9.30 作业（进军美利坚）

joyceliuUID: 2477232

In the recent years, there is a general controversyover the issue which kind of movie is better, the entertain movie or theserious one. Although some people claim that from watching serious films, theycan learn more about the rules of life, personally, I prefer to the amusedmovies, and I will provide concrete evidences to demonstrate my point of view.

First and foremost, there is no denying that entertainmovies enable people to relieve themselves from the stress to a large degree.It is universally acknowledged that along with the rapid development oftechnology as well as economy, people suffer from a growing number of pressuresfrom either daily lives or their workplace. So a lot of pressure-relateddiseases appeared, which have become a serious killer of human life. In orderto keep healthy, we should not only work hard to make our dreams come true, butalso learn how to relax ourselves to some extent. In fact, enjoying amusedfilms is a very effective method to relax. As the original purpose of designingan entertain movie is to make people laugh, the exaggerated performance,interesting plot, as well as the excellent actors, all these factors will help audiencesforget their unhappy experiences as quickly as possible.

In the second place, through watching the amused movies,people can achieve more topics when having conversation with their friends. Asis known to all, nowadays, the most popular news is absolutely relate to the entertainmentarea, such as the private lives of certain movie stars or some interestingstory happened in a hot film. Therefore talking about the entertainment thingshas gradually become a fashion among young people. If you have never watchthose recent popular movies, you will be kicked out from other’s gossipsdefinitely, and eventually you will find yourself lost even the friendship withthose friends.

Last but not least, similar to the serious films,entertain movies could also inspire people to think of the philosophy of life.For instance, nobody will deny that the silent movies of Charlie Chaplin are sohumorous that make every audiences to break into a big laugh. What is more,after laughing it also promote us to think about the essence behind the surfacephenomenon.

To sum up, taking into amount of the discussionmentioned above, we may safely reach the conclusion that it is wise andreasonable to enjoy entertain movies.
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doubledianUID: 2661760

In the recent years, there is a general controversy over the issue which kind of movie is better, the entertain movie or the serious one. Although some people claim that from watching serious films, they can learn more about the rules of life, personally, I prefer to the amused movies, and I will provide concrete evidences to demonstrate my point of view.

First and foremost, there is no denying that entertain movies enable people to relieve themselves from the stress to a large degree. It is universally acknowledged that along with the rapid development of technology as well as economy, people suffer from a growing number of pressures from either daily lives or their workplace（这个地方是不是应该用复数呢）. So a lot of pressure-related diseases appeared, which have become a serious killer of human life. In order to keep healthy, we should not only work hard to make our dreams come true, but also learn how to relax ourselves to some extent. In fact, enjoying amused films is a very effective method to relax. As the original purpose of designing an entertain movie is to make people laugh, the exaggerated performance, interesting plot, as well as the excellent actors, all these factors will help audiences forget their unhappy experiences as quickly as possible.
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In the second place, through watching the amused movies, people can achieve more topics when having conversation with their friends. As is known to all, nowadays, the most popular news is absolutely relate to the entertainment area,  such as the private lives of certain movie stars or some interesting story（复数） happened in a hot film. Therefore talking about the entertainment thingshas（这个词我不明白是怎么回事） gradually become a fashion among young people. If you have never watch those recent popular movies, you will be kicked out from other’s gossips definitely, and eventually you will find yourself lost even the friendship with those friends. & ?. Q" d( H( A( k( T% ~9 x
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Last but not least, similar to the serious films, entertain movies could also inspire people to think of the philosophy of life. For instance, nobody will deny that the silent movies of Charlie Chaplin are sohumorous that make every audiences to break into a big laugh. What is more, after laughing it also promote us to think about the essence behind the surface phenomenon.   b4 H8 n: C' @6 ]$ f
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To sum up, taking into amount of the discussion mentioned above, we may safely reach the conclusion that it is wise and reasonable to enjoy entertain movies.

我是第二次改你的作文，感觉的时候就是在读一篇例文，思路清晰，高级词汇到处可见，能不能传授点经验啊？感觉你很厉害的，再就是想跟你提点意见，你写的作文有很多时候都是两个单词连在一起拼了，比如but also你总是连着拼butalso，中间没有空格，不知道这个在考试的时候会不会对你的成绩有影响，希望能注意下
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joyceliuUID: 2477232

多练就好了， 我也很菜的。原文是有空格的，粘上来就没了。

spyUID: 2295035

In the recent years, there is a general controversyover the issue(that) which kind of movie is better, the entertain movie or the serious one. Although some people claim that from watching serious films, they can learn more about the rules of life, personally, I prefer to the amused movies, and I will provide concrete evidences to demonstrate my point of view.

First and foremost, there is no denying that entertain movies enable people to relieve themselves from the stress to a large degree.It is universally acknowledged that along with the rapid development of technology as well as economy, people suffer from a growing number of pressures from either daily lives or their workplace. So a lot of pressure-related diseases appeared, which have become a serious killer of human life. In orderto keep healthy, we should not only work hard to make our dreams come true, butalso learn how to relax ourselves to some extent. In fact, enjoying amused films is a very effective method to relax. As the original purpose of designingan entertain movie is to make people laugh(这句有点语法问题), the exaggerated performance,interesting plot, as well as the excellent actors, all these factors will help audiences forget their unhappy experiences(experience) as quickly as possible.

In the second place, through watching the amused movies,people can achieve more topics when having conversation with their friends. As is known to all, nowadays, the most popular news is absolutely relate(ed) to the entertainment area, such as the private lives of certain movie stars or some interesting story(stories) happened in a hot film. Therefore talking about the entertainment thingshas gradually become a fashion among young people. If you have never watch those recent popular movies, you will be kicked out from other’s gossips definitely, and eventually you will find yourself lost even the friendship withthose friends.

Last but not least, similar to the serious films,entertain movies could also inspire people to think of the philosophy of life.For instance, nobody will deny that the silent movies of Charlie Chaplin are so humorous that make every audiences to break into a big laugh. What is more,after laughing it also promote us to think about the essence behind the surfacephenomenon.

To sum up, taking into amount of the discussionmentioned above, we may safely reach the conclusion that it is wise andreasonable to enjoy entertain movies.

结构组织的不错，就是有些小的语法错，找到的理由比我的好多了