invention of the first modern movie, the kind of movie has increased sharply. There are kinds of movie nowadays. Some movies are serious while some others are only for entertainment. Which one would you choose, the serious one or the entertainment one? This question is so controversial that different people will hold different answers due to their different experience and conflicting values. In my opinion, entertainment movies are the better choice.

Moive plays different roles in different people's lives. I mostly watch movie for entertainment. I always enjoy the movie time after hard work. To me, movie is a good choice for relax. For example, I usually go to watch movie at weekend for relax. Serious movies are not suitable for this role. Seldom will people choose serious movies for relax.

Moreover, entertainment movies are usually more impressive than serious one. There are so many rules for serious movies that they seems to be the same in some prospective. Their directors are not able to utilize their imagination. However, the situation is completely different referring to entertainment movies. Directors of entertainment movies can completely make use of their imagination, because their only goal is to provide entertainment and there is nearly no rules.

Although serious movies exists for their own reason, such as to memorize an important time or event, it is obvious that entertainment movies have taken nearly every percent of the movie market. People show their mind by their choice. Most people prefer entertainment movies to serious movies.

I have to admit that there still are many people who like serious movies. However, the trend can not be changed. Perhaps not all people will agree with me, but based on the analysis above, it is not difficult for people to reach the conclusion that entertainment movies are the better choice for most people.

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In some degree（to some degree), internet seems like public transportation. Internet was once regarded as the high way(信息高速公路应该是information superhighway) of information. Internet and public transportation are both kind of media for people to contact with the outside world. It is also necessary for government to improve the internet access and public transportation. However, which should the government improve if its fund is limited? The question is so controversial that different people will have different answers due to their own experience. In my opinion, the government should improve the public transportation.

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First of all, the public transportation is indispensable for nearly people's daily life and more important than internet. Not all people have their own cars. Additionally, terrible traffic condition usually forces people to choose public transportation such as subway or bus. Most people commute by public transportation. The public transportation of the best cities is also good. I can not image what will happen if the public transportation breaks down. Most people might not be able to go to their workplace.

Moreover, it is obivous that people who rely on public transportation are more than those who use internet. Nearly everyone use public transportation while only part of people use internet. For example, in the community I live, most 40's or older people know nothing about internet. But they have to use public transportation.# T" E$ A4 V* A. U
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I have to admit that internet is also very important. Via it, people can achieve information all over world without stepping out their rooms. Some people even choose to work at home through internet. Nonetheless, public transportation is still more important. Without internet, we can still read newspaper, watch TV or use telephone. But without public transportation, we will lose the lives we are enjoying now.

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To sum up, thought both public transportation and internet are very important to our life, the government should give the former more priority, because it is more important for our daily life.
important 用了很多遍了，可以换着使用其他的同义词组比如vital之类的
没什么语法错误之类的，可以用一些难一点的句子啊\(^o^)/~一起加油啊

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Entertainment movie and serious movie
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8 y- x  s0 n( d" J. t! C) [7 A' ~Sincethe invention of the first modern movie, the kind of movie hasincreased sharply. There are kinds of movie nowadays. Some movies areserious while some others are only for entertainment. Which one wouldyou choose, the serious one or the entertainment one? This question isso controversial that different people will hold different answers dueto their different experience and conflicting values. In my opinion,entertainment movies are the better choice.
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Moive plays different roles in different people's lives. I mostly(usually) watchmovie for entertainment. I always enjoy the movie time after hard work.To me, movie is a good choice for relax. For example, I usually go towatch movie at weekend for relax. Serious movies are not suitable forthis role. Seldom will people choose serious movies for relax.（建议再展开一些论证，可以举例说怎么让你放松的,例子要说的具体些）
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+ H' A) g9 ?  c( N5 n* c3 {7 B+ oMoreover,entertainment movies are usually more impressive than serious one.There are so many rules for serious movies that they seems to be thesame in some prospective.(there are a myriad of rules for serious movies, as a result, they become so rigid that hardly to attract audiences's attention) Their directors are not able (are unable/fail  )to utilize theirimagination. However, the situation is completely different referringto entertainment movies. Directors of entertainment movies cancompletely make use of their imagination, because their only goal is toprovide entertainment and there is nearly no rules( amuse peopel and they set little rules).
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; j& q3 Z- [" P: [6 d4 z% i" ]Ihave to admit that there still are many people who like serious movies.However, the trend can not be changed. Perhaps not all people willagree with me, but based on the analysis above, it is not difficult forpeople to reach the conclusion that entertainment movies are the betterchoice for most people.

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Since the invention of the first modern movie, the kind of movie has increased sharply. There are （我认为这里应该加many）kinds of movie（这里应该是复数吧） nowadays. Some movies are serious while some others are only for entertainment. Which one would you choose,  the serious one or the entertainment one? This question is so controversial that different people will hold different answers due to their different experience and conflicting values. In my opinion, entertainment movies are the better choice.5 f  R# H/ i9 Y. \1 O
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Moive（拼写错误） plays different roles in different people's lives. I mostly watch movie for entertainment. I always enjoy the movie time after hard work.. To me, movie is a good choice for relax. For example, I usually go to watch movie at weekend for relax.（我感觉这句重复了） Serious movies are not suitable for this role. Seldom will people choose serious movies for relax.

Moreover, entertainment movies are usually more impressive than serious one. There are so many rules for serious movies that they seems to be the same in some prospective（这个词是形容词吧，用在这里不明白怎么回事）. Their directors are not able to utilize their imagination. However, the situation is completely different referring to entertainment movies. Directors of entertainment movies can completely make use of their imagination, because their only goal is to provide entertainment and there is nearly no rules.# g  k! Z% y( q+ p

Although serious movies exists for their own reason（复数吧）, such as to memorize an important time or event, it is obvious that entertainment movies have taken nearly every percent of the movie market. People show their mind by their choice. Most people prefer entertainment movies to serious movies.

I have to admit that there still are（应该是there are still吧） many people who like serious movies. However, the trend can not be changed. Perhaps not all people will agree with me, but based on the analysis above, it is not difficult for people to reach the conclusion that entertainment movies are the better choice for most people.
我作文水平也不高，所以尽管我很认真改了，但是不免会有些错误没发现或者我把对的改错了，还希望你见谅！你这篇作文给我的感觉就是稍微有点乱，思路不是很清晰的样子！希望继续努力！

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10.2 to solve the problems present and future is it necessary to understand the past

There is an old saying that "Human's life is all about finding problems and solving problems." We face kinds of problems every day. While we might have the same problem at different time, we usually find problem we face keep varying. Is it necessary for us to understand the past if we want to solve the present problems and future ones? Different people will hold different answers due to their different experience and conflicting values. My answer to the question above is "Yes".

First of all, understanding the past will help us to avoid the mistakes that we made before when we solve the new problem. Just as mentioned above, sometimes we have to deal with the problems that happen again and again. We might not have experience dealing with them. But perhaps someone else has. We can make better decision if we understand such knowledge. For example, when a climber plans to climb a mountain which he has never climbed, he will find the records of other climbers who have climbed that mountain. From the record, he can find what kind of mistakes his precursors made and bypass them.

Additionally, not only does understanding the past help us to avoid mistakes, but it also help us to solve problems more efficiently. Facing a problem that others have solved before, we do not necessarily to find our own answer. We can borrow ideas from others. It will save us a lot of time and we can also modify those ideas according to our circumstance. For instance, as a software programmer, I have to solve many software errors everyday. Some of them are new to me, nevertheless, someone else might has already found the solution. I will find whether other people have the solution through Internet. If the result is positive, I can solve the problem immediately.

Thought understanding the past might constrain out mind from being creative, in most cases it is the more efficient way to the answer. Researches indicate that most problems we face every day are simple and repeated. The best way for us to tackle these problems is to look back and find the old answer, although at times we have to somehow modify the old one according to the new environment.

To sum up, this issue is so controversial that people might not arrive at an agreement at all. Nonetheless, based on the analysis above, people do not have to go so far to reach that it is necessary to understand the past if we want to solve the present and future problems.

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There is an old saying that "Human's life is all about finding problems and solving problems." We face kinds of problems every day. While we might have the same problem at different time, we usually find problem we face keep varying.前面的problem貌似多了 Is it necessary for us to understand the past if we want to solve the present problems and future ones? Different people will hold different answers due to their different experience and conflicting values. My answer to the question above is "Yes".开头最好再说下你的观点instead of "yea"

First of all, understanding the past will help us to avoid the mistakes that we made before when we solve the new problem. Just as mentioned above, sometimes we have to deal with the problems that happen again and again. We might not have experience dealing with them. But perhaps someone else has. We can make better decision if we understand such knowledge. For example, when a climber plans to climb a mountain which he has never climbed, he will find the records of other climbers who have climbed that mountain. From the record, he can find what kind of mistakes his precursors made and bypass them. 语言句子简洁我喜欢,读着舒服. 例子很贴近生活.

Additionally, not only does understanding the past help us to avoid mistakes, but it also help us to solve problems more efficiently. Facing a problem that others have solved before, we do not necessarily to find our own answer. We can borrow ideas from others. It will--, which will save us a lot of time and. We we can also modify those ideas according to our circumstance. For instance, as a software programmer, I have to solve many software errors everyday. Some of them are new to me, nevertheless, someone else might has already found the solution. I will find whether other people have the solution through Internet. If the result is positive, I can solve the problem immediately.

Thought understanding the past might constrain out mind from being creative, in most cases it is the more efficient way to the answer. Researches indicate that most problems we face every day are simple and repeated. The best way for us to tackle these problems is to look back and find the old answer, although at times we have to somehow modify the old one according to the new environment.* H# }8 w1 z0 n
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To sum up, this issue is so controversial that people might not arrive at an agreement at all. Nonetheless, based on the analysis above, people do not have to go so far to reach that it is necessary to understand the past if we want to solve the present and future problems. 字数很多啊, 羡慕. 结尾很好很总结性.不好意思下午想给你看, 后来困了就睡了..嘿嘿